Richard D Seal Poet Quatern

Lifting the Veil

Lifting the Veil

You see, Mr Bilton, Sir
This trumpet that you gave me
Fails my musical sense to stir
A guitar would surely save me

A guitar is all I yearn
Should I whinge and whine and wail
Or will His Dominance make mine turn
A whiter shade of pale

My puny chest draws deep a breath
My lips pucker to tweet
The notes inside were lost to death
Instead of sounding sweet

Sorry Sir, embarrassed I
For all that I exhale
Leaves the effort that I ply
A whiter shade of pale

Relenting to the obvious
He throws at me a strummy
It ain’t no Stradivarius
But sits well on me tummy

I plucks vibrations on the strings
My muse it lifts the veil
For on his rosy cheek there clings
A whiter shade of pale.


For Arcy’s, ‘Sing to Me’ Contest
Inspired by; Whiter Shade of Pale

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Debbie Duncan April 1, 2014 at 3:34 PM One of the greatest songs ever written/sung. Annie Lennex & Joe Cocker do it very well. Maybe because they're two of my fav singers :) You won with this poem " right" It couldn't be any other way :) Going to fav !!!

Andrea Dietrich March 16, 2014 at 5:09 PM I happened on your comment again. Since I find no new poems to read, I am reading comments I have not seen.haha. I've turned off notifications at my Hotmail so I have no idea any more how many comments are waiting for me here. It was just crowding my box. tt's nice we have so many options here.

Roy Jerden March 10, 2014 at 4:08 PM Just needed a different axe... One of my favorite songs from the 60's. Congratulations!

Dr.Ram Mehta March 10, 2014 at 6:38 AM Lovely write. Congratulations on the fine win, richard

Just That Archaic Poet March 9, 2014 at 10:55 AM Great job, Richard. Thanks for entering and congrats on your placement :) Richard D Seal March 9, 2014 at 6:20 PM Hi Arcy, thanks for the placement, most happy, and writing this brought back some good memories.

Richard Lamoureux February 24, 2014 at 8:53 AM A most entertaining piece Rich, I also enjoyed reading all the comments. Richard D Seal February 27, 2014 at 7:05 PM Me too Rick, I spend most of my time on the comments Richard Lamoureux February 24, 2014 at 8:16 PM I have to admit for me it is more than half the fun. Richard D Seal February 24, 2014 at 6:07 PM Thanks for the comment Rick, yes I enjoy the commenting myself

Andrea Dietrich February 23, 2014 at 6:09 PM Just read your reply on my comment on this one. (I don't usually see comments at the place where I have commented, but I guess a lot of Soupers are doing that now) Anyway, yes, I got the sense that the song was a dream too. NO wonder it makes no sense to me. Dreams rarely do!!) Richard D Seal February 23, 2014 at 7:28 PM Yes, I know your M.O. is to comment on your commenters poems as a reponse, which is good. I always try to use this reply facility as it seems more personal, and go look at their poems. Of course your method allows you to get round a lot more, so may be the better option for you. I only have a small circle. Don't give up on those dreams Petal, they are a fantastic source of inspiration.

Eileen Manassian February 23, 2014 at 10:50 AM I love this. Richard D Seal February 23, 2014 at 7:19 PM I think this is the shortest comment I've ever received haha, but those three little words say it all. Thank you my little Desert Orchid, thank you

Andrea Dietrich February 21, 2014 at 8:04 PM boy am I ever jealous I could not think of something like this. that was MY song of choice. I have always loved its tune. But after I printed out its lyrics to try to really study it, I realized I did not comprehend a damn thing it was talking about. Good grief. Why can't I get that song??? Anyway, sure love what you did with your poem. it's actually clearer to me than that song!! Richard D Seal February 22, 2014 at 7:01 PM This is based on a true story, Mr Bilton was our music Master, a hard man, he was laying on a school concert and this song was in it. I got the better of him with this one as the song was such a hit at the time I'd sorta learnt it on guitar beforehand, enough to recognise it anyway lol. I've always interpreted the lyrics as him dreaming through a drunken night out, I dunno haha