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Last Decision of Love

“I went down to the river, I set down on the bank. I tried to think but couldn't, So I jumped in and sank.”  ? Langston Hughes

She ambled down the perfumed garden 
as the moon rose high in the darkening sky, 

Stygian night was falling rapidly, 
Dark clouds rushed up high, hiding the moon. 
A fine drizzle of rain began. She cared not.

Fragrant was the night so full of blooms,
but she went to the cool stream that ran nigh. 

She undressed and jumped though she could not swim, 
hoping that her soul would die in the rippling flow, 
Perhaps she could rid herself of the heat in her head? 
Was it not the fault of that the miscreant, betraying cheat?


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Date: 4/22/2025 2:31:00 PM
Great imagery, Victor.
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Date: 4/20/2025 10:05:00 PM
Very tragical end. Was beautifully written -
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Date: 4/19/2025 10:48:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your wonderful yet sad write. Great quote and picture. Happy Easter... Have a blessed day with your win................
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Date: 4/19/2025 2:11:00 AM
So sad to be that despondent one takes their own life, though one can understand that sometimes for some heartbreaks are unbearable. Poem and quote, superb Victor… Beryl
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Date: 4/15/2025 8:26:00 PM
Langston Hughes is a great poet! The senses are filled, yet there is a hint of darkness. The story comes to a head as we find out she is determined to die..her forethoughts come out as the poem ends. Well done, my friend!
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Date: 4/15/2025 7:46:00 AM
i think she is so courageous, your poem is a great poem, teaching about destiny enjoyed
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Date: 4/15/2025 3:36:00 AM
Some things hurt forever. Well written :)
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Date: 4/14/2025 10:19:00 PM
This is a sad story of betrayed love, and the aftermath of heartbreak. Another engrossing tale from your wealth of talent, my friend. Good luck in the contest.
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Date: 4/14/2025 7:38:00 PM
A really gloomy poem. You won't ever get over the pain of treason, Victor. outstanding poem penned here
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Date: 4/14/2025 11:34:00 AM
Yep, quite a dilemma; to truly love one must commit heart and soul to the relationship -- and the rub-- to chance the devastation from such profound feelings when betrayed.
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Date: 4/14/2025 7:04:00 AM
Another excellent poem from your pen.I feel pity for the unfortunate lady Such incidents happen. ..
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Date: 4/14/2025 2:29:00 AM
- Failed and deeply hurt... a sensitive poem. Victor - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs
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Date: 4/13/2025 11:14:00 PM
Quite a sad verse Victor, betrayal is a terrible thing, you never get over it. Tom
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