Kite Tale

brisk boisterous wind throws the joyous kite so high caught by crescent moon trailing twirling tail toddler tugs the moon along

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Date: 3/12/2015 4:22:00 PM

Beautiful tanka Kimberly...I love the last line...

Kim Shaw
Date: 3/12/2015 6:42:00 PM

Hi Joseph! Thank you for the kind encouragement. Hugs, Kimberly

Date: 3/10/2015 3:12:00 PM

beautifully creative Kimberly and some lovely alliteration:-) Hugs Jan xx

Kim Shaw
Date: 3/10/2015 4:07:00 PM

Thank you Jan! So lovely of you to drop in and leave a nice comment. Hugs, Kimberly xx

Date: 3/10/2015 12:43:00 PM

You've created a well thought out and imaginative picture that floats within our conscious minds. Emile. #7

Kim Shaw
Date: 3/10/2015 2:58:00 PM

Hello Emile! Thank you so much for the seven. I truly appreciate your review and welcome all advice, as I am very new to poetry. Hugs, Kimberly

Date: 3/10/2015 11:45:00 AM

A great poetic form for the subject,Kimberly- makes the Kite jink along in short bursts. Good fun. Mister Viv x

Kim Shaw
Date: 3/10/2015 2:54:00 PM

Hi Viv! Thank you for that keen insight. I had not thought of the 'movement' that the form creates. I appreciate your kind comments. hugs, Kimberly