Mel Merrill Poet Couplet

Into the Sunlight

My eyes recoil from the light--
Too long sheltered by the night.
The darkness, although cold may be,
Permits the timid eye to see.
And I have seen a billion stars--
The Milky Way, the Moon and Mars.
What can I see when it is day?
One shining star, too far away.
While love, that favored mystery,
She lurks in darkness, cautiously.
And though I crave the warmth of day;
The gentle rinse of beam and ray,
I find myself consumed by night...
Still sheltered from the sun, and light.

Into the Sunset Contest
Sponsor: Shadow Hamilton
05/08/14

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Ivor Kos May 21, 2014 at 3:40 PM The imagery and thoughts here are elegantly charming. I'm delighted with this one. Mel Merrill May 21, 2014 at 10:50 PM Thank you, Ivo. It's always nice when someone reads and appreciates a write, as you know. Your comment is both inspiring and uplifting. I don't have the following some do, but if even one person likes my stuff, I guess it's worth writing. Peace, my friend...mel :)

Carolyn Devonshire May 17, 2014 at 2:29 PM What a magnificent write, Mel. You took a unique approach, preferring night to sun, and it worked very well in your lovely sonnet. Congratulations on your win! Carolyn Mel Merrill May 18, 2014 at 12:30 AM Thank you so much Carolyn. I did go the other way with this write, and it cost me a win. I could have easily penned some verbiage about a beautiful sunny day, but I didn't feel like it; judges be damned. I write what I feel, and if I win, great! If not, I've said what I want to say. Thanks again, my sweet for the visit and the kind words...xxx...mel

Joseph May May 17, 2014 at 6:25 AM Great write and win Mel....congrats Mel Merrill May 17, 2014 at 2:07 PM Thank you Jo for dropping by and commenting. Thanks also for the congrats, though I don't get too excited about 10th place. Would you consider that a win? Maybe it's me. I am honored to among those who did win, however. Have a great weekend, my friend...mel

Mel Merrill May 17, 2014 at 12:25 AM Hi Faye. That's the way to express it if that's what I wished to express--and it was. Why not give the night its due, it comforts me and it shelters you. Night gives me sleep and gives me dreams, and stirs my soul with moonlight's beams. Thanks for the visit, my good friend Hugs...mel

Faye Gibson May 16, 2014 at 3:46 PM Hello, Mel! Lovely poem. I love the way you go into subjects from the "back side." Don't know if that is really the way to express it, but love your poetry. Congratulations. Mel Merrill May 17, 2014 at 12:27 AM Hi Faye, I've done it again. I posted the reply to your comment just above yours. I hope you can find it...mel

Barbara Gorelick May 16, 2014 at 9:00 AM Hey...clever man to work with the night...we are both Californians..but I have lived in Oregon..and just loved it. but then, I love the rain...lol. Well done Cuz. BG( Misssss Merrill) Mel Merrill May 16, 2014 at 1:36 PM That's funny, I'm probably going to be moving to Oregon in the next month, or two--wine country. My best friend lives there and says it's beautiful. I like the sun, though, so I'm a little worried. maybe we'll meet up sometime for a reunion. Yeah, and I give a poetry reading and put everyone to sleep. Thanks for the visit, missss Merrill. You really should have kept your name! Hugs...mel

Shadow Hamilton May 16, 2014 at 4:41 AM Mel so beautiful ty for your support congrats on win hugs Mel Merrill May 17, 2014 at 2:04 PM Btw, I didn't know the results of the Sunlight contest till today...I'm a goof. I should have gone a different way with that write; I may have scored higher. Honored to be among the winners in any case. Thanks for sponsoring...xxx...mel Mel Merrill May 16, 2014 at 1:39 PM And you. Good thing there was more than one top spot, cuz you would have beaten me :) Your poem reflects a good deal of thought and effort; glad you won. Hugs...xxx...mel

Lily Twinkle May 13, 2014 at 10:42 AM I like how you approach the theme in this Contest ;) interesting way of perceiving this. Mel Merrill May 13, 2014 at 11:31 AM I began, not knowing where I was headed, but after the first line, I knew. I thought it would be interesting to make night the good guy. I'm glad you appreciate this unusual write...xxx...mel

Mustapha Mohammed May 11, 2014 at 4:23 AM How I envy you, I wished I had thought about this poem before you. Diligent romantic stuff! Mel Merrill May 11, 2014 at 10:55 AM I know the feeling. It's frustrating when someone pens a poem just before you get the chance. I'm quite sure, however, you have ideas enough for two :) Thank you for the visit. It means a lot! All the good things, my friend...mel

Joseph May May 10, 2014 at 8:34 AM Great write Mel...well crafted... Mel Merrill May 10, 2014 at 9:28 PM Thank you Joseph. Glad you liked it. Have a great mom's day, my friend...mel

Andrea Dietrich May 9, 2014 at 4:33 PM wowowow, this is really good!!!! I love that one line: "the gentle rinse of beam and ray" it's so unique. Your meter is superb and I just love the content of this poem. one small thing. Spell "shining" without two n's. I think Shadow will love this one. Mel Merrill May 10, 2014 at 1:53 AM Hey, thank you. I hate typos, and I'll give you a buck for every time you spot one. Thank you for reading this and for saying such sweet and inspiring things. I get a little flat sometimes, but visits like yours pick me up. You're the best, Andrea. I'll drop by your place tomorrow. Break out the cookies and milk :) Peace...mel

Eileen Manassian May 9, 2014 at 10:00 AM :) Mel Merrill May 9, 2014 at 2:50 PM Only a smile, but a lovely one. I'll be dropping by your page tonight, when it's dark, and quiet and I can concentrate...xxx...mel

Brooke Dylan May 9, 2014 at 6:46 AM Mel this is a wonderful poem full of emotion... with lots of mystery ... these two lines oh wow..While love, that favored mystery, She lurks in darkness, cautiously.... great lies.. great words.. I am in awe dear kind sir.. good luck the contest hugs Brooke

Casarah Nance May 9, 2014 at 6:42 AM Wow. You have amazed me yet again babe. Mel Merrill May 10, 2014 at 1:48 AM That's what happens when you're amazing :) But then, you would know...xxx...mel

Connie Marcum Wong May 9, 2014 at 4:17 AM Wow Mel, this poem is special. I love the emotion expressed when being drawn between night and day.Brilliantly written and rhymed. I am sure this is going to do very well in the contest. Mel Merrill May 9, 2014 at 4:57 AM My reply to your comment is stupidly attached to my reply to Connie's comment. Hope you can find it. Put a fork in me--I'm done! Mel Merrill May 9, 2014 at 4:54 AM David, it's been a long day/night. My reply to your helpful comment is above. Hope you can find it...mel Mel Merrill May 9, 2014 at 4:50 AM Thank you David, for the read and constructive criticism--which I value and appreciate. Funny you caught that, as I argued with myself over that very point. Then, having made that revision (for the better), I made several others, and have a stronger write because of it. I appreciate the help...mel Mel Merrill May 9, 2014 at 4:44 AM Thank you Connie. Nuts! I wish you had read a minute ago, as I made several changes, which, I think, enhance the write. Then again, what do I know :) Thanks again, my dear...xxx...mel

David Williams May 9, 2014 at 4:17 AM Mel, a very cool write with some excellent images, the only thing I would change is the archaic word 'doth' apart from that, very good, good luck in the contest....David Mel Merrill May 9, 2014 at 4:51 AM I did it again! I hate myself :)