Learning From a Mistake

There seemed no redemption
from a crucial mistake
while escaping dear home…
I watched stars up high
enkindling raw freedom
to search the eagle's trail.

Yet this reckless dream
bore uncertainty;
as sundown paled low
contemplation roused;
hands pounding on our gate..

Mom …she held me 
this rebel tamed, 
as prayers lit
for favors sent.

With kindness,
I embrace
adulthood;

This flame 
of life

Blessed!

................
After graduating from college at 21,
I left home without notice for three days
to challenge my need for freedom..
...................................
Laura Loo's Your Biggest Mistake
7/7/2016

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Beautiful Scars

July 8, 2016 at 8:54 AM

Nette! Wow! What an amazing form you used! I learned something new! This was remarkably beautiful lady, your words are a true gift and I am grateful to have the chance to read your poems...congrats on your placement and thank you for being a part of my contest :)-luloo

Anne-Lise Andresen

July 7, 2016 at 1:45 PM

- A part of life, leaving the safe nest - (I got married when I was 21 :))) - Great written, Nette - I wish you good luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Karam Misra

July 7, 2016 at 8:46 AM

The return of the prodigal daughter! Nicely writ, Nette.There is a certain time in our youth when we would like to break free and "find ourselves". Sometimes it becomesa very regrettable decision. It's good you learnt some life's lessons from from the experience. All the best for the contest, Nette. ~karam~

Leon Datu

July 7, 2016 at 6:50 AM

Impressive poem that I can relate to. I have walked away a few times as a late teener to feed this sense of non-conformity realizing how my parents worried a lot for my safety. Deserving a 7!

Daniel Turner

July 7, 2016 at 6:45 AM

Never good to go off without telling someone but if that is the biggest mistake you've ever made My goodness, you're an angel. Enjoyed the well structured write, nette.