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Loosely inspired by one of my very favourite poems on Soup, written by Chris Green.

https://www.poetrysoup.com/poem/and_you_were_that_shore_835919

Translucent fishes in shallow water Graze our nails curiously. I nibble your bronzed neck... Crystalline summer fantasies. Polished pebbles ripple, Curious shoreline gestures Around our lazy afternoon dream. *** May 23, 2017 Copyright © Darren White

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Patricia Cresswell

Date: 9/6/2017 8:04:00 AM

oh how lazily romantic. I can feel the heat from the sun and the cool ripples on my feet.

Darren White
Date: 9/6/2017 8:06:00 AM

Now read that poem by Chris Green ;)

Maria Williams

Date: 5/24/2017 7:10:00 AM

This poem casts a beautiful peaceful picture in my mind, summing up a wonderful lazy afternoon. A great poem Darren. A7+ My friend .... Maria

Darren White
Date: 5/24/2017 7:17:00 AM

Thanks Maria!! Also for the 7.

Lisa Ricci

Date: 5/24/2017 5:43:00 AM

Hello Darren. Good Afternoon. Sad to say I have not seen the entry by Chris. Sorry. Your entry is filled with expression. This is a grand lazy afternoon for certain. How could it not whether in dreams or reality. This is lovely. You are no penguin here Darren. Have a wonderful afternoon. Marvelous poetry Darren.

Darren White
Date: 5/24/2017 5:56:00 AM

No Lisa, I am a polished pebble in the sea, I love those. Thanks my friend! (Now go and read Chris' poem :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/24/2017 1:23:00 AM

Wow, What wonderful imagery in this one, DArren. I love it. A SEVEN

Darren White
Date: 5/24/2017 3:57:00 AM

Thank you Andrea :)

Maureen Mcgreavy

Date: 5/23/2017 2:57:00 PM

Lovely poem Sweet poet. xomo

Darren White
Date: 5/24/2017 12:56:00 AM

Thank you ma mo :)

Lenna Walker

Date: 5/23/2017 1:37:00 PM

ahhh, "Crystalline summer fantasies" !! Lovely Darren :)

Lenna Walker
Date: 5/24/2017 11:47:00 AM

yes! most definitely Darren :)

Darren White
Date: 5/23/2017 2:06:00 PM

Thanks Lenna, I hope it shows a bit of the summery shimmers in water an shifting air :)

Darren White

Date: 5/23/2017 12:06:00 PM

By writing this little poem, I hope everyone will read the little gem that is Chris' poem :)

Anne-Marie Coreggia

Date: 5/23/2017 11:56:00 AM

Darren, I'll soon be floating (pool time is near) transported by your dreamy lines and I rejoice to see that your spirits are high:) Amicalement

Darren White
Date: 5/23/2017 12:04:00 PM

Hehe, nice huh? Yes I am out of bed, I am happy :)

Tim Smith

Date: 5/23/2017 9:34:00 AM

So lovely and dances gorgeously with Chris's poem

Darren White
Date: 5/23/2017 9:54:00 AM

Thanks Tim, was so fun to do :)

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 5/23/2017 9:23:00 AM

Dreamlike, quite like a surreal painting! Enjoyed, Darren!

Darren White
Date: 5/23/2017 9:55:00 AM

Heh, thanks for the wonderful compliment Kim :)

Chris Green

Date: 5/23/2017 9:11:00 AM

This was beautiful my friend and thanks for the mention. You have enhanced my little offering with a sensual beauty that can only come from a caring and loving poetic heart. Absolutely wonderful.

Darren White
Date: 5/23/2017 9:17:00 AM

It wasn't just a mention :) Without that beautiful poem, that I read almost every day, this one would never have been born. So, thank YOU my friend!