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l wrote a song today

l thought l wrote a brill song today
or should have said yesterday
kept me up nearly most of the night
cause cant get the lyric's anywhere right

l wanted a  different and fun song
turning out a deep one
song structure and methods have all gone
lyrics flat and none shone

genre headbanging notes flow
and its a pain, and  l should know
heavy metal l wont show
its not my thing, so its all woe


So i'm back to the song today
trying to see what l want to say
but another night its going to pay
all headache pills,  till l find my way.

headache pills are my pay
keep headbanging out my way.
genre please come back to say
what it is l want to say !

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Victor Buhagiar

Date: 1/2/2025 2:29:00 AM

When I saw the rules about animals with its difficult rhyme scheme, I thought this was not for me. Then I saw a funny picture and began writing. I revised it three times, but I finished. So my advice is never to give up. Search for inspiration in songs, pictures, and other poetry. Something will come up.

Jacqueline Elston
Date: 1/3/2025 4:28:00 AM

So true Victor. And we should never give up. Thank you for comment. J

Tom Woody

Date: 1/1/2025 5:46:00 AM

Sometimes you just have to step back, clear your mind and let it come to you naturally, organically. If it makes you feel better Paul and John frequently had mind jams. It happens to the best of us

Jacqueline Elston
Date: 1/2/2025 1:53:00 AM

Thanks Tom, l agree. I'm going to file it today. l still cant get the lyrics to go the way l want even though it had a great hook. It would make a good song for a heavy metal genre but that's not what l want. l'll work on something new today if l can clear my head. I'm into Art Rock so i'm not sure why l was drawn into this last one. Back to pen and paper lol.