Black Eyed Susan Poet Rhyme

Like Calvin Klein

You never wear cologne to work
But there you go
Out the door
In your tie
Smelling like Calvin Klein

I want to ask, "For whom?"
But I just wave good-bye
My heart is racing
I'm afraid of 
The Why

I watch you pull away
Looking for clues
A sign
I take a deep breath
Smells like Calvin Klein


(This poem is my favorite because I feel like it really captures the fear. the instant panic, the denial, and ultimately back to the fear he's cheating. )

Received 2nd place in "Your (OWN) favorite poem" contest
Received honorable mention in "Your Favourite Form" contest

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Goode Guy December 3, 2011 at 7:51 AM S.B.- a very insightful write on trust and relations...smells good. ;-)

Carol Sunshine Brown December 1, 2011 at 12:24 PM Congratulations on your featured poem this week Susan. Love, Carol

Daver Austin November 29, 2011 at 3:24 PM Great little piece, short and packs a wallop! Congrats on the selection. daver

Poet Destroyer A September 28, 2011 at 8:38 AM Hi Susan, ( again ) * here is another contest I did not congratulate..., stopping by AGAIN to give warm congratulations on my old contest. Sorry, I forgot to leave you a thank you *comment* of appreciation~ I hope you don't mind my copy paste congratulations.. Don't worry I have read this many times. lol. or how else would have I closed it with out reading. Can you accept my apology and old congrats on your poem. .p.d. the late bloomer

Carol Sunshine Brown September 21, 2011 at 3:03 PM Congratulations on your win in the contest of P.D. "Your (OWN) Favorite Poem" Susan. Love, Carol

Linda-Marie Sweetheart September 20, 2011 at 6:49 PM Congrats Susan on second place win with this favorite poem so awesome.. I like it too..luv..

Dr.Ram Mehta September 20, 2011 at 12:30 PM Congratultions on the win in the contest of P.D., Susan

Bob Quigley September 20, 2011 at 12:23 PM You succeeded in capturing that. Well done and congratulations

Natalie The Rogue Rhymer September 20, 2011 at 11:51 AM Susan-I absolutely love this! It does capture all of the emotions you describe-great job! Natalie The Rogue Rhymer September 20, 2011 at 11:54 AM If you were to ever consider changing the title...one just came to me...The Aroma of Indiscretion-Not saying you should...only if you ever wanted to :)

Gautami Phookan June 21, 2011 at 2:46 PM Congrats Susan on your win in this contest.. This is very nice and unique...love to you dear, gautami

Linda-Marie Sweetheart June 20, 2011 at 8:38 PM Congrats Susan on your HM in Brian's contest with this dynamic entry my friend..another special honor to enjoy for great poetry and creativity ..luv..

Carolyn Devonshire June 20, 2011 at 4:08 PM Oooh, this is heart wrenching, Susan. "For whom?" indeed! Congratulations on your win in Brian's contest, Love, Carolyn

Shane Solomon April 6, 2011 at 5:05 AM I am certainly not offended nor have any anger but like i said i didn't ask you to read it, neither do i need you to tell me how to express myself,for future reference you might not want to click on any of my poetry since obviously you work for the literature department and that wasn't in anger that was in all honesty

Jeffry Cohan April 6, 2011 at 3:00 AM we pluck a thought out of the ether and make it ours. People can write free verse, and bore me but your few words wrapped up, succinctly dear, every relationship I had, because when you boil love down to a syrupy substance it gets sticky at first, and then some of it can be cotton candy. I bow to the simplicity of not the poet but the majesty of a poem's essence-u commented on a poem i wrote and said "how about one on saliva and stares..I don't know if that was sarcasm, but read me today pls

Shane Solomon April 5, 2011 at 10:39 AM I posted my poem for my benefit not yours if it did not have what you wanted to read i don't recall attaching a note that said "please read me" if i did then maybe thats where the confusion comes in, secondly poetry doesn't always have to have an emotion from the poet just a thought which is what i gave u nuthing more so sorry that a person like you gets easily offended with online poetry

Adeleke Adeite April 5, 2011 at 9:34 AM Lovely lines sweet friend, I love the fine flow of witty words in this piece, you're awesome with this. Thanks for your lovely comment on my piece 'in the mix with immortality'. Have a great week. Peace n love. Adeleke.

Shane Solomon April 5, 2011 at 9:26 AM My poem apocalyptic now is not meant to give you or anybody that is reading it an intended emotion, the poem is vague in terms of you conveying your own emotion with that being said read the bible an maybe you can assess an intention on your own without me spelling abcd

Linda-Marie Sweetheart April 5, 2011 at 7:48 AM Cute and cleverly penned Susan.. expressive lines saying much with a twist on Calvin Klein reference.. unique and original luv.. thankxx for your sweet comment on A Tear for J.J....he is one of five sons.. his brothers miss him still even though all are grown now.. appreciate the luv..

Cherie Durbin April 4, 2011 at 1:04 PM Uh-oh. Watch that man!

Carol Sunshine Brown April 4, 2011 at 12:28 PM I enjoyed reading your poetry today and will be back again soon to read more Susan. May you have a week of good health, joy and sunshine to light up your life. Love, Carol