Andrea Dietrich Poet Sonnet

Lament of the Lovelorn

Withdrawn am I, with feelings oh so grim
and melancholy. Ever since he left,
I stay so lonely just recalling him.
My heart is shattered and I feel bereft
as if somebody died though he died not!
Alive and very well is he, and so
I can’t help feeling gloomy, for I’m fraught
with a depression that has brought me low.
It’s like a shroud that’s always over me.
Oh, how I wish to be myself once more!
But then I leave my house and chance to see
that new girl with the man I still adore.
I see no signs that show he might still care.
No wistful flicker in his eye is there.

May 31, 2023
for Emile Pinet's  Eight Word Challenge Poetry Contest
Note: The eight words required, in any order, are:
wistful... withdrawn... grim... melancholy... shroud... depression... gloomy...feelings

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James Peranteau June 4, 2023 at 5:17 PM i pray dear poet that your artistic pneuma created this Sonnet partly for the excitement uv accolades from your poetic friends here on the Soup, az you might have noticed thus far, it be so! "WTF", not because uv some inept blind and deaf selfish soul, who dun left you with the broken self (i surly hope not)...bethink Andrea; raisins are appreciated, organic warm and sweet ;) Enjoy your week....much love, james

Bill Baker June 2, 2023 at 1:42 PM Great job of intertwing the eight words for the contest, Andrea. A sad tell love lost. Good luck in the contest my friend! Bill

Joe Maverick June 1, 2023 at 2:03 PM Wistful twinkles?? And does he have wrinkles? Unrequited woes, keeps us bowed, many loads Uneven roads, well done Andrea.' Oh and Soup msil.'

Sara Kendrick June 1, 2023 at 2:03 PM Ohhhh!! Sad that one is feeling melancholy because of lost love. I enjoyed reading your contest entry. It reads like a good contender to me for the contest. Thanks for sharing and for dropping by my page. Sara

Jay Narain June 1, 2023 at 11:51 AM nice penned. It shows your emotions perfectly. Best wishes on contest.

Alexis Y. June 1, 2023 at 10:19 AM WoW! Andrea, You used the eight words and wrote such a well written on heartbreak. I found it very relatable because we all have experienced heartbreak at some point in our lives. It looks like a winner to me. Best wishes in the contest. Have a great day;-) Alexis

Sotto Poet June 1, 2023 at 10:13 AM With exquisite verse, carefully chosen words are employed to convey the depths of your sorrow and desolation since his departure, leaving you in a state of perpetual loneliness with only memories of him to cling to. Good luck.

Kim Rodrigues June 1, 2023 at 4:26 AM Very well done!

Victor Buhagiar June 1, 2023 at 12:50 AM Sublime poetry, utilizing selected words with perfection.