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Written for The Trionet Contest sponsored By Emile J Pinet Trionet is a form Created by L Milton Hankins;

The first stanza follows the rules for a standard triolet of eight (8) lines  ABaAabAB (capital letters are repeated lines). The second stanza consists of six (6) lines, formed with five (5) lines repeated from the first stanza and adding an appropriate non-repeated rhyming last line with a rhyme scheme of AAABBb.

Mild mauve sky streams like lakes of blushing pearls weaving clouds of hope beneath my veiled tears, shrouding streaks of scarred sunsets with soft swirls. Mild mauve sky streams like lakes of blushing pearls. I turn to rose stars as midnight unfurls, and the moon serves love amidst woeful years. Mild mauve sky streams like lakes of blushing pearls, weaving clouds of hope beneath my veiled tears. Mild mauve sky streams like lakes of blushing pearls, shrouding streaks of scarred sunsets with soft swirls. I turn to rose stars as midnight unfurls, and the moon serves love amidst woeful years; weaving clouds of hope beneath my veiled tears, he feels the frozen angst behind my fears.

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Date: 11/4/2024 1:09:00 PM
Brilliant poem full of ANGST (: Wonderfully written
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Date: 10/31/2024 2:43:00 PM
IE, seems like the mood of this is mostly sad as I read it. There are some hopeful signs, but it feels as though they don't prevail. That can happen and this captures the emotion in the title very well. I am feeling sorry for people afflicted with this. Smiles!!!
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Date: 10/31/2024 9:34:00 AM
I would give you first just for the content. I saw the word, triolet, and wrote about a triangle, and didn't even come third.
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Date: 10/30/2024 11:13:00 PM
Excellent Trionet ! Congratulations dear Empress for this well deserved (?) I fear undervalued, placement....! "the moon serves love amidst woeful years; weaving clouds of hope beneath my veiled tears, he feels the frozen angst behind my fears." Love these lines!
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Date: 10/30/2024 1:54:00 PM
Congratulations, lovely Ink Empress!
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Date: 10/29/2024 6:47:00 PM
Ink, You inspire me.
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Date: 10/30/2024 11:46:00 AM
Dear Lise, thats such a sweet thing to say, thank you for your kindness, appreciate always
Date: 10/29/2024 12:40:00 PM
I am so glad to see you won. Big Congrats!
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Date: 10/30/2024 11:55:00 AM
Awwn thank you sweet Andrea
Date: 10/29/2024 11:20:00 AM
Congratulations, Ink Empress! Your poem earned a distinguished place in my contest. Very well done. You were successful against a field of talented poets, my friend Emile.
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Date: 10/29/2024 11:40:00 AM
Its an honor dear Emile, thank you for the inspiration and opportunity, i could have done better, appreciate you always my friend, sending you light today and always
Date: 10/29/2024 9:25:00 AM
An excellent triolet that is worthy of high placement. I always admire your vocabulary.
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Date: 10/30/2024 11:59:00 AM
Dear Victor, you are so kind, thank you so much always
Date: 10/28/2024 4:33:00 PM
This is a beautiful triolet. Good luck with the contest.
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Date: 10/30/2024 12:11:00 PM
Awwn thank you dear hilda so sweet of you to say
Date: 10/28/2024 10:56:00 AM
Dear Empress, I really love this triolet and I have to Fav it after only one reading. I think you have beautifully employed the triolet form perfectly to create a lyrical meditation on hope and resilience. Why I love this form and what you have done shows through your artistic repeating lines in an unique displaying the contrast between a serene natural world and the inner turmoil landscape. What a beauty for poem's structure as it mirrors the cyclical nature of emotions. Yes, Hope can persist through periods of struggling. Good Luck in the contest! Autumn Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel
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Date: 10/28/2024 9:53:00 AM
You most certainly have a way with words Ink, enjoyed reading your colourful poem.
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Date: 10/27/2024 9:58:00 PM
Your craft is so beautifully scripted, Blissfully So, I always look forward to your inked creativity!
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Date: 10/27/2024 8:43:00 PM
My dear fairy goddess, your art of weaving so many different forms, effortlessly, is truly unparalleled and supreme! Trionet is such a tricky form and I'm absolutely awestruck with the way you've played with the words here whilst sticking so meticulously with the rules ~ the imagery you've hued is beyond enchanting and it touches my heart in every way! "Mild mauve sky streams like lakes of blushing pearls", "I turn to rose stars as midnight unfurls", "clouds of hope" Gosh, soul-hitting! All the rhymes, refrains, metaphors, adjectives and descriptions you've so skillfully woven which truly captivates one's spirit in this moonlit melancholy ~ you deserve all the golden accolades for your talent, dear sweet ink and I wholeheartedly admire your art!
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Date: 10/27/2024 8:46:00 PM
Best wishes in the contest! Keep writing, shining and inspiring! This is simply a FAVE for me ~ sending you loads of love, light and hugs!
Date: 10/27/2024 7:22:00 PM
I like the haunting, soulful feel of this work. And the positive ending: "weaving clouds of hope beneath my veiled tears, he feels the frozen angst behind my fears." Somehow...I don't always know how...but it does seem most problems do work out for our best. Even some deep heartache -- was really not the right match. Nor timing. Sensitive write.
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Date: 10/27/2024 2:37:00 PM
Well I'm not much of a moon guy per say but I know it has great appeal for you (Ack! Does that mean I'm not a romantic?) You always manage to mix colors and textures and the cosmos into something worth reading. Kudos once again
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Date: 10/27/2024 11:08:00 AM
Wow. This is gorgeous, Inky. If he does not care about syllable count being 10, I think it could be a to winner. Not only pretty, but deep. Glad you finally did it!
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Date: 10/27/2024 12:02:00 PM
He doesnt mind syllable count sweet soul aunt and im not sure if its good enough but iv heard alot about the creator of this form and felt like doing it. But atleast u liked it haha thats a win!
Date: 10/27/2024 10:19:00 AM
Just beautiful, Ink- "I turn to rose stars as midnight unfurls"..."soothing me until the weeping wound clears" loved those lines...I am sure this will do well in the contest <3 :)
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Date: 10/27/2024 12:11:00 PM
Thank you so much sweet paige
Date: 10/27/2024 10:11:00 AM
You can write on any form.. As always you never use simple descriptions, even with restricted forms like this.. We all need an escape from life, some have drugs and alcohol, you have the moon, stars and writing wonderful poetry... Your poem flows really well, I am sure Emile will love this one.. All the best in the contest..
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Date: 10/27/2024 12:19:00 PM
Your comment made me laugh, i have the moon true! Good one! Thank you for reading and for leaving such an uplifting comment. I hope emile will like it too. Always grateful for your support
Date: 10/27/2024 9:42:00 AM
Wonderful . Love it
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Date: 10/27/2024 12:19:00 PM
Awwn thank you dahlin

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