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Jue Ju Gratification

submitting to the P~o~U~n~D~i~N~g waves
         ocean eyes engulf, begging release
             triumphantly, I moan my assent
        *mastery brings me sweet gratification*
            
                  Eileen Manassian Ghali
                         July 27, 2014
                  For Nette's Jue Ju Contest

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Casarah Nance

Date: 8/5/2014 6:17:00 PM

*whistles* you are the queen of sexy! Well done!! :)

Eileen Manassian
Date: 8/6/2014 7:58:00 AM

Thanks, dear...After reading your Jue Ju and your poem before the last...I think you might need the crown! Thanks for the visit.

Robert Lindley

Date: 8/4/2014 8:55:00 PM

This is one of my three favorites in this contest. Huge congrats on this write and the win you got with it my friend!!!

Eileen Manassian
Date: 8/6/2014 7:59:00 AM

Thanks for your post on my Jue Ju, Robert. You validate me because...to be honest...I was hoping it would do better than it did. Thanks for that vote of confidence.

John Lawless

Date: 8/4/2014 6:52:00 PM

Love the last line Eileen. Great take on the theme and great win.

Eileen Manassian
Date: 8/6/2014 7:59:00 AM

Thanks, John. That last line is sweet, isn't it? Thanks for the visit.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/4/2014 4:34:00 PM

Your poem was very worthy of being on the list. Glad to see it here. Congrats, sweet Eileen.

Eileen Manassian
Date: 8/6/2014 8:00:00 AM

Sweet Eileen...Me likes. Thanks...sweet Andrea! Hugs

Paul Callus

Date: 8/4/2014 11:12:00 AM

Back again, with congratulations, Eileen! You should have more faith in yourself:) // paul

Eileen Manassian
Date: 8/6/2014 8:23:00 AM

I should have more faith in myself, Paul...Any pointers on how that can be done? Thanks for your visit to my Jue Ju. Appreciate it.

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 8/4/2014 7:48:00 AM

Nicely interpreted theme of the contest, Congrats. Eileen

Eileen Manassian
Date: 8/6/2014 8:23:00 AM

Thank you for your visit to my Jue Ju, Dr Ram. So sorry for my late reply....I appreciate the words of praise.

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 8/4/2014 7:27:00 AM

Wow Eileen a real passionate one ! Congrats on huge win!

Eileen Manassian
Date: 8/6/2014 8:22:00 AM

Sorry for the late reply to your lovely post on my Jue ju! Love that you visit me, Dr Upma...You are a precious soul! hugs

Charlotte Puddifoot

Date: 7/28/2014 6:56:00 AM

I think this is a very effective entry for the contest; not easy to capture sensuality in so few words, but you have accomplished it here...I like that experimental first line, and "ocean eyes" - don't tell me you can't do imagery! poetry doesn't come effortlessly to me, eileen - I only wish it did! :)

Eileen Manassian
Date: 7/28/2014 7:45:00 AM

Really, Charlotte...Honestly...you do make it seem SO SO easy. :) I was going to write a poem after reading your write...something about...the illusiveness of imagery! Silly me! I just wish I could see things different and not used the tried and true adjectives in the normal places...dried up old prunes! See! There I go again! ;) Anyway...thanks for your post. It makes me SO happy to see you here. Ocean eyes: could be blue...could be green! AHA! Bit of mystery there! Hugs!

Paul Callus

Date: 7/28/2014 4:38:00 AM

Excellent Eileen! You did well to enter this for the contest. It would be perfect were you to shorten 2nd line to 5 words:) // paul

Paul Callus
Date: 7/28/2014 5:18:00 PM

Just perfect! Exactly the way I imagined you would have it!!! So much more effective!

Eileen Manassian
Date: 7/28/2014 6:03:00 AM

Thanks ever so much, Paul. I made the changes. I thought it was 5 or 7 words...as you like! I'm so thankful you brought it to my attention. i still don't think it has a chance, but at least now it doesn't have mistakes! Hugs

Justin Bordner

Date: 7/27/2014 8:36:00 PM

To be masterful One must reinvent. Ah, to create an unknown form of love making. Triumph in submission, thete can be divinity in that Eileen...J.A.B.

Eileen Manassian
Date: 7/28/2014 2:05:00 AM

Unknown form of love making? Something to add to Kama Sutra? That would be something. Thanks for the visit, Justin. Good to have you here.

Annie Lander

Date: 7/27/2014 6:58:00 PM

nicely done <3

Eileen Manassian
Date: 7/28/2014 2:06:00 AM

Thanks, Annie!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/27/2014 5:03:00 PM

I am noticing the comment of Craig's down here, but did you rework this then? I am counting five or seven words in every line, so it is indeed a Jue Ju . A very nice one! And dang, don't go deleting poems when you are in a dark period, my dear, it only hurts you and the rest of us!!!

Eileen Manassian
Date: 7/28/2014 2:07:00 AM

Sure did. Dang...I will try not to delete any more, but it's only when I'm lucid that the promise stands! ;)

John Lawless

Date: 7/27/2014 10:05:00 AM

Nicely done. I would score it very high.

Eileen Manassian
Date: 7/27/2014 10:50:00 AM

Thanks for the visit, John. I'm not entering it into the contest. Appreciate the thumbs up, though.