I Am Anaya Poet Haibun

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Jolted By Twilight Poetry Contest

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Jolted By Twilight

Once again the silvery moon has pilfered the golden sun
Total eclipse is upon me, time has elapsed suspending orange
Twilight’s begun on the orb’s descending softer glow 

Veiled in twilight…                                                    
Placid and limitless, I’ve glimpsed into the frontier in tranquil rapture
Moon aligns sans sun’s bright face

Jolted by twilight…
I coast along a sea of stars juddered wildly
Waves spanning the sky avec abandon 
Embraced by star-strewn externals
I leave behind a familiar harbor 
Anchored are my temporal remnants down in the terrestrial realm 
My spirit soaring, a mirthful lodger I be,
swimming in twilight’s radiance 
Its celestial smile shall be the death of me...

embracing star-strewn 
crowned external forevers~
we soar the tides dance

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Duke Beaufort November 19, 2024 at 3:49 AM Anaya, great graphic and even a little French in the poem. Remarkable and makes me smile. I Am Anaya December 1, 2024 at 11:53 AM A challenging contest, have I used French, it's a beautiful language. Ty, for all of your wonderful reviews, hope I can do the same for you my poet freind:)

Victor Buhagiar November 11, 2024 at 3:19 AM How can I describe your poem? Just beautiful is almost an insult. This is beyond excellent. I loved it. Hugs. I Am Anaya November 11, 2024 at 8:31 AM Ty, Victor! XO

Silent One November 9, 2024 at 10:47 AM Your poem’s celestial imagery of the moon, sun, stars, and twilight creates a powerful sense of the vastness and beauty of the cosmos. The “silvery moon” stealing light from the “golden sun” represents a momentary eclipse, a transition from day to night that symbolizes movement from the familiar to the unknown. The eclipse metaphor serves as both a literal image and a metaphor for a deeper journey into one’s own interior world, where earthly concerns are momentarily eclipsed by asense of cosmic connection. I Am Anaya November 9, 2024 at 1:24 PM :D Silent One November 9, 2024 at 11:28 AM Jolted my whole existence! I Am Anaya November 9, 2024 at 11:08 AM Impressions by the eclipse highlights and a captured sense of twilight, yes movement. I hope you found it jolting, SO Ty for your cosmic comments!

Ink Empress November 8, 2024 at 1:36 PM Wow this is beyond beautiful dear anaya, every word woven in this haibun is stellar! Magical and moving! Left me in awe! I love the haiku too at the end! Youve written one that is cosmically pleasing in such a descriptive manner with sumptuous diction! A fave this one is for me! Love it! Best wishes for the contest too. Sending you light always I Am Anaya November 8, 2024 at 3:51 PM Ink, thank you for such a lovely comment, compliment and fave <-- I'm excited to get one! You did make my day, sweet one. Your light shines through ~ Anaya xo