Paul Callus Poet Choka

La Tour Eiffel

On the Champ de Mars
(Beehive of activity)
Stands an engineering feat
Of latticed design
Ridiculed architecture
That survives the test of time.

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Form structure: 5-7-7-5-7-7
A 6 line Choka
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Contest: Choka Me
Sponsor: Dr. Ram Mehta
Placed: 6th

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Andrea Dietrich September 13, 2020 at 2:11 PM I've been clicking around in your back pages trying to find a poem I've not commented to. I am sure there have to be some, but not having luck finding one. Anyway, I look forward to seeing some of your new poetry. I was able to see my old comment I'd put on this one and the reply to me you had made (those I never see unless by chance like now!) Paul Callus September 13, 2020 at 2:53 PM Chuckling...I know what it's like...as if searching for a needle in a haystack...but I so appreciate your resilience, Andrea:) Warm regards // paul

Rajat Kanti Chakrabarty October 24, 2014 at 6:15 AM La tour Eiffel will survive for ever as a symbol and cultural icon of France. good write. Thanks:-) rajat Paul Callus October 25, 2014 at 5:06 AM Good day Rajat! Thank you for stopping by; I appreciate your visits and comments. Namaskar. // paul

Sara Kendrick September 29, 2014 at 10:24 AM It has lasted which is surprising..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara Paul Callus September 29, 2014 at 4:03 PM Very true, Sara....it lasted much longer than expected; after all it was supposed to be dismantled after a period of 20 years. Thank you for the visit. // paul

Connie Marcum Wong September 28, 2014 at 11:50 PM It has become beloved, maybe not by countrymen, but certainly around the globe. I enjoyed your poem. It was one of the joys for my daughter and me to see it with dancing lights at night. Good luck in the contest. Paul Callus September 29, 2014 at 4:06 PM Thank you for stopping by again today, Connie. I too enjoyed those dancing sparkling lights...and so did many others [usually that sight forms part of a Paris by Night city tour.] // paul

Nette Onclaud September 28, 2014 at 1:53 AM i always enjoy my visits to france and the wonder of this beauty is well expressed through your choka, paul.. cheers on your stunning win.. huggs Paul Callus September 28, 2014 at 6:06 AM Thank you Nette! The tower and the other Parisian highlights cannot fail to remain imprinted in the mind...a remarkable city indeed! Have a lovely day...hugs // paul

Andrea Dietrich September 27, 2014 at 9:37 PM Ridiculed maybe but EVERYONE knows it!!! BIG congrats on your description of a most interesting building. Paul Callus September 28, 2014 at 5:58 AM Hi Andrea! The tower was ridiculed by those who opposed it citing the fact that it was not feasible, neither financially nor artistically. They claimed it would turn out to be a useless monstrous project. / Thanks for the visit and have a nice Sunday. // paul

Faye Gibson September 27, 2014 at 2:17 PM Well done, Paul; a lovely read. Congrats. Paul Callus September 27, 2014 at 4:18 PM Hi Faye! Thank you for stopping by; so glad that you enjoyed my humble Choka. Have a lovely weekend. // paul

Dr. Upma A. Sharma September 27, 2014 at 10:00 AM Brilliant choka Paul! Love ur poetic architecture my friend! Trust we all survive the rest of time! Congrats on big win! Paul Callus September 27, 2014 at 2:09 PM Thank you Upma. The tower is both imposing and inspirational. The latticed framework is what captivated my eye most. Being on top of it is a fulfilling experience. Walking down hundreds of steps (instead of using the lift) was a personal challenge which I had dreamed of! // paul

Richard Lamoureux September 27, 2014 at 8:47 AM I so enjoyed reading this one again. Congratulations. Paul Callus September 27, 2014 at 9:23 AM Thank you Richard for stopping by again with congrats. cu // paul

Maurice Yvonne September 27, 2014 at 8:12 AM I am so happy to see this choka on the winning list. Congratulations on your win Paul. Paul Callus September 27, 2014 at 8:39 AM Thank you Maurice:) Having Parisian roots, you must have been rooting for the Tour Eiffel! cu my friend. // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser September 27, 2014 at 6:15 AM Congrats Paul..:) same spot huh?! ;) Paul Callus September 27, 2014 at 8:29 AM Thank you Olive_eloi; hope all is well with you:) // paul

Dr.Ram Mehta September 27, 2014 at 5:40 AM Thanks for the entry and support. Congrats on the win, Paul Paul Callus September 27, 2014 at 8:23 AM Many thanks Dr. Ram...it is an honour to get a spot on your winners' list. Have a nice weekend. // paul

Jan Allison September 27, 2014 at 2:31 AM dropping back with my congrats Paul:-) hugs jan xx Paul Callus September 27, 2014 at 8:17 AM Thank you Jan; you are always fast on the draw:) hugs // paul

Maurice Yvonne September 25, 2014 at 12:23 PM How smoothly this reads. Not easily done in the constraints of this form. My mother was born and grew up in Paris. The last time I was there I was only seven. This is a wonderful write. I hope you rank high in the contest. Paul Callus September 25, 2014 at 2:02 PM Thank you for your positive comments, Maurice. I was unsure what to write about since a choka is supposed to be narrative. // So, thanks to your mother, you are half French! // Read your choka entry a while ago....very impressive. // paul

Richard Lamoureux September 25, 2014 at 9:20 AM I would love to see it in person. I guess the one in Vegas doesn't count *lol*. I enjoyed your Choka, I would wish you luck but I don't think you will need it. Paul Callus September 25, 2014 at 1:56 PM As usual, Richard, you are a fountain of encouragement! I have travelled quite a bit, but this has been my first visit to Paris (although I've been to France several times). I had always taken the Eiffel tower for granted, but being there in person made all the difference. // paul

Kelly Deschler September 25, 2014 at 2:26 AM I have never been to Paris, but I've always admired the beauty of the Eiffel Tower. It would be an amazing sight to see in person!.... I really enjoyed this lovely poem, Paul. Good luck in Dr. Ram's contest! Paul Callus September 25, 2014 at 1:49 PM Hi Kelly! The tower itself is truly a sight to behold, but being on top of it brings awesome sensations. I love climbing to the top of high buildings (especially cathedrals) and mountains, and looking down on the scene below. makes me wish I had wings:) // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser September 25, 2014 at 1:32 AM the words as elegant and as magnificent as the Eiffel tower.. :) i love the line beehive of activity... :D !!!!! but still if i have chance I will still choose to visit disneyland above all.. :D :P Paul Callus September 25, 2014 at 12:57 PM Thank you for the lovely comments Olive_eloi!! But why not combine both places in one unforgettable Parisian visit!! :)) // paul

Brenda Meier-Hans September 24, 2014 at 3:30 PM This should do wonderfully in the contest Paul. It's so well written and educational at the same time. Paul Callus September 24, 2014 at 4:17 PM Thank you Brenda; this is my first attempt at this form, so hopefully I made justice to it! // paul

Casarah Nance September 23, 2014 at 5:07 PM Wow, it would be a site I would love to see, it all its splendor and complexity. Awesome Choka, I think you will do fabulous my friend. hugsxx Paul Callus September 23, 2014 at 5:15 PM Thank you for the trust you show in this write, Casarah! One day, when Abby is a bit older, it would be great to visit Paris and stop at Paris EuroDisney for a couple of days. That's what we did, and my granddaughter Valentina had the time of her life!! (I believe I did, too!!:)) hugs // paul

Barbara Gorelick September 23, 2014 at 3:48 PM clever write! I long to see it, my kids have, while I was home working to pay for their trip..lol. Paul Callus September 23, 2014 at 4:27 PM Hi Barbara! This summer my family and I visited Paris and went up the Eiffel tower by lift...beautiful view; we split on the way down...they took the lift, I walked down the steps! // paul

Jan Allison September 23, 2014 at 3:04 PM Very clever descriptive write Paul:-) Good luck in the contest. Hugs Jan xxx Jan Allison September 23, 2014 at 4:23 PM We can but try Paul:-) Hugs Jan xxx Paul Callus September 23, 2014 at 4:22 PM Thank you Jan! The sponsor is a tricky customer to please, especially in a few lines! Hugs // paul