just for laughs: senryu's

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Poetic Form: Senryu
Inspired: 2024 March 02
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the judge was angered at the repeating drunkard now he is tuckered for he heard enough of his lies and made-up stuff cause of the handcuff claimed he was not drunk blamed the other guy that punk ~meaning the tree trunk defendant will rise looking at the evidence he's telling the truth that's ridiculous he's innocent and the guilt ~falls on the tree trunk proved himself sober at the masquerade party ~tree trunk who got drunk

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Charlotte Watkins

Date: 3/25/2024 3:29:00 PM

Oh this was a tale and a spin and a laugh all at once and a great example of some amazing senryus! I may have to try to have a go or drunkards stumble at such, warm wishes, C

Hilo Poet
Date: 3/25/2024 4:46:00 PM

I am grateful, Charlotte, and hopeful as I've given ample time than most sponsors in their contest, since mines that you've noted that I e'er so oft entertain a twist of the mundane forms that aplenty has accustomed themselves. Enjoy, Aloha, William.

Karen Croft

Date: 3/6/2024 9:45:00 AM

Very clever!

Hilo Poet
Date: 3/6/2024 10:53:00 AM

Thanks, Karen, Aloha, William

Constance La France

Date: 3/3/2024 8:33:00 AM

Hilo, this is a real fun poem to read and great example for your contest, hard to beat this one but methinks I have an idea, hugs, Constance

Hilo Poet
Date: 3/3/2024 8:51:00 AM

I hope 35 give it a whirl, hoping, they'll be some great ones out there--you as well, Constance. I'm still hurdling the new setup TPS left us sponsors having just done my DARK E-Y-E Rhyme, it's tougher now, thanks, my friend. Aloha, William