Lifting the Veil

Lifting the Veil

You see, Mr Bilton, Sir
This trumpet that you gave me
Fails my musical sense to stir
A guitar would surely save me

A guitar is all I yearn
Should I whinge and whine and wail
Or will His Dominance make mine turn
A whiter shade of pale

My puny chest draws deep a breath
My lips pucker to tweet
The notes inside were lost to death
Instead of sounding sweet

Sorry Sir, embarrassed I
For all that I exhale
Leaves the effort that I ply
A whiter shade of pale

Relenting to the obvious
He throws at me a strummy
It ain’t no Stradivarius
But sits well on me tummy

I plucks vibrations on the strings
My muse it lifts the veil
For on his rosy cheek there clings
A whiter shade of pale.


For Arcy’s, ‘Sing to Me’ Contest
Inspired by; Whiter Shade of Pale

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014



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Date: 4/1/2014 3:34:00 PM
One of the greatest songs ever written/sung. Annie Lennex & Joe Cocker do it very well. Maybe because they're two of my fav singers :) You won with this poem " right" It couldn't be any other way :) Going to fav !!!
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Date: 3/16/2014 5:09:00 PM
I happened on your comment again. Since I find no new poems to read, I am reading comments I have not seen.haha. I've turned off notifications at my Hotmail so I have no idea any more how many comments are waiting for me here. It was just crowding my box. tt's nice we have so many options here.
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Date: 3/10/2014 4:08:00 PM
Just needed a different axe... One of my favorite songs from the 60's. Congratulations!
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Date: 3/10/2014 6:38:00 AM
Lovely write. Congratulations on the fine win, richard
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Date: 3/9/2014 10:55:00 AM
Great job, Richard. Thanks for entering and congrats on your placement :)
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Richard D Seal
Date: 3/9/2014 6:20:00 PM
Hi Arcy, thanks for the placement, most happy, and writing this brought back some good memories.
Date: 2/24/2014 8:53:00 AM
A most entertaining piece Rich, I also enjoyed reading all the comments.
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Richard D Seal
Date: 2/27/2014 7:05:00 PM
Me too Rick, I spend most of my time on the comments
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/24/2014 8:16:00 PM
I have to admit for me it is more than half the fun.
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Richard D Seal
Date: 2/24/2014 6:07:00 PM
Thanks for the comment Rick, yes I enjoy the commenting myself
Date: 2/23/2014 6:09:00 PM
Just read your reply on my comment on this one. (I don't usually see comments at the place where I have commented, but I guess a lot of Soupers are doing that now) Anyway, yes, I got the sense that the song was a dream too. NO wonder it makes no sense to me. Dreams rarely do!!)
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Richard D Seal
Date: 2/23/2014 7:28:00 PM
Yes, I know your M.O. is to comment on your commenters poems as a reponse, which is good. I always try to use this reply facility as it seems more personal, and go look at their poems. Of course your method allows you to get round a lot more, so may be the better option for you. I only have a small circle. Don't give up on those dreams Petal, they are a fantastic source of inspiration.
Date: 2/23/2014 10:50:00 AM
I love this.
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Richard D Seal
Date: 2/23/2014 7:19:00 PM
I think this is the shortest comment I've ever received haha, but those three little words say it all. Thank you my little Desert Orchid, thank you
Date: 2/21/2014 8:04:00 PM
boy am I ever jealous I could not think of something like this. that was MY song of choice. I have always loved its tune. But after I printed out its lyrics to try to really study it, I realized I did not comprehend a damn thing it was talking about. Good grief. Why can't I get that song??? Anyway, sure love what you did with your poem. it's actually clearer to me than that song!!
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Richard D Seal
Date: 2/22/2014 7:01:00 PM
This is based on a true story, Mr Bilton was our music Master, a hard man, he was laying on a school concert and this song was in it. I got the better of him with this one as the song was such a hit at the time I'd sorta learnt it on guitar beforehand, enough to recognise it anyway lol. I've always interpreted the lyrics as him dreaming through a drunken night out, I dunno haha
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