I did this poem for Gail Doyles earlier contest; which was was locked before I could place it; so I thought I'd post it on soup anyway for "the soupers" to read.. Joe today I changed 'the' to as in the second last line.
and removed a semi-colon.
The air is shivered; to displacements whim.' From the Ides of heaven’s sphere As smote was the skin of a cosmic drum Throbbing walls of pressure ‘push in’. Then down as silvered mail, are droplets thrown Disgorged from Yahweh’s mighty quiver Descending on, and over all creation Glistening in sheaves, and slivers; Igniting the energy of growth, in plant Grass, rock and tree, a heavy hissing static falls Across the fells, and far flung seas. To drop.. and dropping… under and upon' Darkling pines, also the great lakes waters. Lozenged globes, reflective, scatter liquid light In manifold freshening beads, too… carouses Aloft in choruses; the damp clad whistling breeze. Laurel leaves pendle and sway in harmony and glistening mid-hued green, as sun bursts shine to Kiss the rain, all embellishing; in tenebristic reverie.' ©Joe Maverick 25-2-2013 to know more about this poem click on you know where.."
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