Into the Gloaming

The sky prepares the sun for night
where drifting clouds are slowly steeping 
in tepid pools of waning light
where soon the moon will find her sleeping

above a field of wild blooms 
where evening shade is gently seeping
into the brush where sunset looms
beyond the reach of shadows creeping

along the ground where light rescinds 
past silver groves of willows weeping
teardrop-leaves that ride the wind   
to dusty skies where stars need sweeping.

Through the trees, the breeze is roaming
like a breath into the gloaming.


Written: 7/29/2013
For Andrea's "One in Three" contest

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013



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Date: 9/1/2013 1:12:00 PM
Heather, I love this poem. Every line, every word. This poem is magical. A true masterpiece. You've done well. I wish I could rate this a ten but the rating only goes up to seven.
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Date: 8/21/2013 11:11:00 AM
Hey gal! This is major cool! Nature is hard for some folks, but not for you...It was good to hear from ya....Caleb
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Date: 8/9/2013 7:44:00 PM
congratulations...........SKAT
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Date: 8/9/2013 10:49:00 AM
Ahh!! Excellent poetic quality..Congrats on your winning work..Sara
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Date: 8/9/2013 9:10:00 AM
congrats on a fine win
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Date: 8/9/2013 6:23:00 AM
Enjoyed reading this winning piece again. Congratulations Heather.
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Date: 8/9/2013 1:08:00 AM
gosh, I had no clue you did this one, Heather. Usually you do not do sonnets, right? thanks so much for this one. The "eeping" rhyme throughout could have sounded bad coming from another quill, but from your hand, it was beautiful! Congrats.
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Jon A Cavanaugh
Date: 9/1/2013 1:08:00 PM
Wow, Andrea if you hadn't used that beautiful line from Heather's poem and mentioned it I would has missed this incredibly masterful poem. What an absolutely wonderful poetic picture she has painted with her pen. I absolutely adore this poem.
Date: 8/8/2013 9:48:00 PM
it is nice,,, congrats... PD
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Date: 8/2/2013 9:05:00 AM
Thank you much for responding so quickly to my spur-of-the-moment message. I will assuredly look into some of these poets. And thanks for the clarification on Dante Gabriel; I dislike it when I forget something like that I am sure I should remember.
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Date: 8/2/2013 9:01:00 AM
Lovely verses here. It seems to me that it gradually builds the beauty and complexity of the scene until the final couplet, where all is concluded in impeccable manner. Is it not uncanny how alike our gloaming poems are? A sonnet about weeping willows, and the same subject heading to boot. I was at a friend's house, and when I saw this huge weeping willow in their yard with a swing on it, I knew that I had to write a poem about it. So I sat on the swing and watched the gloaming, and voila!
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Date: 8/1/2013 8:09:00 AM
'to dusty skies where stars need sweeping'...Oh mercy me Heather...Now if I just knew what 'gloaming' meant (Now where did I put my dictionary?)
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Heather Ober
Date: 8/1/2013 8:53:00 AM
Tim, that is one of my favourite songs of ALL time. So happy to hear that comparison :) Thank you!
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Tim Ryerson
Date: 8/1/2013 8:13:00 AM
That line kinda reminds me of George Harrison...'I look at the floor and I see it needs sweeping, still my guitar gently weeps'...
Date: 8/1/2013 6:43:00 AM
Lovely poem, Heather! Wonderfully penned :D xoxo Dipika
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Date: 7/30/2013 6:08:00 AM
This is very besutiful Heather..I'm sure Andrea is gonna love it..Your verses above sprinkle a splash in calm beauty
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Date: 7/29/2013 5:18:00 PM
this is so good Heather of course that is no surprise coming from your talented soul.
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Date: 7/29/2013 11:36:00 AM
beautiful earthy sound to this, heatherr... and waxed quite well as images float in praise of night's wonder...i am impressed!..:) huggs
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Date: 7/29/2013 8:37:00 AM
Mother Nature is applauding grand at you. This was quite enchanting.
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