Killer In the Mess

On a Monday public holiday and with my son home from school,
we organized to go out fishing in a creek where blackfish rule,
and while we’re putting in the boot, our bamboo poles and fishing gear,
I heard a voice from in the street “so what are you pair doing here?”

Bertie Brooke approached us and I said, “we’re going fishing mate,”
and Bertie uttered “are youse now; I suppose it’s way too late,
to drag along an old codger, who doesn’t mind to wet a line,
either that, or go boozing all day long, but fishing would be fine.”

Now Bertie is an army veteran who spent time in a war,
and he’s in his eighties now and never mentions what he saw,
but the whole town knew of Bertie and how he ran the R-S-L,
so taking Bertie fishing with us, could only serve us well.

And as we three plied our fishing trade, Bertie gave young Glen advice,
on how he lured in a blackfish when a young’un once or twice,
and he spoke about the good old days that thankfully are gone,
but I was cringing knowing, that the generation gap is on.

The young boys of these modern days don’t want to hear of horse and carts.
They’re all for war games on computers and seeing grisly parts,
but young Glen was interested, because some homework from his school,
was based upon war history, and old Bertie now is cool.

So while I fished I listened to the questions Glen asked Bert,
and heard solemn answers ‘bout the war, and most appeared to hurt,
then gingerly Glen uttered, “did you kill anybody Mr. Brooke?”
and Bert responded in a somber tone, “probably – I was a cook.”

Copyright © | Year Posted 2019



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Date: 2/10/2019 4:05:00 AM
This poem contains everything - a youngsters enjoyment of someone two or more generations older, wise information from Bertie, an old war veteran, and humor at the end from Bertie - loved this poem Lindsay. Poetry hugs, Jennifer.
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Lindsay Laurie
Date: 2/16/2019 12:06:00 AM
Thank you once again Jennifer. I certainly enjoy correspondence from you. It's always interesting - Lindsay
Date: 1/19/2019 12:13:00 PM
Did not catch that one tell the end and enjoyed it. love phyl
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Lindsay Laurie
Date: 1/25/2019 12:06:00 AM
Hello Phyllis … yes, it is a 'gotcha' poem. I'm glad you got the sting. 41 degrees Celsius today (106f) and with a little rain the humidity is stifling - catch you soon Phyllis - Lindsay
Date: 1/17/2019 6:29:00 PM
hahaha. AT the end, the title became very clear. LOVED that!!!
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Date: 1/17/2019 5:53:00 PM
Kennedy Was An Amenity Came to conclusion about Kennedy; Was always an outstanding amenity; Handled things; Honor he brings; Recognized as independent identity.
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Date: 1/16/2019 12:53:00 PM
Awesome verse Lindsay, you're a master of story telling and your killer last line is brilliant. Tom.
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Lindsay Laurie
Date: 1/25/2019 12:01:00 AM
Thanks for your kind comment Tom. I'm pleased you enjoyed my silliness - Lindsay
Date: 1/15/2019 7:39:00 PM
Once again, master of the last line! Sidney lucked out! When I was in the military, I dreaded the end of the fiscal year, when all the food was gone and rations were it. The green dehydrated egg powder was dumped in a trash can, then an hose turned on it. The cook would then ladle "the mix" onto a grill for "scrambled eggs" which were mostly water, paste, or adobe, but stuck to our ribs one way or another! Life as a civilian is always a pleasure! Aloha! Rico
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Lindsay Laurie
Date: 1/25/2019 12:00:00 AM
G'day Rico … I think it was a part of any job with many employees to complain about the cook. I don't think too many employees starved though. Preparing dishes for many people can't be that easy - catch you Rico - Lindsay
Date: 1/15/2019 7:00:00 PM
G'Day, Lindsay - youse is a great story teller with always a surprise ending. I enjoy them as I know all soupers do who appreciate delightful poetry. Glad you took a likin' to the Eddie the 8th and his moll verse - I'm a-thankin' ye fer yer support - Bob
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Lindsay Laurie
Date: 1/24/2019 11:51:00 PM
No problems at all Robert. Your work is a delight to read. Thank you for continuing to comment on my silliness too - Lindsay
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