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Jesus Saves

What came first The bottle or the glass The bottle Seventy percent proof Thirty percent doubt That always made her laugh The proof of doubt The glass half full Her life half empty There was a time Once upon a time, there was a time But that was then, and this is now God, how poetic was she That deserved a drink Or maybe three The neon sign across the road Jesus saves It shone a light Well, it did at night Which was alright Cos electricity was really tight The bottle seemed to disappear Not a trickle, not a tear Jesus saves across the road Shining bright In the night Seventy percent proof He existed just to say Thirty percent doubt She would have laughed Maybe a tear But like the bottle Sadly She was no longer here.

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Date: 5/27/2024 11:17:00 AM
This is really gut-wrenching with a bit of humor thrown in Paul. Excellent. Congratulations! :)
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Paul Bell
Date: 5/27/2024 11:25:00 AM
It is a sad one.
Date: 5/27/2024 9:53:00 AM
Dear Paul, I was captured within the poignant imagery, emotive tone and irony of your poem from title to sad finale. The repetition of "Jesus saves" was impactful in view of what was being lost. An intimate portrait of a woman with a sense of humor, a poetic voice and an addiction that took her away from the narrator. "Seventy percent proof/Thirty percent doubt" - wow! powerful! "The glass half full Her life half empty" - hits my heart with force. A soulful saga so beautifully expressed. Congratulations for your win in Charlotte's contest. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Paul Bell
Date: 5/27/2024 11:24:00 AM
Many like this woman in the world. Trying, but not quite making it.
Date: 5/27/2024 5:13:00 AM
have you been peeping through my window? lol joking aside, a sad scene and sobering message, but delivered with your customary touch of dark humour, and punchy rhyme to drive home the poem - congrats on your win in my contest!
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Paul Bell
Date: 5/27/2024 11:21:00 AM
Here's me thinking the title would have thrown you. Is that my street cred up now. You still got the blue curtains. lol

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