Intruder

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* Fictional write about one on the outside looking in:-) Enjoy

Why do I feel like an intruder looking in? Who wrote the script? Who is the producer? Why is my part so minute? I long to be your leading lady. Why does she have the starring role? Why was I not chosen for the part? I fell for you along time ago, we were friends. Everytime she's near you I want to yell cut from the depths of my tortured soul. I want to be the star in our epic love story. I want to be your leading lady always. *minute extremely small, as in size, amount, extent, or degree: minute differences. of minor importance; insignificant; trifling. attentive to or concerned with even the smallest details: a minute examination. Alexis Y. 11-7-18

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Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 11/21/2018 9:44:00 PM

Real cool style poetry, Alexis. I love how your words speak love low ... down-to-earth flow. Keep on keeping it on the real side. Pure poetry, my talented ink friend. Love and best wishes for the holidays.

Carole Duet

Date: 11/19/2018 2:26:00 PM

I know the feeling, Alexis. Almost all of us have been there and this poem expresses those feelings of pain and jealousy perfectly.

Robert Lindley

Date: 11/8/2018 4:57:00 PM

The sad depths of unrequited love. Any that have so loved and look back upon it know the heartbreak. Truly superb poetry my dear friend.. A fav...

Joseph May

Date: 11/8/2018 3:15:00 PM

The torture of playing second fiddle...Beautiful write Alexis..

Vijay Pandit

Date: 11/8/2018 2:00:00 PM

Fictional it may be--but it does speak to real life. Wonderfully expressed feelings of being left out when ignored by someone one loves. She will soon get the leading role. Well written, Alexis.

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 11/8/2018 11:39:00 AM

In my book you are a leading lady my dear friend, Alexis! Hugs

Chris Green

Date: 11/7/2018 1:45:00 PM

You are a star on the poetic stage my friend. I liked this a lot, you shine brightly without a spotlight. :)

Alexis Y.
Date: 11/8/2018 10:56:00 AM

Hi Chris, If I don't get another comment your comment is much appreciated. I value your continued support:-) Alexis