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It's Over

Fallen--- face down in the dirt, your pale lips kissed the earth a marker will hold your place though the world may forget your face For you it's over... Remember when she said come back--- and then we'll Wed as the nightbirds begin to sing she holds your wedding ring with trembling hands... As your flame begins to dim soon you'll reach the end when your spark of life has fled you'll be counted among the dead For you it's over... Family trees were meant blossom now your spot is but a token as your lines forever broken For you it's over now... Your eyes will never see the pain--- the misery as darkness--- invades the minds of those you've left behind... For them--- it's just begun...
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Gauthier Avatar
February 11, 2020 at 3:32 PM
Back with congrats on your POTD, Running Wolves.
Hamilton Avatar
February 6, 2020 at 2:35 PM
Truth spoken in this sad but lush write, congrats on POTD!
Wolves Avatar
February 7, 2020 at 9:25 AM
thank you kind Sir.
Bush Avatar
January 27, 2020 at 6:25 PM
This is absolutely stunning. And the last line is a hammer. You have a wonderful way. Never heard of POTD but you deserve it all, every day.
Wolves Avatar
January 27, 2020 at 7:07 PM
thank you, but I'm not that good...
Proxenos Avatar
January 23, 2020 at 1:32 AM
Hi RW - a masterful piece of poetry, so well crafted with abounding imagination. Congratulations on being awarded POTD. Blessings, Jennifer.
Wolves Avatar
January 23, 2020 at 7:01 AM
Thank you it was indeed a wonderful yet shocking surprise to wake up and find P.O.T.D. honors on one of my poems..
Messina Avatar
January 20, 2020 at 5:04 PM
Great poetry, RW. Love that last line...Congratulations on POTD. All the best, Charlie
Wolves Avatar
January 20, 2020 at 5:38 PM
thank you kind Sir
Goldsmith Avatar
January 20, 2020 at 1:20 PM
Congratulations on your POTD. So very true. You said it beautifully. Have a wonderful day...............
Wolves Avatar
January 20, 2020 at 1:21 PM
Thank you very kindly dear poetess
Marcum Wong Avatar
January 19, 2020 at 10:55 PM
Wow what a powerful piece! Many congratulations on your POTD honor Robert. xxoo
Wolves Avatar
January 20, 2020 at 6:38 AM
thank you dear Lady
Rodrigues Avatar
January 19, 2020 at 10:16 PM
Congrats on POTD!
Wolves Avatar
January 19, 2020 at 10:28 PM
thank you very much.
Nicole Avatar
January 19, 2020 at 3:05 PM
It is so good seeing your words here in the spotlight. You are a talented writer, honest and sincere. These words touched my heart. Keep being You. Congratulations Robert, on Poem of the Day. ~ Brandy
Wolves Avatar
January 19, 2020 at 4:03 PM
awwww.... thank you((( hugs)))
Michael Avatar
January 19, 2020 at 2:56 PM
But for YOU...it's Over...Nice one...Congratulations Running Wolves on POTD
Wolves Avatar
January 19, 2020 at 4:02 PM
thank you so very kindly, I'm still kind of like are you serious.. lol
Roper Avatar
January 19, 2020 at 1:58 PM
Congratulations on POTD
Wolves Avatar
January 19, 2020 at 2:17 PM
Thank you dear Lady
Dietrich Avatar
January 19, 2020 at 1:55 PM
This one is well deserving of POTD. Just wonderful!
Wolves Avatar
January 19, 2020 at 2:18 PM
Thank you, I truly appreciate you
Adams Avatar
January 19, 2020 at 1:27 PM
so glad to see this one as POTD Robert... back to say congratulations to you... hugs
Wolves Avatar
January 19, 2020 at 1:37 PM
thank you, you are such a true sweetheart dear Lady
Andresen Avatar
January 19, 2020 at 1:24 PM
- There will always be someone who must suffer ... congratulations on this powerful p.o.t.d. - // Anne-Lise
Wolves Avatar
January 19, 2020 at 1:36 PM
thank you so very much
Proxenos Avatar
January 19, 2020 at 11:43 AM
An excellent poem - congratulations re: the honor of POTD that has been bestowed upon you Running Wolves. Best regards, Jennifer.
Wolves Avatar
January 19, 2020 at 12:17 PM
Thank you very much, I am very much indeed honored..
Wanter Avatar
January 19, 2020 at 10:29 AM
Lovely! You can feel that it is written from personal experience. Congratulations.
Wolves Avatar
January 19, 2020 at 10:51 AM
Thank you very much and yes it is written from personal experience. but in an effort to make it all inclusive I changed some minor details like "face down in the dirt would have been face down on the deck." and "your pale lips kissed the earth would have been your pale lips kissed lifeless steel." or something to that affect... this was written about an accident on the U.S.S. Nimitz which killed 14 and critically injured 45.
Warrior Avatar
January 19, 2020 at 9:28 AM
A beautiful emotive write my friend...Congrats!! on POTD!!...Happy 2020...all the best from the Wingster ^WW^ :o)
Wolves Avatar
January 19, 2020 at 10:08 AM
thank you so very much, when I awoke this morning and logged on here, well needless to say I didn't expect to find this poem as P.O.T.D, nor any poem of mine for that matter... I am truly honored and somewhat stunned by this. I thank you and all the wonderful people here on Soup again...
Rodrigues Avatar
January 19, 2020 at 8:24 AM
A wonderful write! A sad tribute to a dying soul and those left behind.
Wolves Avatar
January 19, 2020 at 8:30 AM
Thank you dear Lady. I wish I could have done better by them all
Pandit Avatar
January 19, 2020 at 7:47 AM
You speak for the fallen eloquently--and tug the hearts of those left behind--congrats on poem of the day!
Wolves Avatar
January 19, 2020 at 8:14 AM
Thank you very much, I'm truly grateful and honored by this.
Allison Avatar
January 19, 2020 at 5:55 AM
A very poignant piece RW, many congrats on a very well deserved POTD:-) hugs Jan xx
Allison Avatar
January 19, 2020 at 7:03 AM
It's so lovely to see a different name on the list rather than ones who get it on an all too regular basis:-) keep up the great work:-) hugs Jan xx
Wolves Avatar
January 19, 2020 at 7:02 AM
Thank you very kindly... I'm stunned and Honoured
Cunningham Avatar
January 19, 2020 at 3:56 AM
Powerful verse R. W., I could imagine many having those thoughts as they fell in battle. Congrats on P. O. T. D.. Tom.
Wolves Avatar
January 19, 2020 at 7:05 AM
Thank you Sir... I'm truly honored and feeling like wow
Nicole Avatar
January 18, 2020 at 9:36 PM
Your thoughts caress gently around me and my heart. This is sad, tender and emotional- all at the same time. I agree, when it's over for you, it has just begun for them. I wish to save this in my favorites. Sometimes, the heart needs to hold such moments. ~ Brandy
Wolves Avatar
January 19, 2020 at 7:15 AM
Thank you so very kindly dear Lady. This poem was inspired by true events from my past and the song the unknown soldier by Jim Morrison and the Doors. was having a bad hair day the day I wrote this
Adams Avatar
January 17, 2020 at 6:36 PM
wow... this is powerful and very well crafted Robert...i really like this one, it's heartfelt ...one can see the soldier and the sad fate... hugs
Wolves Avatar
January 17, 2020 at 6:39 PM
thank you sweet Lady
Gauthier Avatar
January 17, 2020 at 4:50 PM
A most poignant poem, Running Wolves. Love it. A FAVE for me.
Wolves Avatar
January 17, 2020 at 5:13 PM
Thank you. this is one of the poems I've written about my time in service...
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