Jagged

Jagged edges of this morning, clad in black skies dark adorning, issues now it’s subtle warning leaving living souls depressed. Jagged are emotions teeming; deep within, our hearts are screaming; ‘pon our cheeks our tears are streaming with our sadness now expressed. Jagged are the headstones wearing names of souls departed bearing sadness in those here still caring, left behind with death’s bequest. Jagged are my deepest feelings; deeper still my thoughts revealing; death now leaves emotions reeling as we lay your soul to rest. October 22, 2023 Elinore Catherine Gondolf March 31, 1924 - September 23, 2023 Rest in peace, Mom.

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Silent One

Date: 12/17/2023 12:00:00 PM

Great choice for the top 100 new poems John.. Sorry for your loss, to live to 99 is a wonderful achievement and I am sure you have so many beautiful memories with your mum.

John Gondolf
Date: 12/17/2023 12:23:00 PM

Thank you so much, Silent One, we truly were blessed to have my Mother around for so long, and true, I do have so many beautiful memories. John

Smita Kulkarni

Date: 12/5/2023 2:26:00 PM

My heartfelt condolences to you John! You have described your feelings so powerfully!

John Gondolf
Date: 12/6/2023 4:59:00 AM

Thank you so much, Smita, I appreciate your thoughts.

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 11/21/2023 3:07:00 PM

Your poem deeply touched me, John--even before it was written about your mother. You're so right...some mornings are jagged as are so many emotions of our emotions. These lines reminded me of how I feel when I visit my parents' graves: Jagged are the headstones wearing names of souls departed bearing sadness in those here still caring, left behind with death’s bequest I'm faving this one. Have a splendid evening, Sara

John Gondolf
Date: 11/22/2023 2:43:00 AM

Thank you for sharing your thoughts and saving this to your favs Sara. It always means a lot to know that readers find a personal meaning in your words. Wishing you and Bill a wonderful Thanksgiving. John

The Situation

Date: 11/16/2023 1:17:00 PM

Bam!!!! This is what I wait for. That piece that will be a part of history because It rings with me. It has a muse. It lets me know you care what people write about you. A fav.

John Gondolf
Date: 11/17/2023 2:39:00 AM

Thanks so much for your kind words and condolences.

The Situation
Date: 11/16/2023 1:19:00 PM

March 31, My brothers birthday condolences.

Tom Woody

Date: 11/15/2023 3:55:00 PM

Sorry for your loss John. Mine passed this month. She was 80

John Gondolf
Date: 11/15/2023 4:43:00 PM

Thank you for thoughts, Tommy, and may I offer you my condolences as well. The last couple months have been difficult and I’m sure you are going through the same. Peace my friend.

Gary Radice

Date: 11/14/2023 9:17:00 AM

Your mum lives on forever, John, in this beautifully crafted poem that is as brilliant as it is poignant. Cheers - Gary

John Gondolf
Date: 11/14/2023 9:20:00 AM

Thank you for your kind words, Gary, I appreciate it. John

Margarita Lillico

Date: 11/14/2023 3:59:00 AM

Oh John, sorry for your loss, your mom must have been so proud of you in life, proud in Heaven now. Reading again and again, feeling your sadness, feeling mom’s pride…

John Gondolf
Date: 11/14/2023 7:05:00 AM

Thank you so much for your kind words, Margarita, It means a lot to me. John

Anais Vionet

Date: 11/10/2023 8:15:00 AM

This is wonderful John.

John Gondolf
Date: 11/10/2023 5:02:00 PM

Thank you, Anais.

Kelly Deschler

Date: 11/9/2023 10:41:00 AM

Such a beautiful and heartfelt tribute to your Mom ... The rhythm and rhyme throughout this poem is superb. So well done, John :)

John Gondolf
Date: 11/9/2023 11:36:00 AM

Thank you, Kelly, I appreciate it.

Christina Bowring

Date: 11/8/2023 11:15:00 AM

Gosh John my friend, what a truly beautiful, touching poem so incredibly expressed and exquisite. I’ve read it several times and each time it pulls on the heart strings. Your words are so heartfelt that it pulls the reader in. That last stanza, in particular, is incredibly moving and the last line really grabs you. Heartfelt sympathy to you for your immense loss and big hugs.

John Gondolf
Date: 11/8/2023 12:05:00 PM

Thank you so much, Christina, I truly appreciate your kind words and thoughts. It is so comforting in hard times to be surrounded by friends. Hugs, John

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 11/3/2023 4:18:00 AM

Jagged is the perfect title and emotionally descriptive word for your loss and grief. No matter our age, losing one's mother is gut wrenching, leaving a hole in our hearts & souls. I'm sincerely sorry for your loss. Thanks for sharing your words and your creative talents. Am now 'following you,' fellow Dallasite. Have a pleasant day, Sara

John Gondolf
Date: 11/7/2023 2:31:00 AM

Thank you so much for sharing your thoughts and comments, Sara, your words are comforting. John

The Situation

Date: 10/31/2023 11:13:00 AM

OMG This is what I want on my obituary. I never ever want to say I got something from a man that was sweet. But this is sweet and I love it.

John Gondolf
Date: 11/1/2023 2:37:00 AM

Thank you for the visit and sharing your thoughts, TS, I appreciate it. John

Constance La France

Date: 10/27/2023 8:01:00 AM

John, so sorry for your loss, you penned a wonderful poem for you mom, and congratulations on your win in my contest, well done, Constance

John Gondolf
Date: 10/27/2023 8:59:00 AM

Thank you, Constance.

Brandy Nicole

Date: 10/26/2023 10:05:00 AM

Congratulations John, on your placement in this contest. I'm so sorry for your loss. My best to you, my dear sweet friend. Hugs, Brandy

John Gondolf
Date: 10/27/2023 6:12:00 AM

Thank you, Brandy.

Silent One

Date: 10/24/2023 12:45:00 PM

Congratulations on your placement in the contest..

John Gondolf
Date: 10/25/2023 4:37:00 PM

Thanks, SO, I appreciate it.

Brandy Nicole

Date: 10/22/2023 7:21:00 PM

Darkness surrounds the heart, when moments of sadness linger. Memories always remain, but that doesn't take away the pain. Your words caress softly around me and my heart. This is tender and emotional, all at the same time. My best to you, my dear friend. Hugs, Brandy

John Gondolf
Date: 10/23/2023 2:34:00 AM

Thank you my dear friend for always supporting me the way you do. I appreciate your kind thoughts in this moment of sadness. Hugs, John

Mark Hughes

Date: 10/22/2023 9:39:00 AM

This speaks so well of the loss of special people in our lives, I can certainly relate! Very well done John!

John Gondolf
Date: 10/22/2023 12:16:00 PM

Thank you, Mark, I appreciate your thoughts and comments.