James Peranteau Poet Free verse

Jack and Jill

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          thud
          thud
          thud

         crack
          thud
          thud
          bang
           ow
          slide

         smack
          bang
          thud
            ow

   down the hill
  into the rocks
against the trees
        we fall

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Elton Camp November 8, 2010 at 12:58 PM Good job. I wondered how you could write about such a common nursery rhyme effectively, but you did it. Elton Camp

Charmaine Chircop May 8, 2009 at 2:56 PM yes we fall,and then wake up again,who is so perfect not to ever fall-well penned--charma

L'Nass Shango May 6, 2009 at 11:17 AM Who has the healing in his wings to pick th ebroken pieces up ... after the situation ... each poem you write is a leverage of thought, and a temptation.

Diane Christian April 21, 2009 at 10:59 AM weeeee LOL funny its great God bless from diane