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Lake Vaso

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This is my first Lanterne poem, I studied the form rigorously, however I did have a problem with one line, and Tim was gracious enough to help out. I must say He’s a genius! And who else other than me is qualified to know that? Let’s make poetry great again!!!!

Skies falling, upon the ragged heart pasquil Tranquility ripples across the lake in plethora She is there, in my heart, a sweet delusion As I cross the waters wishing I was omnipotent I drop my oars on forest floor, seeking Aurore I run along the earth clad pathways towards the cloister Praying that accrued love still has her beholden Kneeling on one knee, I look up with a glint of promise The Lantern reflects back the softness of her eyes

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Doug Vinson

Date: 4/17/2017 5:48:00 PM

Arthur, sounds promising - her eyes are soft. : )

S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri

Date: 4/9/2017 1:30:00 AM

Atleast u can write of love not hate. And u do better at it than hate. But u may just choose the later and it won't make a difference to me ever. I will forever be in love with my truths. So kudos for this poetry. And the pic is awesome too coz I'm a lunarlover.

Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/9/2017 6:53:00 PM

I have no hate, although I do write about people who do, is sad when people use deceit and lies to propagate such violence. You have shown your real colors before.

Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/9/2017 6:52:00 PM

this is your truth "Muslims never commit terrorism, they only revenge and avenge and defend. The fakes may carry out terorism but majority doesnt recognise them as true real muslims. Shame on u for yor hatred."

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 4/9/2017 12:21:00 AM

I'm not sure which I enjoyed more, the poem or the "Poet's notes"!

Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/9/2017 7:02:00 PM

LOL, they were both fun to do!!! :)

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 4/8/2017 12:24:00 PM

- This was beautiful, Arthur (I've never tried this form) - well done :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/9/2017 7:02:00 PM

Thanks Anne-Lise!!! hugs!

Casarah Nance

Date: 4/7/2017 9:01:00 PM

Wow. absolutely stunning write. hugsx

Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/9/2017 7:01:00 PM

Coming from such a stunning beauty, I am all smiles!!

Paul Callus

Date: 4/7/2017 4:32:00 PM

Irrespective of the form, this poem is beautiful and captivating, Arthur. I must come bathe in the waters of Lake Vaso where inspiration can be found in abundance! // paul

Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/9/2017 6:59:00 PM

You are so kind Paul, thanks!

Chris Green

Date: 4/7/2017 6:06:00 AM

Absolutely beautiful, this piece is softly haunting and deeply enchanting. To see the reflection in her eyes is pure magic. Nicely done

Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/9/2017 6:59:00 PM

Thanks Chris, much appreciated!

Probir Gupta

Date: 4/7/2017 6:04:00 AM

beautiful softness of world in the 'Lantern" ... not a 'delusion'! ...

Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/9/2017 6:58:00 PM

Thanks Probir

Eileen Manassian

Date: 4/7/2017 4:46:00 AM

Never written in this form. You make it look easy, dear. Perhaps I should give it a go. Always look up...with a glint of promise! ;)

Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/9/2017 6:57:00 PM

I can lend you my stick, my accrued stick! :)

Jan Allison

Date: 4/7/2017 2:03:00 AM

Wow what a beauty Arthur - I must study this form and see if I can write one. Love the humour in your comment yes you are a creative genius my friend lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/9/2017 6:55:00 PM

Thanks Jan!!!!! You are very wise like an Owl!!!!

Darren White

Date: 4/7/2017 1:13:00 AM

It must be my autistic mind.... But I think this is a great poem, whatever name you want to give it :) It is an absolute beauty, and a fav for me. That lantern tho, drowned somewhere in the lake.

Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/7/2017 9:06:00 PM

Wait, I was sure it was great for all minds!!!!!! :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/6/2017 10:43:00 PM

Seven on this one

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/6/2017 10:42:00 PM

this is really really beautiful, Arthur!! I did not know Lanterne was written this way and I think Constance is asking for one in her current challenge. gotta see what is going on. (by the way, did you ever read the article on Steven Jones? I have been looking up stuff he has said since and many support him even today)

Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/7/2017 9:06:00 PM

I dont think it is unless you drink a bottle of red wine beforehand! :)

Maureen Mcgreavy

Date: 4/6/2017 10:00:00 PM

This is lovely Arthur! 7 (But not at all what I was expecting... how is your yard? ;)

Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/6/2017 10:04:00 PM

Well this started from that, and my sump pump going off too often, then Tim inspired me by calling my yard Lake Vaso!!

Tim Smith

Date: 4/6/2017 9:58:00 PM

I was happy to help keep your lantern lit

Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/6/2017 10:03:00 PM

Thanks Tim!!