Leaves of Gold

It idly sat in the sunlight;
A golden adornment for a barren yard,
From which Summer’s war left unmercifully. 
As a god does salvage the earth, so did this lone tree, 
Birthing from its branches treasures for the eyes to behold.
Yet much unlike an immortal entity, 
Such life falters when the spoiled adornments descend to their graves,
And Winter’s pervading air steals an abundance of nature’s most priced artifacts.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011



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Date: 12/15/2011 4:13:00 AM
Other than a few structure issues, a beautiful poem. The tree is a wonderful metaphor as the earth (barren as a womb) is truly a mother- her womb filled with treasures. In this poem Winter is the antagonist that steals...Great use of personification here...Thanks for sharing-- The word 'It' in line one. What specifically does 'it' refer. Singular The leaves (plural) (Title) or the tree..
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Allie Ogletree
Date: 12/15/2011 9:42:00 AM
Thank you for the comment. I don't see where there is a structure issue- especially since it has no defined structure. Also, I purposely said "it" in the first line to make the reader think, "What is 'it'?" when reading it. The title isn't the best, yes, but it was only temporary. I usually end up changing the names. It defeated the purpose of making the reader curious about the whole 'it' part. Thanks you for reading and commenting.
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