Jeannie Cronin Poet Couplet

Just One More Day

Just One More Day 

It's been a whole year now since you went away.
They say it gets easier, maybe, some day.

So many things we still needed to say.
If I could see you, just one more day.

I'd beg of you, "Why did you take your own life?"
"Have you any idea of my sadness and strife?"

Would there be anything you'd like to say?
If I could see you, just one more day?

So many nights my mind drifts in wonder.
I lie there awake, head pounding like thunder.

I realize there wasn't much I could do.
Would you've still done the same if I'd said I loved you?

Or would I be sitting here still hurt this way?
So cold to the comforting words people say.

Peace is the one thing that's not in my mind.
How many years will it take me to find?
 
Could I have saved you from dying that day?
Could my fragile mind cope with the words you would say?

Your shackles were gone when you set yourself free.
Mine have been on since you passed them to me.

With just a few answers I might find my way.
If I could see you, just one more day.

                         12-07-2015

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Michael Tor December 18, 2015 at 8:24 AM Jeannie this is a heartfelt write. Wow you have such a talent for conveying deep emotion. I hope this was fiction If it wasn't I am sorry for your loss. A 7 for sure Jeannie Cronin December 18, 2015 at 8:56 AM Thank you, Michael. Not a personal loss but one of someone very dear to my heart. As close to firsthand as it gets.

Skat A December 16, 2015 at 12:35 AM JEANNIE, congrats on your fine win. SKAT Jeannie Cronin December 16, 2015 at 1:23 AM Thanks, SKAT!

James Inman December 14, 2015 at 8:33 AM Jeannie, great write. Jeannie Cronin December 14, 2015 at 8:39 AM Thanks James

Teddy Kimathi December 14, 2015 at 6:37 AM Hi Jeannie. Congrats for your WIN in the contest! ;-) Jeannie Cronin December 14, 2015 at 8:03 AM Thank you, Teddy. It was a real challenge to express emotion without firsthand experience. I pray to God I never have to go through this kind of turmoil.

Andrea Dietrich December 13, 2015 at 7:45 PM too bad that the suicidal people of the world simply cannot "get this" and that their deed leaves such heartache and unanswered questions. However, I can also see their side. To be that miserable with life. it's so hard to imagine. Anyway, I enjoyed reading your poem. BIG congrats on the win. Jeannie Cronin December 13, 2015 at 8:48 PM Thanks Andrea, and a big congrats to you! I would trade every well intended accolade for a single validation that my thoughts changed someone's perspective on a possibly life changing decision. This site, for most of us, is the best chance we will ever get to actually tune in to another human frequency with a voice. I hope and pray it means something to someone out there, vanity loses its luster with age!

Jan Allison December 13, 2015 at 3:45 PM Such a touching write Jeannie congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx Jeannie Cronin December 13, 2015 at 4:54 PM Thanks Jan

Beautiful Scars December 13, 2015 at 3:25 PM Jeannie, many thanks for being a part of my contest..Congrats on your win :)-luloo *smiles* Jeannie Cronin December 13, 2015 at 4:53 PM Thanks, it was fun.

Eric Boddie December 13, 2015 at 12:29 PM once they are gone....the pain comes on strong....and we beat our very selves....because no understanding dwells....in the pain we have come to know....and only time can make it cease to show....touching write Jeannie....;) Jeannie Cronin December 13, 2015 at 12:52 PM Thank you, Eric. You clearly understand.

Gary Bateman December 11, 2015 at 5:54 PM Hello Jeannie!! Thanks again for your comment on our recent Christmas Leprechaun write. I see that you're relatively new to Poetry Soup. I want to take a moment to Welcome you to Poetry Soup!! As you've probably already realized, there is a diverse mixture of poets on our website. I'm pleased to have you on-board with the rest of us!! "Just One More Day" is a quite sad and most compelling couplet. Your verses are full of emotion and passion. Excellent Work!! A "7"!! Cheers and Best, Gary Jeannie Cronin December 12, 2015 at 12:24 PM Thank you, Gary. I thought I might shake things up for this contest by approaching the subject from a less common perspective. Really, it's common enough, just less talked about.

Francis Osho December 7, 2015 at 11:43 PM VERY TOUCHING JEANNIE Jeannie Cronin December 7, 2015 at 11:54 PM Sorry Francis, this is the second time today that has happened. Thank you for the kind comment. Jeannie Cronin December 7, 2015 at 11:50 PM Thank you, Mister Write. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Mister Write December 7, 2015 at 11:42 PM I enjoyed this read. Thank you for sharing this heart felt poem. Jeannie Cronin December 7, 2015 at 11:56 PM Thank you, Mister Write. I'm so glad you liked it. Really makes you wonder when you get a bunch of views and no comments at all.