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11/2/2024 for Jolted by Twilight Poetry Contest sponsored by Di11y Da11y

The sun sailed in a graceful arc through a sky of azure blue as rainbows are known to do. Among the clouds, sometimes dark, he always came shining through as he kept on and flew. Alas, it only seemed...mid-flight? he was jolted by twilight, where sun and skyline would crash soon with explosive yellow and red, and the sun would soon be dead, black sky ruled by a bone white moon.   So, it is daily I ignore signs that pile up more and more. I postponed twilight's shock 'til I bent down, can't get up no more. I can't get up off the floor. Can you put on my sock?

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Date: 11/4/2024 4:06:00 PM
Ha. It was lovely and then you added the last part bent over trying to put on a sock. Ha
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David Crandall
Date: 11/4/2024 4:32:00 PM
I bought this crazy device on Amazon that is basically a tube with two handles attached to strings. You put the sock over the tube then, lower the tube, put your foot in, and then pull up the handles. It works relatively well.
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David Crandall
Date: 11/4/2024 4:31:00 PM
Hi Andrea, yep, unfortunately, this contest came up after i threw my back out (I think it was changing my pants), and then the next day worsening it by attempting to put on socks. In fact, finding a way of putting on socks has been top of mind to the point of messing up my poems-lol.
Date: 11/2/2024 2:25:00 PM
Love the subtle twist in the third verse David for twilight does come as a jolt as we age....very nicely done.
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David Crandall
Date: 11/2/2024 2:53:00 PM
Thanks John, I appreciate it!

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