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Life Or Death - One Liner

Slow the barrel tumbles, with a heavy hand I feel the trigger and my heart click.

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Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 11/2/2016 11:32:00 AM

I enjoyed your poetry. Question. How would I know that my poem is in the contest? I did a poem about a town and I am not sure it is if it is submitted.I did my poem twice then took one of the same poem out. Need advice thank you.

Tim Smith
Date: 11/2/2016 1:46:00 PM

Go into the members area and check contests there.

Eve Roper

Date: 10/16/2016 8:34:00 PM

Very good, Tim, congratulations on your win Hugs Eve

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/16/2016 7:35:00 PM

I agree with Nette. It's quite dramatic. WELL DONE, Tim. Congrats

Kai Michael Neumann

Date: 10/15/2016 2:18:00 PM

Click. Well done.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 10/15/2016 1:28:00 AM

tim, how dramatic can this be... sweet congrats and huggs

Arthur Vaso

Date: 10/14/2016 11:30:00 PM

Nice, I cant wait for the french version! :)

Sunita U.D Palawon

Date: 10/14/2016 10:57:00 PM

Wow! well penned. Congrats. :)

Daniel Turner

Date: 10/14/2016 9:49:00 PM

Congratulations Tim on your first place one liner. Made me think of the movie "The Deer Hunter" with Robert De Niro and Christopher Walken

Alexis Y.

Date: 10/14/2016 8:32:00 PM

Hi Tim, I'm just coming back to say congratulations on your win. It was well deserved:-) Alexis

Charlie Smith

Date: 10/14/2016 8:15:00 PM

Congratulations Tim, right on target...so to speak.

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 10/14/2016 8:00:00 PM

Very vivid! Congrats Tim!

Sandra Haight

Date: 10/14/2016 6:16:00 PM

Wow...powerful, Tim. Congrats on your fine placement. Sandra

Jan Allison

Date: 10/14/2016 4:23:00 PM

So glad you posted it Tim - you got a top spot!!! Many congrats:-) hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith
Date: 10/14/2016 5:11:00 PM

*notification

Tim Smith
Date: 10/14/2016 5:09:00 PM

Thanks for letting me know Jan. I never got anything from this sponsor again.

Paul Callus

Date: 10/14/2016 12:29:00 PM

A most original take on this topic, Tim! I have a feeling you're playing Russian Roulette...life or death! Is it my turn now?!! // paul

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 10/14/2016 11:29:00 AM

Oh you chose death ..and described a chilling scene...Goosebumps Tim.. Definitely defines death in all senses.

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 10/14/2016 4:54:00 AM

Dynamic my friend, Tim! Good luck in the contest!

Eve Roper

Date: 10/13/2016 9:39:00 PM

Wow, scary, Tim, good luck in the contest Hugs Eve

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/13/2016 7:51:00 PM

Tim, you should shorten it up. It is very good and I want to see it score high!(the middle part could go out!)

Alexis Y.

Date: 10/13/2016 7:12:00 PM

Hi Tim, You managed to create dark imagery in a few words. I could sense an intense fear in each word. I wish you the best of luck the contest:-) Alexis

Ilene Bauer

Date: 10/13/2016 4:46:00 PM

ooh - this is a very different take from others i've read and i like it very much, tim...

John Lawless

Date: 10/13/2016 4:25:00 PM

Tim, that opening phrase..."Slow the barrel tumbles"....sent a cold shiver through me. A very harsh reality to too many.

Carol B.

Date: 10/13/2016 4:05:00 PM

I feel the fear :) Great one liner.

Jan Allison

Date: 10/13/2016 3:25:00 PM

so few words yet the images you conjure in my mind is so intense Tim:-) hugs jan xx 7