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contest It Started with a Blank Canvas

sponsor Silent One

What was I when the canvas was blank, and your eyes invited me to find silent meanings? you became a note played on my guitar in candlelight desire your welcomed fiery glow dripped on the sense of my loneliness passionate, burning, hungry like melted wax on a candle stick or was it all a hallucination, blowing across my desert? where I wandered on false promises tethered to you in time wasted with beds in empty rooms where passion was a hunger met devoured by the teeth of our starving souls leaving us drained and unfulfilled like two drunken lovers drinking from an empty bottle we left on the side of our gravel road from our pitiful lives as what was became a memory of scattered debris and distant thoughts that will vanish in time

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Date: 2/26/2024 11:59:00 AM
My dear friend I loved how your poem portrayed the remnants of what was become nothing more than scattered debris and distant thoughts, destined to vanish in the relentless march of time. In its exploration of love, longing, and loss, "What Was I" offers a poignant reflection on the transient nature of human connection and the inevitability of change. ... Excellent take on the contest.. Congratulations on your first place..
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Frederic Parker
Date: 2/26/2024 3:55:00 PM
Thank you SO, sometimes I think so few understand my writing, you were spot on...thank you for the placement
Date: 2/26/2024 11:57:00 AM
- Through life we put colors on the canvas ... which will disappear with time, in the dust - Congratulations on your top first place in the contest, Frederic :) - An excellent poem :) - hugs ?
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Frederic Parker
Date: 2/26/2024 3:53:00 PM
thank you Anne for your kindness
Date: 2/19/2024 6:15:00 PM
Frederic, dear friend, dear poet, your verse is profound. A blank canvas is white, pristine, ready for color, texture, a vibrant life within the frame.. but not this canvas. I especially admired "where passion was a hunger met/devoured by the teeth of our starving souls/leaving us drained and unfulfilled/like two drunken lovers drinking from an empty bottle". The deep dark imagery paints over the white with black despair. A potent pulsing poem of regrets and the wish to forget. Your brilliant pen shines. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Frederic Parker
Date: 2/20/2024 7:17:00 AM
Susan dear poet, dear friend thank you for the kindness of your poetic heart, as we cross the journey of our lives with poetic verse and try to express our emotional realms with the words from our soul always seeking the perfect picture to paint on a blank canvas...Frederic
Date: 2/19/2024 12:07:00 PM
This is it dear frederick, youve actually written what i had in mind for the prompt too; in such eloquence and in an impeccable manner: i can already tell silent one will love this one! And your words just flow in such a soulful and passionate manner with seamless flow! A fave this is for me! BOL
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