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Last Decision of Love

“I went down to the river, I set down on the bank. I tried to think but couldn't, So I jumped in and sank.”  ? Langston Hughes

She ambled down the perfumed garden 
as the moon rose high in the darkening sky, 

Stygian night was falling rapidly, 
Dark clouds rushed up high, hiding the moon. 
A fine drizzle of rain began. She cared not.

Fragrant was the night so full of blooms,
but she went to the cool stream that ran nigh. 

She undressed and jumped though she could not swim, 
hoping that her soul would die in the rippling flow, 
Perhaps she could rid herself of the heat in her head? 
Was it not the fault of that the miscreant, betraying cheat?


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Bayles Avatar
April 22, 2025 at 2:31 PM
Great imagery, Victor.
Hind Avatar
April 20, 2025 at 10:05 PM
Very tragical end. Was beautifully written -
Goldsmith Avatar
April 19, 2025 at 10:48 AM
Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your wonderful yet sad write. Great quote and picture. Happy Easter... Have a blessed day with your win................
Edmonds  Avatar
April 19, 2025 at 2:11 AM
So sad to be that despondent one takes their own life, though one can understand that sometimes for some heartbreaks are unbearable. Poem and quote, superb Victor… Beryl
Rodrigues Avatar
April 15, 2025 at 8:26 PM
Langston Hughes is a great poet! The senses are filled, yet there is a hint of darkness. The story comes to a head as we find out she is determined to die..her forethoughts come out as the poem ends. Well done, my friend!
Rolland Avatar
April 15, 2025 at 7:46 AM
i think she is so courageous, your poem is a great poem, teaching about destiny enjoyed
Sands Avatar
April 15, 2025 at 3:36 AM
Some things hurt forever. Well written :)
Buehler Avatar
April 14, 2025 at 10:19 PM
This is a sad story of betrayed love, and the aftermath of heartbreak. Another engrossing tale from your wealth of talent, my friend. Good luck in the contest.
Poet Avatar
April 14, 2025 at 7:38 PM
A really gloomy poem. You won't ever get over the pain of treason, Victor. outstanding poem penned here
DiMino Avatar
April 14, 2025 at 11:34 AM
Yep, quite a dilemma; to truly love one must commit heart and soul to the relationship -- and the rub-- to chance the devastation from such profound feelings when betrayed.
Singh Avatar
April 14, 2025 at 7:04 AM
Another excellent poem from your pen.I feel pity for the unfortunate lady Such incidents happen. ..
Andresen Avatar
April 14, 2025 at 2:29 AM
- Failed and deeply hurt... a sensitive poem. Victor - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs
Cunningham Avatar
April 13, 2025 at 11:14 PM
Quite a sad verse Victor, betrayal is a terrible thing, you never get over it. Tom
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