Tom Cunningham Poet Rhyme

Jimmy Chongs Demise

There was this guy called Jimmy Chong
Lived on the outskirts of Hong kong
Married his first cousin Susy Dong
Her dad said  "Jimmy this is wrong."

On their honey moon they went to China
Susy's dad was determined to find her
To put an end to this misery and shame
Jimmy had brought on his family's name.

Well Jimmy had to keep one step ahead
Because old man Dong wanted him dead
He slept with one eye open when in bed
What Dong would do filled him with dread.

Jimmy only married Susy for her money
Didn't love her thought she looked funny
Now all Jimmy needed was her bank pin
When he had that, he would do her in.

At Guang Un Trang a little coastal town
Thats where old Dong tracked them down
He tied up Jimmy bundled him in his car
Drove to the cliffs which wasnt too far.

At the cliff he pushed him over the side
"A great shame you caused me "  old Dong cried
"You married young Susy against my wishes 
So now you can sleep with the fishes ".

Written on 29th of June 2018.

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Valsa George July 5, 2024 at 5:18 AM It is true that the young man brought shame to the family by marrying his first cousin Susy and that too for money. But the punishment, Susy's father gave him is unpardonable. Hair raising story! Have a great weekend, dear Tom. Tom Cunningham July 5, 2024 at 7:29 AM Thank you very much Valsa, money they say is the root of all evil, we see so much of it in the world today. Hope your week is going well. Tom

Maria Williams July 10, 2018 at 11:34 PM Well as they say 'what goes around comes around', though I was kind of hoping that Jimmy would right the wrong. Great write Tom....Maria hugs Tom Cunningham July 11, 2018 at 6:23 AM Thanks Maria, even wrote a senyru, CHONG TOOK DONG FOR FOOL/ BROKE THE GOLDEN RULE,NOT COOL/ULTIMATE PRICE PAID / Tom.

Andrea Dietrich July 10, 2018 at 6:35 PM haha, He got killed before HE could be the killer. I call this one Just Desserts. VERy nicely done. Tom Cunningham July 11, 2018 at 6:13 AM Thank you very much Andrea, in real life situations ,you think well it serves them right. Tom

Alexis Y. July 4, 2018 at 12:43 PM Hi Tom, You have told an entertaining story with a dramatic end. Don't be messing with daddy's little girl. If you do it just might be your demise. Good story telling:-)Alexis Tom Cunningham July 4, 2018 at 1:15 PM Thank you Alexis, lucky my three daughters met nice boys so I didn't have to resort to cliff measures lol. Tom

Gershon Wolf July 4, 2018 at 11:53 AM Had to reread this one, Tom. It's even better the second time around. A FAVE now. Kudos! ~ Gershon Tom Cunningham July 4, 2018 at 12:02 PM Thanks Gershon, like a good wine it gets better with age lol, happy you enjoyed it. Tom. Happy 4th July

Paul Callus July 3, 2018 at 4:43 PM You entertain with your narrative, Tom! It's 'wong' to marry for money! Regards // paul Tom Cunningham July 3, 2018 at 10:12 PM Haha, thanks Paul, it certainly is. Greetings from Turkey. Tom

Nette Onclaud July 3, 2018 at 11:05 AM ohhh, how you clown around with a sharp wit... this made my day, tom!...huggs Tom Cunningham July 3, 2018 at 4:38 PM Thanks. Nette, happy you enjoyed it. Tom

Anne-Lise Andresen July 3, 2018 at 8:22 AM - A good story with a dramatic end, Tom - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Tom Cunningham July 3, 2018 at 4:37 PM Thanks Sunshine, still frying over here. Tom.

Silent One July 3, 2018 at 6:58 AM Funny but sad... Great rhymes though.. Tom Cunningham July 3, 2018 at 4:37 PM Thank you SO. Tom.

Demetrios Trifiatis July 3, 2018 at 6:35 AM Superbly written story that delights and saddens the reader! I have enjoyed that poem enormously my friend but not the conclusion! Excellent! Tom Cunningham July 3, 2018 at 6:38 AM Thank you Demetrios, there are more humane ways of dealing with evil crooks. Tom

Lyric Man July 3, 2018 at 12:05 AM Hi Tom.. I loved reading your fun poem this evening with a delightful bedtime tea. I look forward to reading more of your creative works tomorrow.. sleep well! Tom Cunningham July 3, 2018 at 12:48 AM Thank you Dave, glad you enjoyed it, love a bit of humour. Tom

Ilene Bauer July 2, 2018 at 4:00 PM i enjoyed this rhyming tale, tom! Tom Cunningham July 2, 2018 at 4:48 PM Thanks ilene, happy you enjoyed it. Tom

Rajat Kanti Chakrabarty July 2, 2018 at 1:52 PM what an ending ......mafiosi style blast-off. Tom Cunningham July 2, 2018 at 4:44 PM Haha Rajat, it certainly doesn't pay to wrong a dong, that's for sure.

Gershon Wolf July 2, 2018 at 12:13 PM Such a creative romp, Tom! Really enjoyed this one. Your Muse was in full bloom for this one! Kudos! Best always, Gershon Tom Cunningham July 2, 2018 at 12:24 PM Was relaxing in the shade when I thought this one up, love a bit of humour, happy you enjoyed it. Tom

CayCay Godwin July 2, 2018 at 10:34 AM An Italian ending to a delightful and entertaining tale that lifted my grin all the way into a smile! Your imagination is quite healthy - don't ever doubt that! Poetry hugs ... CayCay Tom Cunningham July 2, 2018 at 12:26 PM Thank you CayCay, happy it brought a smile to your face. A bit of humour never goes amiss lol. Tom