Laying In Wait

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         Like oils on canvas
             envision this

      blades of grass weave 
          through her hair
              along with
             wild flowers 
               little flies
            and little ants

         The sun so bright
            at top of day
       she is laying in wait
                   as 
Jehovah God Almighty Created

     for my fingers like rain
       on her skin to dance

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Date: 4/20/2015 4:44:00 AM
Thank you dear poet...actually on a summer vacation myself. Apologies for too much density...maybe from the sea water that has seeped to this reader's brain...:)). Should start thinking along the same lines as these immensely talented poets on here. Where I am though, the ants and flies are in the air...don't worry I left maybe 2 sevens, I think...:)
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Date: 4/20/2015 4:14:00 AM
Saw your reply to Catie - le femme... obviously you refer to "her" in the feminine gender...however dear poet, do tell! flies and ants in her hair? ugh! :))))))
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James Peranteau
Date: 4/20/2015 4:31:00 AM
OK OK, I give 1) Did ya ever see the sun shinning so bright that you can see a stream of dust particles glistening 2) If you are out on the grass naked or not and the sun is shinning, you will see these little flies flying around( her hair, and bod) and even maybe a few little ants roaming around....it's nature fer true dear poet. 3) If you would have seen this beauty laying naked on the grass last summer, you would understand mine write 4) It could have been big green flies and mean looking red ants around this "La Femme"...it still would have been such the beautiful vision ! 5) *smiles*
Date: 4/20/2015 12:09:00 AM
Stumped...for the life of me I can't visualize the one that inspired this poem...the images in my mind just looks too improbable...:) I give up! Now, you have to tell...:)
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James Peranteau
Date: 4/20/2015 3:32:00 AM
Yea ! Finally I stumped a reader with one of my writes ! *smiles*
Date: 4/19/2015 5:16:00 PM
Those last two lines are so magical... special imagery in this verse... awesome one..you paint for us a most lovely image. Always, Laura
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Date: 4/19/2015 3:49:00 PM
very very beautifully penned James i especially adore the final couplet:-) Hugs jan xx 7 xx
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Date: 4/19/2015 2:24:00 PM
really nice poem, love it
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Date: 4/19/2015 1:49:00 PM
James, such a soothing and flowing poem, magical and romantic, 7, and thanks for visiting my poem, chasing bigfoot
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