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Lemon Slices

LEMON SLICES rivulets of condensation drip down the sides of tall glasses-- iced water lemon slices flavour refreshing reflections

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Matthew Anish

Date: 7/7/2013 9:46:00 PM

I like the way you describe that marvelous drink. We need plenty of it in NYC because we are having a very hot summer. Peace & Love Matthew Anish

Kash Poet

Date: 6/29/2013 2:22:00 PM

Very good verse is this.Enjoyed the read.The total syllables in a haiku should not exceed 17:))

Adarsh Raj

Date: 6/22/2013 10:12:00 AM

beauty in a lemonade........pretty awesome......:):):):)

Timothy Hicks

Date: 6/21/2013 12:30:00 AM

... refreshing reflections. Mmm.. now just add a strawberry or two to the the mix and you got yourself the perfect summertime drink. Fabulous descriptions! I would say it's a bit lengthy considering it's a haiku... almost feels like it wants to be a sijo. But beside the point... still a great poem :)

Kim Van Breda
Date: 6/21/2013 12:42:00 AM

Yip.. at a restaurant eating Pizza-- quickly scribbled these two down :) Another P/S member also commented on the format of this Haiku. I guess I am still learning. He said this is a 'modern Haiku' , and the old format is 5/7/5 or something like that... whatever.. enjoyed the drink.

Harry Horsman

Date: 6/20/2013 3:04:00 PM

just love this...

Poet Tacito

Date: 6/16/2013 12:37:00 PM

Ok, your pizza post had me hungry. Now, I'm thirsty. You poetry creates quite the appetite, literally. :)