Carolyn Devonshire Poet Quintain (English)

Kitten On a Doctor's Hook

The neurologist hung me out to dry
“No cure,” says he as I hang by a thread
All dressed up and wanting to fly
Took torturous tests that I did dread
What?  No means of comfort? Have I misread?

Like a kitten on a hook, I hang and wait
Please take me down and offer hope
Now in a chiropractor’s hands I rest my fate
On my spine he’ll press and grope
With the symptoms, I’m learning to cope

Yet, as I hang here, medical bills are tossed at me
Insurance pays a bit, but it’s running out
Praying for a treatment to set me free
Months pass; whiskers grow from my snout
In a debtors’ prison I’ll land, no doubt


July 31, 2011
By Carolyn Devonshire
*Entry for Francine’s “Hangin’ in There” contest

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Gwendolen Song August 10, 2011 at 12:05 PM Hi Carolyn- If any patient were EVER on a hook, it would be one waiting on the diagnostic workup of a neurologist.U probably know this first hand. That poor lil kitty would never sit still for a full workup! I must say with serious caution that chiropractic medicine can cause more injury than harm. If u want me to send u some evidenced based research articles, let me know. Have a great day! Gwendolen

Jack Horne August 10, 2011 at 10:16 AM I'll break you out if you do! Many congrats, my friend : )

Debbie Guzzi August 10, 2011 at 10:12 AM Yes a stand alone write which simply used the photo as a jumping off point. GOOD because i holds YOUR own truth ;) a real winner. Congrad's Light & Love

Sara Kendrick August 10, 2011 at 8:03 AM Congrats on your win..Sara

Carol Sunshine Brown August 10, 2011 at 7:55 AM Congratulations on your placement in Francine's "Hangin In There" contest Carolyn. Love, Carol

Lee Ramage August 10, 2011 at 6:29 AM Hi Carolyn, sorry I meant great write!! spelling++ sorry. Lee

Lee Ramage August 10, 2011 at 6:28 AM Hi Carolyn, great right with a different twist. I think there is a lot of personal things in this poem and if so, I wish you the very best. I herniated L4-5 several years ago and I finally healed. I did not find chiropractor of any help. It was rest flat on my back and anti-inflammatories, with initial pain control and muscle relaxants. Every once and awhile it flares up again and I go back right onto the same protocol. It does work. The first time took the longest and finally realized people who say "Keep going" are wrong. Just a personal comment, I feel your pain. Lee

Nette Onclaud August 10, 2011 at 5:33 AM ahh, a really unique slant for the contest, carls... my best congrats on the win! :) huggs

Don Johnson August 10, 2011 at 4:52 AM debtors prison land no doubt, funny little twist the nose hair pout, done well little shiela, good on ya cobber, Don

Sidney Beck August 10, 2011 at 2:25 AM kittens are so lovable and this poem reflects the sort of things they do and land themselves in various messes....a very entertaining piece of writing Carolyn....well done in the contest...congrats....best wishes...Syd

Francine Roberts August 10, 2011 at 12:14 AM congrats on your third place win in the contest , great piece

Judy Ball August 9, 2011 at 5:30 PM I do so identify with this one Carolyn. Went to a chiropractor about my neck and shoulders muscles and he got started on my lower back whcih never hurt me but when he got through it hurt me for a long time. Won't go back to him. God Bless, JB

George Aul August 1, 2011 at 2:07 PM Good job in a good write...........George

Joseph Osita August 1, 2011 at 12:27 PM Very unique! an excellent take on the contest.Best wishes

Zzzzz Zzzzz August 1, 2011 at 11:15 AM An amusing and inventive write, with a serious side too! Good luck with this one! xoxo, Robert.

James Peranteau July 31, 2011 at 11:06 PM A great write here dear poet, using this form so well ! I'm going to have to come up with a write using this form, I checked it out and it has the feel of a form I might do well with. TY for the fun I had reading your writes tonight my friend ! And, O am I up way past beddy-bys ! *smiles* Good night sweet Carolyn ! Oh, do they still have debtors prison? wow, if so, I'll see ya soon ! Much love (2u), james

Robert A. Dufresne July 31, 2011 at 5:23 PM Sounds more like you're hangin OUT there, Carolyn! You must be a hurtin' unit. Does your chiro use an activator? Sure hope and pray you can get some relief soon. As far as debtors prison goes, I'll be in the next cell. We'll share the pen ...pun intended. ; )

Jack Ross Jr. July 31, 2011 at 5:11 PM very inventive and sad, debtors prison is an obination that should never be..good luck on contest...God bless....old Jack

Debbie Guzzi July 31, 2011 at 4:41 PM This getting old is horrid but they say the alternatives worse! Light & Love

Jack Horne July 31, 2011 at 4:26 PM Awesome take on the contest, my friend. I hate it that they can't seem to help you - but a cure could be just around the corner

Steven Cooke July 31, 2011 at 3:40 PM very imaginitive, well put together, a very good write,good poetry. yes i like this