Into the Gloaming

The sky prepares the sun for night
where drifting clouds are slowly steeping 
in tepid pools of waning light
where soon the moon will find her sleeping

above a field of wild blooms 
where evening shade is gently seeping
into the brush where sunset looms
beyond the reach of shadows creeping

along the ground where light rescinds 
past silver groves of willows weeping
teardrop-leaves that ride the wind   
to dusty skies where stars need sweeping.

Through the trees, the breeze is roaming
like a breath into the gloaming.


Written: 7/29/2013
For Andrea's "One in Three" contest
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013

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Cavanaugh Avatar
September 1, 2013 at 1:12 PM
Heather, I love this poem. Every line, every word. This poem is magical. A true masterpiece. You've done well. I wish I could rate this a ten but the rating only goes up to seven.
Hunter Avatar
August 21, 2013 at 11:11 AM
Hey gal! This is major cool! Nature is hard for some folks, but not for you...It was good to hear from ya....Caleb
A  Avatar
August 9, 2013 at 7:44 PM
congratulations...........SKAT
Kendrick Avatar
August 9, 2013 at 10:49 AM
Ahh!! Excellent poetic quality..Congrats on your winning work..Sara
May Avatar
August 9, 2013 at 9:10 AM
congrats on a fine win
Lamoureux Avatar
August 9, 2013 at 6:23 AM
Enjoyed reading this winning piece again. Congratulations Heather.
Dietrich Avatar
August 9, 2013 at 1:08 AM
gosh, I had no clue you did this one, Heather. Usually you do not do sonnets, right? thanks so much for this one. The "eeping" rhyme throughout could have sounded bad coming from another quill, but from your hand, it was beautiful! Congrats.
Cavanaugh Avatar
September 1, 2013 at 1:08 PM
Wow, Andrea if you hadn't used that beautiful line from Heather's poem and mentioned it I would has missed this incredibly masterful poem. What an absolutely wonderful poetic picture she has painted with her pen. I absolutely adore this poem.
A   Avatar
August 8, 2013 at 9:48 PM
it is nice,,, congrats... PD
Zerbst Avatar
August 2, 2013 at 9:05 AM
Thank you much for responding so quickly to my spur-of-the-moment message. I will assuredly look into some of these poets. And thanks for the clarification on Dante Gabriel; I dislike it when I forget something like that I am sure I should remember.
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August 2, 2013 at 9:01 AM
Lovely verses here. It seems to me that it gradually builds the beauty and complexity of the scene until the final couplet, where all is concluded in impeccable manner. Is it not uncanny how alike our gloaming poems are? A sonnet about weeping willows, and the same subject heading to boot. I was at a friend's house, and when I saw this huge weeping willow in their yard with a swing on it, I knew that I had to write a poem about it. So I sat on the swing and watched the gloaming, and voila!
Ryerson Avatar
August 1, 2013 at 8:09 AM
'to dusty skies where stars need sweeping'...Oh mercy me Heather...Now if I just knew what 'gloaming' meant (Now where did I put my dictionary?)
Ober Avatar
August 1, 2013 at 8:53 AM
Tim, that is one of my favourite songs of ALL time. So happy to hear that comparison :) Thank you!
Ryerson Avatar
August 1, 2013 at 8:13 AM
That line kinda reminds me of George Harrison...'I look at the floor and I see it needs sweeping, still my guitar gently weeps'...
Syngai Avatar
August 1, 2013 at 6:43 AM
Lovely poem, Heather! Wonderfully penned :D xoxo Dipika
Chircop Avatar
July 30, 2013 at 6:08 AM
This is very besutiful Heather..I'm sure Andrea is gonna love it..Your verses above sprinkle a splash in calm beauty
Lamoureux Avatar
July 29, 2013 at 5:18 PM
this is so good Heather of course that is no surprise coming from your talented soul.
Onclaud Avatar
July 29, 2013 at 11:36 AM
beautiful earthy sound to this, heatherr... and waxed quite well as images float in praise of night's wonder...i am impressed!..:) huggs
Tacito Avatar
July 29, 2013 at 8:37 AM
Mother Nature is applauding grand at you. This was quite enchanting.
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