Life is a song

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Life is a song poetry contest
Sponsored by: Ink Empress

01/08/2004

Life is a song so tap one’s feet or bang a gong sometimes go wrong Who cares if short or pretty long once we belong Shake your booty in a sarong twerk that thin thong In California try a bong just not too strong Whether alone or with a throng do bop along

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Ink Empress

Date: 1/13/2024 8:29:00 AM

Dear David Kavanagh, this actually made me smile and i love the sense of humor that flows within your well articulated lines that also has a pinch of profound truth and wisdom, so creative and lyrical! It has a catchy cadence! very lighthearted poem, and this line i can see through that “ Shake your booty in a sarong twerk that thin thong “ hah. I can literally see someone do that! Loved that! Thank you for sharing this. Congratulations on your win:

David Kavanagh
Date: 1/13/2024 10:41:00 AM

Thanks so much IE, I honestly didn’t know what you’d make of this one, but I’m delighted you enjoyed the sarong thong line, I’ve seen it done on holiday many a time, I’m delighted with your placement, cheers David

I Am Anaya

Date: 1/12/2024 6:08:00 PM

Made me smile today, why not just be carefree , like a hippy a free spirit! What made you choose California? I think about cult leaders like Warren Jeffs and his followers, it's the young ones who are fooled. If life could only be a song for them.

I Am Anaya
Date: 1/13/2024 7:33:00 AM

I had just seen a documentary on Warren Jeffs, Latter Day Saints cult leader! haha. Yeah, Dave Navarro in both the Red Hot Chili Peppers & Janes Addiction-my guy. I really like your new vibe!

David Kavanagh
Date: 1/13/2024 4:13:00 AM

I do love double comments Anaya, I was after listening to the Chili peppers on Spotify, and they inspired this little upbeat funk poem, they’re lyrically so California! So went with the Vibe, Jane’s Addiction is a kick ass band too, I think I’ll leave the (Cult)s out of this one although I do like their music! cheers David

I Am Anaya
Date: 1/12/2024 10:04:00 PM

I have a sarong, but I don't have a thong, ha and I am pretty long! I don't twerk I sway to try to match the rhythm and energy of the songs. (Jane's Addiction). it's different kind of poetry for you, gl in the contest.