Jan Allison Poet Rhyme

It's a Windy Day

Blossom floats down from cherry trees 
pink confetti drifts on the breeze 
it’s windblown

Storm clouds gathering all around 
blustery gales turn the sails round 
of windmills 

Riding the surf board standing tall 
crest a wave trying not to fall
windsurfers


Jan Allison
22nd November 2014
Sponsor Nette Onclaud
Contest: Fire, Earth, Wind
Chosen Word: Wind
Syllables checked with How Many Syllables counter
~awarded 5th place~

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Elias Uddin December 12, 2014 at 11:27 AM "Blossom floats down from cherry trees pink confetti drifts on the breeze it’s windblown" Liked! Jan Allison December 14, 2014 at 3:46 AM Thanks so much Elias:-) Hugs Jan x

Shelly Wiseberg December 3, 2014 at 1:28 PM I like your descriptive words blossoms float down from cherry trees pink confetti drifts on the breeze, it flows well Jan Allison December 3, 2014 at 1:48 PM many thanks Shelly:-) Hugs jan xxx

Kayod5 Kayode November 29, 2014 at 12:38 AM Congrats on the win Jan,nice this earned its place....huggs Jan Allison November 29, 2014 at 4:51 AM Many thanks Kayod5:-) Hugs Jan xx

Kevin Leake November 28, 2014 at 5:04 AM I can hear the silent soft wind breezing through this piece. Very well written Jan Best wishes Kevin Jan Allison November 28, 2014 at 7:11 AM Thanks so much for the lovely comment Kevin:-) Hugs Jan xx

Robert Stoner Jr November 27, 2014 at 8:34 PM Congratulations Jan on another winning poem, much deserved Jan Allison November 28, 2014 at 2:15 AM Thanks so much Robert:-) Hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich November 27, 2014 at 5:41 PM Big congrats to you, Jan. Glad to see this beauty on the list. Jan Allison November 28, 2014 at 2:14 AM Thanks Andrea - I was so happy to be placed this time:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus November 27, 2014 at 3:43 PM Congratulations Jan. I knew you would make it to the winners' list; once again mine didn't! // paul Jan Allison November 28, 2014 at 2:13 AM Oh I am sorry Paul - I didn't get on the list last time - swings and roundabouts :-( Main thing is we tried! Hugs Jan x

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders November 26, 2014 at 7:43 PM Each verse feels like an adventure, Jan! Congrats on your win! Hugs, Rhonda Jan Allison November 27, 2014 at 9:42 AM Thanks so much Rhonda:-) hugs Jan xx

Nette Onclaud November 26, 2014 at 7:09 AM buoyant is the word, jan.. so splendidly penned!.. thanks for gracing my contest and big congrats on your great win! Jan Allison November 26, 2014 at 7:15 AM Thanks Nette I enjoy the challenges you set us and i was delighted to be placed in this contest:-) hugs jan x

Connie Marcum Wong November 26, 2014 at 12:56 AM Congratulations on your win Jan. So happy to see you on the winner's list! Jan Allison November 26, 2014 at 1:43 AM Thanks Connie I was happy to be there! Hugs Jan xx

Joseph May November 25, 2014 at 7:53 PM CONGRATS ON YOUR WIN jAN Jan Allison November 26, 2014 at 1:42 AM Thanks so much Joseph:-) Hugs jan xx

Sandra Haight November 25, 2014 at 6:23 PM Hi Jan, I missed reading your poem, but see it now. Each verse is precious in itself with wonderful words and great imagery! Congratulations on your win! Hugs, Sandra Jan Allison November 25, 2014 at 6:24 PM Thanks so much for the lovely comment Sandra:-) Hugs Jan xx

Earl Schumacker November 25, 2014 at 5:26 PM Hi Jan, Great construct here. It is right on the money. Yes, they do look like confetti. Nice selection of words and delicate meaning. I would have given you a #1 but I'm biased, but putting that aside, you should have gotten a higher score here. Have a nice evening. Earl Jan Allison November 25, 2014 at 5:35 PM Aww you are too kind Earl - I'm grateful to even place these days so was happy with the win:-) hugs jan xx

Maurice Yvonne November 25, 2014 at 4:14 PM Congratulations on your win, Jan! Jan Allison November 25, 2014 at 4:16 PM Thanks so much Maurice i was pleased to be placed! Hugs jan xxx

Barbara Gorelick November 25, 2014 at 4:10 PM Of all of them, mine included, yours makes the most sense. To me, anyway. Congrats !! BG Jan Allison November 25, 2014 at 4:16 PM Thanks so much Barbara I truly appreciate that wonderful comment :-) Hugs Jan xx

Brenda Meier-Hans November 25, 2014 at 2:52 PM Dropping back with my congratulations Jan. It good you left the beans out lol. Jan Allison November 25, 2014 at 3:12 PM LOl thanks Brenda:-) Hugs Jan xx

Dr. Upma A. Sharma November 23, 2014 at 4:54 AM U r at ur best Jan! Gl in contest! Jan Allison November 23, 2014 at 4:56 AM Thank you so much for the lovely comment Dr Sharma:-) hugs jan xxx

Andrea Dietrich November 22, 2014 at 3:46 PM Jan, I don't think it matters at all if the verses are completely unified or not. this is really nice. My favorite is the middle one. I don't know why, just the sound of it. should do just fine in the contest. soupmail. Jan Allison November 22, 2014 at 3:53 PM Thanks so much Andrea:-0 hugs Jan xx

Gary Bateman November 22, 2014 at 3:26 PM Jan, Most beautiful imagery employed here in your write. Best of Luck in the contest. I think you have a very strong entry with this poem!! Best Always, Gary Jan Allison November 22, 2014 at 3:27 PM Thanks so much Gary I hope I've done it right:_) Hugs jan xx

Brenda Meier-Hans November 22, 2014 at 3:07 PM It's amazing how many types of wind there is. I love it myself, and love your windy day. Jan Allison November 22, 2014 at 3:09 PM Thanks Brenda - I resisted humour about beans for this one lol:-) hugs jan xx

Sandip Goswami November 22, 2014 at 2:32 PM Very nice image...I love the wave...thank you very much...Best wishes to you... Jan Allison November 22, 2014 at 2:38 PM Thanks so much Sandip:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus November 22, 2014 at 2:18 PM Well done, Jan. You tackled this the right way; using a windy day as a topic you were able to give three different flashes that are united and separate at the same time. I expect this to do well. hugs // paul Jan Allison November 22, 2014 at 2:37 PM I replied on your comment again paul - I think the opposite - yours required more skill!Thanks for the comment:-) Hugs Jan xx

David Meade November 22, 2014 at 1:37 PM from a breeze, to a gale, to surfing a big wave -- life in the wind!! nicely done. Jan Allison November 22, 2014 at 1:39 PM Thanks David for the lovely comment as ever:-) Hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith November 22, 2014 at 1:20 PM They are wonderful Jan...The first is outstanding...I didn't know you could surf...hugs Tim Jan Allison November 22, 2014 at 1:26 PM I can't! Hugs jan xx

Maurice Yvonne November 22, 2014 at 12:05 PM I love this poem. Hope you have the winner here. Fav. Jan Allison November 22, 2014 at 12:22 PM Thanks as ever Maurice - I have seen some lovely entries I just write and hope for the best:-) Hugs Jan xxx