Shadow Hamilton Poet Quintilla

Juliet

She stood there on the balcony
watching him riding off to war
her heart was full of mutiny
crushed she held onto the bar
there would be no matrimony

Juliet was full of acrimony
hating the powerful Tsar
far away the cacophony
the sound of the battle of war
drifting up to the balcony

Juliet waited for his pony
hearing distantly his sitar
his voice singing songs so corny
she ran to him down the sandbar
now there could be matrimony

written 02/13/2014
contest: Juliet

my first Quintella I hope I got the form right

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Skat A February 26, 2014 at 10:00 PM Shadow ,. Congratulations:) goodnight ~SKAT~ Shadow Hamilton February 27, 2014 at 2:37 AM ty Skat hugs

Kelly Deschler February 21, 2014 at 10:01 PM I enjoyed your interesting take on the story behind the painting. Very nicely done, Shadow! Congratulations on your win, as well!...Thank you for the kind congrats on my poem. :) Shadow Hamilton February 22, 2014 at 4:08 AM ty Kelly hugs

Isaiah Zerbst February 21, 2014 at 10:26 AM I do not recall seeing this order of rhymes in a quintella before, but that is perfectly fine as it is within the rules and shows originality on your part. Now you've got me wanting to try it :) However, the soup definition does stipulate iambic tetrameter for every line, meaning eight syllables per line and alternating unstressed, stressed syllable all the way through. Hard to explain briefly, so I don't know if this makes sense. Shadow Hamilton February 21, 2014 at 11:10 AM darn yes I see aa,bb,a ty Isaiah hugs

Isaiah Zerbst February 20, 2014 at 11:03 AM This was such a fun poem to read, much more lighthearted than nearly all the others. Such an engaging story as well. Thanks for reading all the other winners. Some of them are new and don't get very many. Shadow Hamilton February 20, 2014 at 12:55 PM I always try to support new people in contests and congrats all winners in both contests I enter and run only fair. ty Isaiah did I get the form correct it is new to me lol? hugs

Robert Davidson February 19, 2014 at 5:31 AM good write and thanks for your comments on mine. Robert CD Shadow Hamilton February 19, 2014 at 5:46 AM ty Robert hugs

Joseph May February 18, 2014 at 9:45 AM Congrats on a fine win Shadow Shadow Hamilton February 18, 2014 at 2:02 PM ty Joseph hugs

Debbie Guzzi February 18, 2014 at 9:14 AM Congrad's on your win. Light & Love Shadow Hamilton February 18, 2014 at 2:03 PM ty Debbie hugs

Dr.Ram Mehta February 18, 2014 at 6:12 AM Enjoyed the write on Juliet and congrats on the win, shadow Shadow Hamilton February 18, 2014 at 2:04 PM ty Ram hugs

Robert Rogers February 15, 2014 at 1:17 PM Yeessss!!!...I love happy endings to, especially one's with "corny songs"!...smile Nice piece "Teach"...made me smile. xoxoxo//Robert Shadow Hamilton February 15, 2014 at 3:15 PM ty Robert hugs

Richard Lamoureux February 14, 2014 at 6:45 PM Yes, we had a great time. Nice and warm with blue sky every day. We enjoyed the time with our friends. Shadow Hamilton February 14, 2014 at 7:02 PM lucky you its floods here very bad with lots more rain forecast glad you have a good time hugs

Richard Lamoureux February 14, 2014 at 6:36 PM I love happy endings! Shadow Hamilton February 14, 2014 at 6:41 PM ty Rick nice to see you hope you had a great holiday hugs

Nette Onclaud February 14, 2014 at 11:29 AM arresting visulas in a form that suits the mood of this piece.. love your fearless juliet,shadow!...huggs Shadow Hamilton February 14, 2014 at 6:40 PM ty Nette hugs

Mustapha Mohammed February 14, 2014 at 3:53 AM Beautifully done dear Shadow. All the best in the contest. Shadow Hamilton February 14, 2014 at 8:18 AM my dearest friend so nice to see you here. ty so much love and hugs

Jared Pickett February 14, 2014 at 12:48 AM This is very good, different than what I'm used to but isn't that the point.:-) I enjoyed your poetry this evening!!Asavvy1 Shadow Hamilton February 14, 2014 at 8:18 AM ty Jared it is an enjoyable form hugs

Russell Sivey February 13, 2014 at 11:03 PM This is a grandiose write my friend! Your rhyming was very good within this awesome poem! I surely enjoyed reading this dynamic piece this evening! What a lovely poem, Great Work!! Shadow Hamilton February 14, 2014 at 8:17 AM ty so much Russell I like the form I really must extend my form knowledge lol. I have joined a local group so will now be able to discuss new forms with them. your comments are very inspiring hugs

Kayod5 Kayode February 13, 2014 at 10:41 PM A unique view,this is super Shadow;gl in the contest.Happy vals. Shadow Hamilton February 14, 2014 at 8:14 AM ty Kayod5 happy Valentine to you hugs

Arthur Vaso February 13, 2014 at 9:42 PM I loved this one!!! If you wish, look at this!!! http://www.poetrysoup.com/poems_poets/poem_detail.aspx?ID=510069, hope it speaks for itself!!! Shadow Hamilton February 14, 2014 at 8:13 AM ty Arthur very pleased you like it will do hugs

Debbie Guzzi February 13, 2014 at 7:12 PM Good luck in the contest. Light & Love Shadow Hamilton February 14, 2014 at 8:11 AM ty Debbie hugs

Robert Pettit February 13, 2014 at 5:50 PM It must be 1812, and the Russians are driving Napoleon back to France. That's the impression I get when I read this. This is an impressive write. Shadow Hamilton February 14, 2014 at 8:10 AM ty Robert yes it could be certainly fits +) ty dear hugs

Tim Smith February 13, 2014 at 5:34 PM This is a beautiful write here Shadow..kudos...Tim Shadow Hamilton February 14, 2014 at 8:09 AM ty Tim hugs

Skat A February 13, 2014 at 5:28 PM Beautiful and amazing, the battle of war. I don't know much about the form. Linda, it flows well, and hopefully there could be a matrimony. . Take care & enjoy Valentine's Day with family and friends. :) ~SKAT Shadow Hamilton February 14, 2014 at 8:09 AM ty Skat hope a;; is well with you Happy Valentine's hugs