"just Four Walls"

I took the pictures down and folded all the clothes...
The carpet seems new where the couch used to sit...
A freshly painted outline used to hide behind our photo...
The plants are gone ,the fish tank is empty, only left
are echoes of our life...
His and her's boxes sit by the door like Halloween candy
ready to be given out..
Where love once rang out only whispers can be heard...
No more lights in the window or a lit candle on the piano...
The welcome mat is all rolled up like so many holidays went by..
One last glance as darkness fills the room, still the only warm
memory is lingering smell of your perfume...


Empty Apartment contest
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Date: 12/16/2010 2:34:00 PM
heys im new... this is s wonderful poem and i thank you, comment my poem even tho its not great
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Date: 12/4/2010 5:58:00 AM
This is a great entry Michael, I thank you for sharing the read. Best of Luck in the contest and thank you for your most welcomed comment on my poem :-) Many Blessings, Always, Adell
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Date: 11/21/2010 4:09:00 PM
Sad heartfelt piece on the 'Empty Apartment' contest. Wonderful entry and a scene lived so many time in our past. Good luck in the contest Michael >> James
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Date: 11/21/2010 7:03:00 AM
Why does it feel as if I know that apartment, my friend? It seems that humanity does not only share a common essence, but also a common journey. All the best in the contest.
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Date: 11/20/2010 5:15:00 AM
Just back here to disagree with you! I like yours more ;) love Wilma
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Date: 11/19/2010 9:10:00 PM
OH, what a wonderful idea for the empty apartment contest. YOu chose a super cool way to do it. This reminded me of that country song about a guy feeling sad when his wife leaves. It's actually kind of a funny song and I forgot its title already. This contest is getting many very fine entries, particularly yours!
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Date: 11/19/2010 8:44:00 PM
Ah, totally empty but the apartment still has her scent to bring the memories rushing back. Excellent entry for the Empty Apartment contest, Michael. Wishing you success! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 11/19/2010 3:58:00 PM
Good luck in the contest..Reads like winner's circle material for sure...Sara
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Date: 11/19/2010 3:43:00 PM
Hello Michael, I felt every word of this, it touches my heart. So sad and yet words of truth for many of us. Thank you for stopping by and reading me, your very kind with your comments. As Always, Shar
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Date: 11/19/2010 12:21:00 PM
Hi Michael J. Thanks for your kind comment and the best of luck in the contest with this piece. You have captured the lonesomeness of an empty apartment perfectly. Good Luck. Eamon
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Date: 11/19/2010 12:17:00 PM
A perfect piece for Matt's new contest my White Knight.. good luck..my entry is "Up in Smoke" .. and I basically wrote about broken romance and the scars left in the empty apartment luv.. wow..great minds DO think alike.. our creative natures blend so well.. good luck ..Matt is sure to luv this entry .. Jersey Girl so luved this poem..
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Date: 11/19/2010 11:45:00 AM
I really enjoyed where you took this one Michael. I reckon I should just leave my idea for this contest in my head hehe.. Awesome write you can feel the emptiness.. good luck with this gem.. Love Wilma
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Date: 11/19/2010 11:42:00 AM
Nicely done Michael. I feel the emptiness of the room and the narrator's soul/heart. Surely a contest winner. Joe
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