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Juliet

She stood there on the balcony
watching him riding off to war
her heart was full of mutiny
crushed she held onto the bar
there would be no matrimony

Juliet was full of acrimony
hating the powerful Tsar
far away the cacophony
the sound of the battle of war
drifting up to the balcony

Juliet waited for his pony
hearing distantly his sitar
his voice singing songs so corny
she ran to him down the sandbar
now there could be matrimony

written 02/13/2014
contest: Juliet

my first Quintella I hope I got the form right

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




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Date: 2/26/2014 10:00:00 PM
Shadow ,. Congratulations:) goodnight ~SKAT~
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Date: 2/27/2014 2:37:00 AM
ty Skat hugs
Date: 2/21/2014 10:01:00 PM
I enjoyed your interesting take on the story behind the painting. Very nicely done, Shadow! Congratulations on your win, as well!...Thank you for the kind congrats on my poem. :)
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Date: 2/22/2014 4:08:00 AM
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Date: 2/21/2014 10:26:00 AM
I do not recall seeing this order of rhymes in a quintella before, but that is perfectly fine as it is within the rules and shows originality on your part. Now you've got me wanting to try it :) However, the soup definition does stipulate iambic tetrameter for every line, meaning eight syllables per line and alternating unstressed, stressed syllable all the way through. Hard to explain briefly, so I don't know if this makes sense.
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Date: 2/21/2014 11:10:00 AM
darn yes I see aa,bb,a ty Isaiah hugs
Date: 2/20/2014 11:03:00 AM
This was such a fun poem to read, much more lighthearted than nearly all the others. Such an engaging story as well. Thanks for reading all the other winners. Some of them are new and don't get very many.
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Date: 2/20/2014 12:55:00 PM
I always try to support new people in contests and congrats all winners in both contests I enter and run only fair. ty Isaiah did I get the form correct it is new to me lol? hugs
Date: 2/19/2014 5:31:00 AM
good write and thanks for your comments on mine. Robert CD
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Date: 2/19/2014 5:46:00 AM
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Date: 2/18/2014 9:45:00 AM
Congrats on a fine win Shadow
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Date: 2/18/2014 2:02:00 PM
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Date: 2/18/2014 9:14:00 AM
Congrad's on your win. Light & Love
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Date: 2/18/2014 2:03:00 PM
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Date: 2/18/2014 6:12:00 AM
Enjoyed the write on Juliet and congrats on the win, shadow
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Date: 2/18/2014 2:04:00 PM
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Date: 2/15/2014 1:17:00 PM
Yeessss!!!...I love happy endings to, especially one's with "corny songs"!...smile Nice piece "Teach"...made me smile. xoxoxo//Robert
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Shadow Hamilton
Date: 2/15/2014 3:15:00 PM
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Date: 2/14/2014 6:45:00 PM
Yes, we had a great time. Nice and warm with blue sky every day. We enjoyed the time with our friends.
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Date: 2/14/2014 7:02:00 PM
lucky you its floods here very bad with lots more rain forecast glad you have a good time hugs
Date: 2/14/2014 6:36:00 PM
I love happy endings!
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Date: 2/14/2014 6:41:00 PM
ty Rick nice to see you hope you had a great holiday hugs
Date: 2/14/2014 11:29:00 AM
arresting visulas in a form that suits the mood of this piece.. love your fearless juliet,shadow!...huggs
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Shadow Hamilton
Date: 2/14/2014 6:40:00 PM
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Date: 2/14/2014 3:53:00 AM
Beautifully done dear Shadow. All the best in the contest.
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Date: 2/14/2014 8:18:00 AM
my dearest friend so nice to see you here. ty so much love and hugs
Date: 2/14/2014 12:48:00 AM
This is very good, different than what I'm used to but isn't that the point.:-) I enjoyed your poetry this evening!!Asavvy1
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Date: 2/14/2014 8:18:00 AM
ty Jared it is an enjoyable form hugs
Date: 2/13/2014 11:03:00 PM
This is a grandiose write my friend! Your rhyming was very good within this awesome poem! I surely enjoyed reading this dynamic piece this evening! What a lovely poem, Great Work!!
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Date: 2/14/2014 8:17:00 AM
ty so much Russell I like the form I really must extend my form knowledge lol. I have joined a local group so will now be able to discuss new forms with them. your comments are very inspiring hugs
Date: 2/13/2014 10:41:00 PM
A unique view,this is super Shadow;gl in the contest.Happy vals.
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Date: 2/14/2014 8:14:00 AM
ty Kayod5 happy Valentine to you hugs
Date: 2/13/2014 9:42:00 PM
I loved this one!!! If you wish, look at this!!! http://www.poetrysoup.com/poems_poets/poem_detail.aspx?ID=510069, hope it speaks for itself!!!
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Shadow Hamilton
Date: 2/14/2014 8:13:00 AM
ty Arthur very pleased you like it will do hugs
Date: 2/13/2014 7:12:00 PM
Good luck in the contest. Light & Love
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Date: 2/14/2014 8:11:00 AM
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Date: 2/13/2014 5:50:00 PM
It must be 1812, and the Russians are driving Napoleon back to France. That's the impression I get when I read this. This is an impressive write.
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Date: 2/14/2014 8:10:00 AM
ty Robert yes it could be certainly fits +) ty dear hugs
Date: 2/13/2014 5:34:00 PM
This is a beautiful write here Shadow..kudos...Tim
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Date: 2/14/2014 8:09:00 AM
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Date: 2/13/2014 5:28:00 PM
Beautiful and amazing, the battle of war. I don't know much about the form. Linda, it flows well, and hopefully there could be a matrimony. . Take care & enjoy Valentine's Day with family and friends. :) ~SKAT
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Date: 2/14/2014 8:09:00 AM
ty Skat hope a;; is well with you Happy Valentine's hugs