Like a Solitary Swan

Like a motionless swan beside the lake ,alone under the cherry blossom , the silence of the moon , and waking leaves. Far from the eyes that loved her , far from the hands that touched her Far from the eager tenderness of his breathing breeze . Far from secret whispers, Far from dark roast coffee beans with aniseed Far from changing faces, far from vacant spaces, far from cloying lips that turned so bitter-sweet. Close to melancholic stars ,beneath passing clouds Close to murky dusk ,acid rain and foggy shrouds Solitary, She performs her last ballet , down the hill The warmth of his bare spirit waltzing softly upon her skin.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015



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Date: 6/8/2016 11:38:00 AM
Love your swan poems. : )
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Date: 11/15/2015 5:22:00 PM
this is SO beautiful, Charma. Truly a gem.
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Date: 11/12/2015 11:18:00 AM
"Bare spirit," indeed. Such sensitivity deserves better. daver
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Date: 10/30/2015 7:54:00 PM
Fantastic in its beauty and flow. A true image and mind feat. A7
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Date: 10/27/2015 12:24:00 AM
Just re- reading this again!That last line sent shivers!!! Niice!
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Date: 10/25/2015 1:52:00 PM
I really enjoyed this poem of yours, Charmaine. It is certainly most elegant...Nicely done! My very best regards! :) john
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Date: 10/25/2015 4:22:00 AM
Languoring in the memories of what once made life happier. Now, overcome by sadness she performs "her last ballet". Very beautifully expressed, Charm! #7 ~ Have a lovely weekend. // paul
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Date: 10/22/2015 3:06:00 PM
they say it was an ugly duckling....that manifested Beautifully, inspiring knees buckling....the Beautiful swan, so graceful, so majestic....much like the Beauty of your words, that's what we all expected....;)
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Date: 10/20/2015 6:10:00 PM
Wow......once again you capture the scene as if it is a beautiful painting coming to life. So delicately the dance is performed. :) Lovely, Charmaine !
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Date: 10/20/2015 5:41:00 PM
Did the swan jump due to its loneliness? How sad! What an emotion evoking poem!
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Charmaine Chircop
Date: 10/21/2015 6:17:00 AM
I wasn't thinking of the swan jumping down the hill..I was thinking of a lake that is down the hill where She dances..She is down the hill cuz she is sad and alone.. She cannot dance up the hill again cuz its her last ballet..but in her last ballet her love's spirit dances with her..So she is alone but not yet alone. Thanks for reading R.
Date: 10/20/2015 5:16:00 PM
such sad solitary imagery but there is hope in the final line :-) hugs Janxx
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Date: 10/20/2015 5:11:00 PM
Very beautifully written Charma but I can feel the sadness of being alone. You will never be alone. His spirit will always be by your side.
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