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It Flew Away

A smiling dancing singing bird one day Came in cool colors in a rhythmic sway Hugged the pink twigs of a bleeding heart Pleasant current of warm air playing under the shirt Unfortunately I hesitated a little and the bird flew away ----------------------------------------------------------- February 25, 2016

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 3/15/2016 11:07:00 AM

Probir Gupta, Congrats on your "Fragment Of Life" win. Luv ~LINDA~ :)

Probir Gupta
Date: 3/15/2016 12:06:00 PM

Thanks *LINDA* .......Luv Probir

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 3/8/2016 10:46:00 PM

Delightful poetry Probir.. congrats on big win!

Probir Gupta
Date: 3/9/2016 12:18:00 AM

Big win indeed ! ! Thank you. ..

Susan Gentry

Date: 3/8/2016 7:14:00 AM

Congratulations on your win! I could almost feel as if I was in that 'fragment of life' with you. Great imagery!

Probir Gupta
Date: 3/8/2016 7:50:00 AM

Great ! Thank you.....

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/7/2016 3:48:00 PM

ahhh, this is so sweet. Love it, and congrats for your win.

Probir Gupta
Date: 3/8/2016 5:21:00 AM

Thank you dear friend....

Lu Loo

Date: 3/7/2016 10:24:00 AM

Probir, congrats on your placement in the contest :)-luloo *smiles*

Probir Gupta
Date: 3/7/2016 10:47:00 AM

Thank you...

Timothy Hicks

Date: 2/27/2016 5:48:00 PM

This was really amusing, Probir. The image of a bird getting tangled in your shirt was playfully done. Though you could take it literally, I can also see a possible other meaning, where it's an analogy for love that "snatches you", but then eventually flies away ... such is the fleeting moments of life. I think the three -ing words, in a row, in the first line is a bit awkward for me to say out loud, but other than that, I enjoyed this poem.

Probir Gupta
Date: 2/28/2016 3:38:00 AM

Yes, now that you have said, the three --ing words sound awkward to me too. The missed moment suggestion is the nucleus. Thanks.