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Into The Blue

Bowing to the mighty ocean Relentless is her pull, Into the blue depths 'Til she's good and full Ice took it's first shot As steady we ran right in, Sailing along so freely As a whale on his fin Crashing, just scraping by Then onto a dead stop, I write this letter now While I sit safe atop The iron walls creak The frigid waters seep, Tilting the floorboards and The last tears I weep A message in a bottle Dropped into the blue, Do pardon my absence... I shall not be joining you.

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Date: 1/27/2024 7:16:00 PM
Profound and contemplative, as well as aesthetically pleasing, this perspective evokes a sense of introspection. Its imaginative and artistic nature seamlessly guides one's thoughts, and I willingly embraced its direction.
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Date: 1/24/2024 1:00:00 PM
wow deep and pensive as it is beautiful too, a perspective with a sigh !
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Date: 1/22/2024 9:32:00 AM
This is such a well written, captivating poem Kelly. It’s so atmospheric and pulls the reader into the impending tragedy. The line, ‘The last tears I weep’ is so profound, impactful, as is the last line. A very emotive read. Thank you for sharing. Blessings to you :):)
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Date: 1/20/2024 8:57:00 AM
Imaginitive and artful. It flows and I went with it. I'm getting more and more of you.
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Date: 1/19/2024 2:20:00 PM
I loved the sensory feel of you poem, all it's beauty, smells, sounds, and emotions with each one. So pretty, I enjoyed it so much. Your title caught me right off the bat, since I am a true blue fan.
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Date: 1/18/2024 4:26:00 PM
First stanza...oh good a poem about the climate crisis! ...Oh well, I still liked it, Kelly, you old soul, you.
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Date: 1/16/2024 6:56:00 PM
That last line says it all Kelly. Glub, glub. Nice submission
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 4/21/2024 4:26:00 PM
Thank you, Tom. I appreciate it very much... Your contest was a pleasure to participate in and had a most interesting topic to write about :)
Date: 1/14/2024 11:36:00 AM
This is a very clever poem with shades of a limerick. Thank you for a good read.
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 4/20/2024 4:20:00 PM
You're very welcome, Hilda... Thank you for reading. I appreciate that so much :)
Date: 1/11/2024 10:59:00 AM
- Great written, Kelly ... (I thought of, the sinking of the Titanic :) - hugs
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 4/19/2024 5:24:00 PM
Thank you, Anne-Lise ... I appreciate it very much! Hugs :)

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