Liars' Moon

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I was reading a song-writing teacher's website about metaphors, about pairing unassociated words together to convey a third idea.  Suddenly I had the idea about a Liar's Moon, then expanded to the idea of making false promises beneath a Liars' Moon.  I decided to go in the direction of the song remade by Tony Orlando and Dawn called He Don't Love You (Like I Love You), which originally was called He Will Break Your Heart by Jerry Butler, Calvin Carter, and Curtis Mayfield.

This is a first draft without a melody so far.

             Liars’ Moon

Seems we’ve been friends forever.
I think you know what I feel –
That we should be together,
Because what we have is real.
This guy has come between us.
I don't know how you feel.

I’m not sure what he’s after,
But I don’t think he’s sincere.
He misleads you with laughter
To keep you from hearing clear,
And blinds your eyes with stardust.
He’s somebody you should fear.

Chorus:
He flatters you with practiced lies
Meant to entice and thrill.
He admits nothing, only implies--
Luring you into his will.
His cold-hearted kisses, and his Pied-Piper's tune,
Are just sunshine promises beneath a Liars' Moon.

I want you to consider
What each of us means to you.
Who should be in your future,
And who wants the best for you.
Who you can really count on;
Who'll be your truest true-blue.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2017



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Date: 4/21/2017 6:46:00 AM
This is situation that occurs frequently and your writing could apply to so many, it is really good, and meaningful. well done.
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Mark J. Halliday
Date: 4/21/2017 11:15:00 AM
Thanks Casarah. Let's see if I can make it sing.
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