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Can you see what I see?

The unknown future, that comes like the wind with powerful gusts. The wind moves, and 
changes the soul of man. Like the changes of the desert terrain from the movement of its 
sands. The decisions of hills create chapters of mountains that ride the ridges of hearts to the 
valley of feelings that can awake the sleeping beast, the volcano’s anger. The words of lava 
flow down the valleys ears, turning feelings to ashes, as the mountains foundation cracks 
and crumbles from the lava rocks blows. The tears of rain fell from the dark clouded skies 
rolling down the ridges of hearts as a river of pain washing away ashes that was once 
feelings as the once prideful mountain is reborn into the decisions of hills create chapters of 
mountains that ride the ridges of heart to the valley of feelings that can awake the sleeping 
beast, the volcano’s anger.

Author: Jaspery Jones Jr.
           J Two
Date: June 5, 2009

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009




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Date: 7/18/2009 8:45:00 PM
Quite a ride. I think a lot of your images are beautiful... but pay attention to verb tenses. Like you say The words of lava flows instead of the words flow... but otherwise it's great =]
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Date: 6/25/2009 5:17:00 PM
The lack of form is detracting from the wonderful ideas and words. Light & Love Try grouping thoughts
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