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This is my first Lanterne poem, I studied the form rigorously, however I did have a problem with one line, and Tim was gracious enough  to help out. I must say He’s a genius! And who else other than me is qualified to know that? Let’s make poetry great again!!!!

Skies falling, upon the ragged heart pasquil
Tranquility ripples across the lake in plethora
She is there, in my heart, a sweet delusion
As I cross the waters wishing I was omnipotent
I drop my oars on forest floor, seeking Aurore
I run along the earth clad pathways towards the cloister
Praying that accrued love still has her beholden 
Kneeling on one knee, I look up with a glint of promise


The Lantern reflects back the softness of her eyes

Copyright © | Year Posted 2017




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Date: 4/17/2017 5:48:00 PM
Arthur, sounds promising - her eyes are soft. : )
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Date: 4/9/2017 1:30:00 AM
Atleast u can write of love not hate. And u do better at it than hate. But u may just choose the later and it won't make a difference to me ever. I will forever be in love with my truths. So kudos for this poetry. And the pic is awesome too coz I'm a lunarlover.
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Date: 4/9/2017 6:53:00 PM
I have no hate, although I do write about people who do, is sad when people use deceit and lies to propagate such violence. You have shown your real colors before.
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Date: 4/9/2017 6:52:00 PM
this is your truth "Muslims never commit terrorism, they only revenge and avenge and defend. The fakes may carry out terorism but majority doesnt recognise them as true real muslims. Shame on u for yor hatred."
Date: 4/9/2017 12:21:00 AM
I'm not sure which I enjoyed more, the poem or the "Poet's notes"!
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Date: 4/9/2017 7:02:00 PM
LOL, they were both fun to do!!! :)
Date: 4/8/2017 12:24:00 PM
- This was beautiful, Arthur (I've never tried this form) - well done :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 4/9/2017 7:02:00 PM
Thanks Anne-Lise!!! hugs!
Date: 4/7/2017 9:01:00 PM
Wow. absolutely stunning write. hugsx
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Date: 4/9/2017 7:01:00 PM
Coming from such a stunning beauty, I am all smiles!!
Date: 4/7/2017 4:32:00 PM
Irrespective of the form, this poem is beautiful and captivating, Arthur. I must come bathe in the waters of Lake Vaso where inspiration can be found in abundance! // paul
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Date: 4/9/2017 6:59:00 PM
You are so kind Paul, thanks!
Date: 4/7/2017 6:06:00 AM
Absolutely beautiful, this piece is softly haunting and deeply enchanting. To see the reflection in her eyes is pure magic. Nicely done
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Date: 4/9/2017 6:59:00 PM
Thanks Chris, much appreciated!
Date: 4/7/2017 6:04:00 AM
beautiful softness of world in the 'Lantern" ... not a 'delusion'! ...
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Date: 4/9/2017 6:58:00 PM
Thanks Probir
Date: 4/7/2017 4:46:00 AM
Never written in this form. You make it look easy, dear. Perhaps I should give it a go. Always look up...with a glint of promise! ;)
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Date: 4/9/2017 6:57:00 PM
I can lend you my stick, my accrued stick! :)
Date: 4/7/2017 2:03:00 AM
Wow what a beauty Arthur - I must study this form and see if I can write one. Love the humour in your comment yes you are a creative genius my friend lol:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 4/9/2017 6:55:00 PM
Thanks Jan!!!!! You are very wise like an Owl!!!!
Date: 4/7/2017 1:13:00 AM
It must be my autistic mind.... But I think this is a great poem, whatever name you want to give it :) It is an absolute beauty, and a fav for me. That lantern tho, drowned somewhere in the lake.
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Date: 4/7/2017 9:06:00 PM
Wait, I was sure it was great for all minds!!!!!! :)
Date: 4/6/2017 10:43:00 PM
Seven on this one
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Date: 4/6/2017 10:42:00 PM
this is really really beautiful, Arthur!! I did not know Lanterne was written this way and I think Constance is asking for one in her current challenge. gotta see what is going on. (by the way, did you ever read the article on Steven Jones? I have been looking up stuff he has said since and many support him even today)
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Date: 4/7/2017 9:06:00 PM
I dont think it is unless you drink a bottle of red wine beforehand! :)
Date: 4/6/2017 10:00:00 PM
This is lovely Arthur! 7 (But not at all what I was expecting... how is your yard? ;)
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Date: 4/6/2017 10:04:00 PM
Well this started from that, and my sump pump going off too often, then Tim inspired me by calling my yard Lake Vaso!!
Date: 4/6/2017 9:58:00 PM
I was happy to help keep your lantern lit
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Date: 4/6/2017 10:03:00 PM
Thanks Tim!!