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Jimmy Chongs Demise

There was this guy called Jimmy Chong Lived on the outskirts of Hong kong Married his first cousin Susy Dong Her dad said "Jimmy this is wrong." On their honey moon they went to China Susy's dad was determined to find her To put an end to this misery and shame Jimmy had brought on his family's name. Well Jimmy had to keep one step ahead Because old man Dong wanted him dead He slept with one eye open when in bed What Dong would do filled him with dread. Jimmy only married Susy for her money Didn't love her thought she looked funny Now all Jimmy needed was her bank pin When he had that, he would do her in. At Guang Un Trang a little coastal town Thats where old Dong tracked them down He tied up Jimmy bundled him in his car Drove to the cliffs which wasnt too far. At the cliff he pushed him over the side "A great shame you caused me " old Dong cried "You married young Susy against my wishes So now you can sleep with the fishes ". Written on 29th of June 2018.

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Valsa George

Date: 7/5/2024 5:18:00 AM

It is true that the young man brought shame to the family by marrying his first cousin Susy and that too for money. But the punishment, Susy's father gave him is unpardonable. Hair raising story! Have a great weekend, dear Tom.

Tom Cunningham
Date: 7/5/2024 7:29:00 AM

Thank you very much Valsa, money they say is the root of all evil, we see so much of it in the world today. Hope your week is going well. Tom

Maria Williams

Date: 7/10/2018 11:34:00 PM

Well as they say 'what goes around comes around', though I was kind of hoping that Jimmy would right the wrong. Great write Tom....Maria hugs

Tom Cunningham
Date: 7/11/2018 6:23:00 AM

Thanks Maria, even wrote a senyru, CHONG TOOK DONG FOR FOOL/ BROKE THE GOLDEN RULE,NOT COOL/ULTIMATE PRICE PAID / Tom.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/10/2018 6:35:00 PM

haha, He got killed before HE could be the killer. I call this one Just Desserts. VERy nicely done.

Tom Cunningham
Date: 7/11/2018 6:13:00 AM

Thank you very much Andrea, in real life situations ,you think well it serves them right. Tom

Alexis Y.

Date: 7/4/2018 12:43:00 PM

Hi Tom, You have told an entertaining story with a dramatic end. Don't be messing with daddy's little girl. If you do it just might be your demise. Good story telling:-)Alexis

Tom Cunningham
Date: 7/4/2018 1:15:00 PM

Thank you Alexis, lucky my three daughters met nice boys so I didn't have to resort to cliff measures lol. Tom

Gershon Wolf

Date: 7/4/2018 11:53:00 AM

Had to reread this one, Tom. It's even better the second time around. A FAVE now. Kudos! ~ Gershon

Tom Cunningham
Date: 7/4/2018 12:02:00 PM

Thanks Gershon, like a good wine it gets better with age lol, happy you enjoyed it. Tom. Happy 4th July

Paul Callus

Date: 7/3/2018 4:43:00 PM

You entertain with your narrative, Tom! It's 'wong' to marry for money! Regards // paul

Tom Cunningham
Date: 7/3/2018 10:12:00 PM

Haha, thanks Paul, it certainly is. Greetings from Turkey. Tom

Nette Onclaud

Date: 7/3/2018 11:05:00 AM

ohhh, how you clown around with a sharp wit... this made my day, tom!...huggs

Tom Cunningham
Date: 7/3/2018 4:38:00 PM

Thanks. Nette, happy you enjoyed it. Tom

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 7/3/2018 8:22:00 AM

- A good story with a dramatic end, Tom - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Tom Cunningham
Date: 7/3/2018 4:37:00 PM

Thanks Sunshine, still frying over here. Tom.

Silent One

Date: 7/3/2018 6:58:00 AM

Funny but sad... Great rhymes though..

Tom Cunningham
Date: 7/3/2018 4:37:00 PM

Thank you SO. Tom.

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 7/3/2018 6:35:00 AM

Superbly written story that delights and saddens the reader! I have enjoyed that poem enormously my friend but not the conclusion! Excellent!

Tom Cunningham
Date: 7/3/2018 6:38:00 AM

Thank you Demetrios, there are more humane ways of dealing with evil crooks. Tom

Lyric Man

Date: 7/3/2018 12:05:00 AM

Hi Tom.. I loved reading your fun poem this evening with a delightful bedtime tea. I look forward to reading more of your creative works tomorrow.. sleep well!

Tom Cunningham
Date: 7/3/2018 12:48:00 AM

Thank you Dave, glad you enjoyed it, love a bit of humour. Tom

Ilene Bauer

Date: 7/2/2018 4:00:00 PM

i enjoyed this rhyming tale, tom!

Tom Cunningham
Date: 7/2/2018 4:48:00 PM

Thanks ilene, happy you enjoyed it. Tom

Rajat Kanti Chakrabarty

Date: 7/2/2018 1:52:00 PM

what an ending ......mafiosi style blast-off.

Tom Cunningham
Date: 7/2/2018 4:44:00 PM

Haha Rajat, it certainly doesn't pay to wrong a dong, that's for sure.

Gershon Wolf

Date: 7/2/2018 12:13:00 PM

Such a creative romp, Tom! Really enjoyed this one. Your Muse was in full bloom for this one! Kudos! Best always, Gershon

Tom Cunningham
Date: 7/2/2018 12:24:00 PM

Was relaxing in the shade when I thought this one up, love a bit of humour, happy you enjoyed it. Tom

CayCay Jennings

Date: 7/2/2018 10:34:00 AM

An Italian ending to a delightful and entertaining tale that lifted my grin all the way into a smile! Your imagination is quite healthy - don't ever doubt that! Poetry hugs ... CayCay

Tom Cunningham
Date: 7/2/2018 12:26:00 PM

Thank you CayCay, happy it brought a smile to your face. A bit of humour never goes amiss lol. Tom