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Jolted by Twilight

I lay with languor praying for an answer I’d been seeking. Azure glitter-drops splashed upon the clean white sand nearby my feet. I drifted into sleep then as wisps of clouds in a sky mirroring the cerulean sea beneath it wafted slowly like my slackening pensive thoughts. I’d dozed and was awakened by gulls’ shrill long calls. Instantly, I was jolted by twilight, and I saw crimson and persimmon devouring sky. Slathered-on apricot and rubescent streaks formed the backdrop to the seagulls’ piercing shrieks. Some saffron deliciousness was also in my view when just as suddenly came the answer to the question I’d been pondering before my nap. It came as if the sunset had the sound of a snap! Gamboge, tangerine and raspberry sorbet drizzled into sea at the end of that day. Mesmerized and well-pleased, I lingered there. Dusk turned into night with the hush of a prayer.

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Date: 11/10/2024 1:01:00 AM
A beautifully painted scene when twilight descends down. Some of the images you have used are so captivating. "Gamboge, tangerine and raspberry sorbet drizzled into sea at the end of that day. Mesmerized and well-pleased, I lingered there." What a thrilling experience!
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Date: 11/9/2024 10:19:00 AM
This is a very different poem form your pen... Whose contest is it? Love some of the imager like gamboge, tangerine and raspberry sorbet.. so much colour and fruits in this one..
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 11/9/2024 10:36:00 AM
It is for Dilly Dally. The first part needed to be a bit different from bottom part. So I rhymed verse 2. Actually, Silent One, I have written very many poems similar to this style. You probably just never clicked on them. But thanks for liking this
Date: 11/9/2024 9:39:00 AM
Oh wowww, this is such an enchanting and artistic write dear beautiful Andrea! I'm really spellbound by your immaculate wordsmithery throughout and how you've used the colourful palette to paint such vivid shades of twilight, in a way that really captivates my heart... "Gamboge, tangerine and raspberry sorbet drizzled into sea at the end of that day" Ahhh, absolutely stunning! "Azure glitter-drops splashed upon the clean white sand nearby my feet" Sooo gorgeous! Loved reading this!
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 11/9/2024 10:39:00 AM
Thanks so much. I even learned a new word exploring colors for this one. Gsmboge!
Date: 11/9/2024 9:12:00 AM
I enjoyed reading your lovely write. "Good Luck"  We both did this one. Have a blessed day/weekend writing away...............
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 11/9/2024 10:40:00 AM
Thanks and good luck to you too
Date: 11/9/2024 8:47:00 AM
Such great writing, Andrea, I'm reading some awesome works on this theme today:)
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 11/9/2024 10:40:00 AM
Her theme was so inspiring!
Date: 11/9/2024 6:02:00 AM
Dawn and Twilight, my two most favorite times of the day. You describe Twilight so perfectly Andrea 'Mesmerized and well pleased, I lingered there. Dusk turned into night with the hush of a prayer'. Breathtaking! Hugs and Blessings, Jennifer.
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 11/9/2024 10:41:00 AM
Thanks, dear. I love twilight time
Date: 11/9/2024 5:01:00 AM
You certainly have a gift for words Andrea, loved reading your poem God bless you.
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 11/9/2024 10:43:00 AM
Thanks, John
Date: 11/9/2024 12:27:00 AM
how deep and beautiful is your poem, specially the great atmosphere you created, and the original images, a great reading dear andrea
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 11/9/2024 10:44:00 AM
Thanks very much, Yann
Date: 11/8/2024 11:20:00 PM
Dear sweet andrea, this is absolutely gorgeous, its like i watched these colors splattered across the sky, as i read this’ so artistic and well written! I especially love the second stanza! Flows seamlessly with slight alliterations too! Amazing poem! I think will do well! Best wishes. Sending you light always ~
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 11/9/2024 10:44:00 AM
So glad you liked it. Could you tell the bottom part was rhymed and not the top part,?

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