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Jar of Hurricanes

You mirror my pain in deep lines of dark thunder within a jar of hurricanes mocking the sorrow I sing in silence watching sadness vaporise as I grieve and quiver to the tunes of piercing walls where shadows of regret dance to the moon

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Date: 2/3/2024 8:45:00 AM
Dear Empress, the depth and breadth of your trio of Tetractys is exquisite! To imagine a jar of hurricanes, the immense size, power and angst of such things caught in the size of a jar. Your raw emotions churn with a heartbreak ache potent enough to break its confines apart - as "shadows of regret dance to the moon" Ah, such potent, explosive yet tenderly expressed poetic artistry! Your poetic gift shines in the strict confines of this form. Amazing! Warmest wishes my inspiring friend.. ~Susan
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Date: 11/5/2023 4:56:00 AM
This poem is a pure reflection of your artistic talent for weaving such vulnerable emotions within profound imageries and delicate descriptions! Dear Ink, this is definitely one of my fav tetractys poem from you.. "Jar of hurricanes" What a breathtaking and unique combination right there.. Gosh! "Watching sadness vaporise as I grieve.. " And that ending! Really an impeccable write and poetic expression in so many ways.. One can feel that ache and angst, swirling the soul in a hurricane of pain..
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Date: 10/28/2023 9:23:00 AM
You did this form so well.. your use of words are very good to create the emotions you wanted to portray, despite the restrictions of the form... you are doing these forms perfectly.
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Date: 10/27/2023 4:15:00 PM
Your creativity flashed like lightening to go with the jar of hurricanes, Ink. Meaningful poetry in such a restrictive form. I'm impress, Empress. "Mocking the sorrow, I sing in silence watching sadness vaporize as I grieve and quiver." The imagery is exquisite. Thanks for sharing your light and your gift of poetry with us, my dear friend. Bill
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Date: 10/27/2023 3:50:00 PM
Probably one of the best poems I ever read in this form. Your pen is golden.
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Date: 10/27/2023 2:03:00 PM
A wonderful write. Never thought of a hurricane in a jar. Good One... Have a great day/weekend................
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Date: 10/27/2023 1:25:00 PM
A beautiful and unusual thought "jar of hurricanes"- enjoyed it, ink! :)
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Date: 10/27/2023 1:03:00 PM
Dear Ink, The poem you've written is Just wonderful. The capacity to successfully express various emotions in a few words is an impressive accomplishment. The strict syllable constraints inherent in the triple Tetractys form are a hard task, yet your achievement exceeds all expectations. The rich imagery" thunder within a jar of hurricanes" and interesting diction shed more beauty on your poem. Your poetic flare shines really well.
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Date: 10/27/2023 10:17:00 AM
May every regret turn into a song of hope as you look upon the moon with new eyes, may you renew your strength with the stars on your side and the light your best friend Ink Beauty xo
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Date: 10/27/2023 10:12:00 AM
An excellent poem. You proved that a lot can be said in one sentence. Wow.
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Date: 10/27/2023 8:02:00 AM
Quite a feat, my friend--how seamlessly you weaved emotions into this triple Tetractys. Not easy to write just one with the syllable constraints--three is a laudable achievement. Keep shining in your poetic prowess, Ink.
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