Wilma Neels Poet Blank verse

'invisible'

the markings are all gone
washed away 
invisible 
and yet they are still so evident 

etched into my mind 
every piece 
perfectly fitted until
that day 

the water came down 
chaos 
confusion 
panic 

the water swept away
everything familiar

blank faces staring back at me
am I invisible too 

they walked right through me 

my thoughts suspended
my footsteps halted 
my breathing - 

am I even alive?

©Wilma Neels 210420121710

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William Darnell Sr July 22, 2020 at 12:51 PM Hi Wilma. Wow, such writing. Well penned, my friend. I had to reread it, and I think it will be in my favorites now. I really need to come on more often and start reading everyone's poetry. Such a pleasure reading this, thank you. Have a beautiful day. Best of Wishes, William

Richard Lamoureux July 15, 2015 at 9:37 AM I enjoyed your winning poem!

Skat A July 14, 2015 at 11:44 PM Wilma, congratulations on your win. **SKAT**

Lee Carter July 14, 2015 at 11:32 PM I enjoyed your poem congrats on your win!

Kelly Deschler July 14, 2015 at 10:42 PM I think everyone can relate to this poem. I know that I can. We've all had days when we felt invisible or out of place... A very emotive and deeply moving write, Wilma. Congrats on the win!

Poet Destroyer A January 31, 2015 at 9:56 AM WILMA , Congratulations on having your poem featured on the soups home page. ~Always & Forever~ LINDA

Ronny Madonsela May 20, 2012 at 1:12 PM the first poem i ever posted here was of the same title , very strong and honest jst like yours. I realy enjoyed this . Ronny

Joe Maverick May 2, 2012 at 2:01 PM A very strong write on reality and understanding life events Wilma..Really enjoyed your words here:)

Debra Squyres April 23, 2012 at 11:24 AM Out of body or spirit?? Very mysterious write. Enjoyed !!

Carol Sunshine Brown April 23, 2012 at 5:41 AM Thank you for reading and commenting on my poetry. It is always a pleasure to be able to read yours Wilma. Love, Carol

Katie Telling April 22, 2012 at 8:14 PM This is great wilma, it immediately caught my attention from the first stanza... I look forward to reading more of your poetry :)

Michael J. Falotico April 22, 2012 at 3:05 PM This is am amazing piece. Every thought I have on it is commented below lol. That's a good thing. Very happy to be reading my CTH today. Luv just Michael

Harry Horsman April 22, 2012 at 3:31 AM wow Wilma, this is good, can really feel every emotion. harry

Michael Smith April 21, 2012 at 11:09 PM Yes, I know this feeling and you brought out into words perfectly. Thanks for the comment on The Melting Candle. You hit the meaning onne the head.

Andrea Dietrich April 21, 2012 at 8:55 PM wow, I had the same thought come to me as Elliot down here. This is really good, Wilma. How's it going, sweetie?

Elliott Bowe The Drunken Poet April 21, 2012 at 7:56 PM WOW..Immaculate write.Deeply enjoyed...

Anne-Lise Andresen April 21, 2012 at 2:10 PM Not to many words but deep and meaningful lines. - Have a lovely weekend Wilma. - oxox love Anne-Lise

David Williams April 21, 2012 at 12:59 PM Wilma you are certainly alive writing words like these, superb, have a great weekend..David

Nette Onclaud April 21, 2012 at 10:55 AM wilms, i was immediately drawn into your world by the end of the first line... a mystical piece so wonderfully written!..:) huggs

Kash Poet April 21, 2012 at 9:38 AM An insightful write by you Wilma.Enjoyed the read.

Joyce Johnson April 21, 2012 at 9:18 AM Well expressed poem. Nicely done. Love, Joyce