July 5

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Early dawn I got the message. I knew - it was going to come. It really came. Fond childhood memories glided by …through my mind. After three hours, I am in the serene garden - he loved gardening. it’s still a sun-drenched morning, mellifluous birds are chirping, lush willow leaves are swaying in the breeze. Everything is the same. The day I am gone, same will happen, nothing will change, the world will not stop for a moment. But perhaps the world will stop for a moment in someone’s mind. born brave, truly kind… stood for neediest strong and bold in death a lighthouse beacon voice tranquil ocean refuge for me and many, life with compassion birds keep crooning songs, breeze carries wistful music sun bright ruby-radiant hydrangea blossomed how can he be not here?

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Jcb Brul

Date: 7/6/2021 5:38:00 PM

I am very sorry to hear this! You created a masterpiece out of this grief for your dear brother's passing. His race is over and his time to rest has come. He will remain alive in your memory. Warm condolences...

Quoth Theraven

Date: 7/6/2021 2:36:00 PM

Malabika, Hearts made so fragile may break in pieces, though never turn to dust. 'But perhaps the world will stop for a moment in someone’s mind.' I know I must. -Richard

Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 7/6/2021 2:45:00 PM

Thanks, Richard. Appreciate your thoughtfulness.

Constance La France

Date: 7/6/2021 6:33:00 AM

Mala, I am so sorry to hear of your brothers passing. You have penned such an emotional poem of grief for him. When my mother died, I recall thinking the same thing, that when my life was crumbling around me, life went on around me as usual "everything was the same" The line "voice tranquil ocean" this voice will always be in your heart forevermore, I will send prayers of healing up above for you and your family ~ love and serenity _Constance

Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 7/6/2021 6:41:00 AM

Thanks, Constance. really appreciate your loving words. Life will never be the same when you have lost a most loved one. He was very special to me, and many others. He touched many with his kindness, empathy and humility.

Anitha Jayasankar

Date: 7/5/2021 10:04:00 PM

Oh dear Mala... I know how much you miss your loved one now... the pain of separation of our relationship through blood, it's unbearable.... but your brother will be there with you ALWAYS... watching and guiding you from ABOVE... I sincerely pray from the bottom of my heart to God to give enough mental strength at such a tough sad moment of your life... I can feel the pain in your mind as you wrote this poem soon after you got the sad news... Loads of love, hugs, and prayers to you and your family dear friend.... ~ Ani

Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 7/6/2021 5:56:00 AM

Thanks, Anitha. Hope I have the mental strength - he was a rare human being who I loved and admired all my life.

Joanna Daniel

Date: 7/5/2021 9:50:00 PM

My heartfelt condolences, Malabika, you have portrayed the grief beautifully in this haibun:)

Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 7/6/2021 5:53:00 AM

Thanks, Jo. Really appreciate your kind words.