Like Burnt-Out Logs

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Burnt-out logs on firedogs, by Suzette Richards - image generated.

Like burnt-out logs on ice-cold firedogs nudge, 
emotions crumble at tentative touch.
 

In Iambic Pentameter: Stressed syllables are in bold.

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Kim Rodrigues

Date: 4/19/2023 6:03:00 AM

Very nice! Love the use of “firedogs” Your poem so rich in meaning and imagery!

Suzette Richards
Date: 4/19/2023 10:22:00 AM

Thanks, Kim

Daniel Turner

Date: 4/19/2023 3:29:00 AM

Interesting, Suzette. I'm guessing here but by rhyme you mean spelling and or phonetically, correct? Because my southern dialect doesn't pronounce crouch (ouch) like touch (much)

Daniel Turner
Date: 4/19/2023 3:59:00 AM

it's all good

Suzette Richards
Date: 4/19/2023 3:58:00 AM

I welcome it. I'm rushing as my electric supply will go off in a few min for 4 hours due to the rolling blackouts in my country. Sorry.

Daniel Turner
Date: 4/19/2023 3:51:00 AM

Wasn't trying to be rude. just looking for a little more enlightenment.

Suzette Richards
Date: 4/19/2023 3:49:00 AM

Lets just go with "Eye Rhyme", if it is alright with you? Well spotted, Daniel. I'm thinking "clutch" & "touch". What do you think?