Andrea Dietrich Poet Quatrain

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see this amazing narwhal video, very short!

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=VhujEQhg764

 

It Would Be a Wondrous Thing

It would be a wondrous thing
If I chanced to see
Unicorns of ocean deep
Swimming nearby me.

Each one with a  spiraled tusk
Jutting from its jaw,
Swimming round about me; oh,
I would be in awe!

Clicking, squealing, whistling,
Swimming in their pod.
If I tried to join their group,
Would that seem too odd?

I could try to click at them
With my little tongue.
If I whistled, would they think
Songs were being sung?

Swimming with some narwhals though -
It will never be.
For I’d freeze so deep beneath
That cold Arctic Sea!


Written 10/9/15  in the 7/5 Trochee form for the Narwhal Contest of Skat

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Line Gauthier April 13, 2018 at 9:35 PM Great freeflowing bit of whimsy. Well done, Andrea.

Skat A October 28, 2015 at 1:36 AM Andrea, Congratulations on your Awesome Narwhal WIN. I'm inviting you on over to my Narwhal Party. AT -- http://www.poetrysoup.com/poetry_blogs/blog_detail.aspx?BlogID=29146&PoetID=17922 -- Don't be a party pooper, bring a smile or two. :-) Forever ~SKAT~

Alexis Y. October 28, 2015 at 12:50 AM Andrea, I remember this piece. It ignited my imagination and it caused me to see a beautiful picture.Congratulations on your win :-)Alexis 7

Keith Bickerstaffe October 14, 2015 at 5:21 PM I love it! A super tale of fantasy and delight perfectly written with cool rhyming and superb cadence! BRAVO Andrea!! Best wishes, Keith

Daver Austin October 14, 2015 at 10:59 AM I agree. October is a time for unicorns and magic things. Love, daver

Angie Thomas October 13, 2015 at 12:31 AM Even I wanna be around unicorns... The are so cute :) very sweet poem with great imagery :)

Cherl Dunn October 12, 2015 at 11:59 AM Dear Andrea A superbly descriptive write, I want to swim with these beautiful creatures of the deep underwater unicorns of magnificence, love it you've capture their elegance, and loving disposition, bravo good luck in the contest my friend, cheri

CayCay Godwin October 11, 2015 at 6:31 PM Very playful, upbeat and joyous - I love the rhymes and the flow. Good luck, it is truly delightful ... CayCay

Afolabi Muideen October 11, 2015 at 5:14 PM The flow of your write depicted imagery that brought it beauty to the readers mind ans sense......I love the way you conveyed your message Andrea. I hope to see this in the winner list....your write intrigued me immensely. So glad that I dropped by to read. Excellent one............A.M.

John Loving Iii October 11, 2015 at 3:57 PM I like the respect that you had for the wonderous creature in being carefull to write something beautiful. the cartoon was great also.

Connie Marcum Wong October 11, 2015 at 2:32 PM These are such beautiful unique creatures Andrea. I never knew their name but have seen pictures of them. They seem mythological. A great entry for the contest my friend!

Nette Onclaud October 11, 2015 at 2:08 PM how child-like and composed with such flair, andie... SKAT will enjoy this as much as i did.. huggs

Jennifer Walker October 11, 2015 at 11:35 AM Delightful creature of the sea, great write about them and yes, you would freeze swimming with them.

Alexis Y. October 11, 2015 at 9:49 AM Andrea, your well written piece made me want to join the unicorns. Good luck in the contest:-) Alexis 7

Constance La France October 11, 2015 at 9:19 AM Andrea, this is a charming poem about these mysterious and wonderful creatures, 7, and thanks for visiting my poem, Halloween moon . . .

Duke Beaufort October 11, 2015 at 8:23 AM Amazing things are out there! How did you happen to find out about these? I did check out the video--funny sense of humor there too. We live on a wondrous planet. It's very good of you to share these things with us!! Andrea Dietrich October 11, 2015 at 8:42 AM duke, it's from Skat's contest!! She is the one who told us about them!

Monterey Sirak October 11, 2015 at 6:10 AM So creative and imaginative. I love it!

Jan Allison October 11, 2015 at 3:49 AM Absolutely delightful Andrea - this will do well for you in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Kp Nunez October 10, 2015 at 10:47 PM I imagine you had good fun writing this, Andie. Goodluck in that contest! PS. Will certainly do as you suggested. Been here on and off today. Don't know until when this schedule will last, maybe until New Year. hugs!