Jan Allison Poet Personification

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TIM SMITH HAS AMAZED ME AND HAS NOW MADE THIS INTO A SONNET  - HE HAS POSTED IT ON HIS OWN PAGE 

Intimate Relationships

You want me, oh how you want me
Some days I simply can’t wait to turn you on
I leap on to you any time of the day or night
And you always respond to my touch
You crave every inch of my naked body
Then you whisper words to me
Oh how you can hurt me and I wish you would lie to me
But you are always so brutally honest and I admire you for that
Some days I love you 
Other days I would love to ditch you and I never want to see you again
Guess we all have a love hate relationship with our bathroom scales

Jan Allison
30th August 2014
Unable to enter it for contest as it is not a sonnet:

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Just James May 2, 2016 at 1:31 AM Love it... I can see n sonnet Jan Allison October 12, 2016 at 4:48 PM :-) thanks James I'm so sorry I missed replying to this sooner:-( hugs Jan xx

Casarah Nance September 1, 2014 at 11:57 AM hahaha that is hillarious! I dont own a scale, I never wanted to know my numbers, the only number I want to hear is my husbands telling me I'm a perfect 10. cool poem chicky :) Jan Allison September 1, 2014 at 1:19 PM Aww your hubby sounds like a real gem:-) Hugs jan xx Tim did an awesome job rewriting this as a sonnet:-)

Brenda Meier-Hans August 31, 2014 at 10:17 AM Bahahahaha. You had my eyebrows in a steady upward position, m mouth wide open, then those last two words just cracked me up. What a great poem Jan. Jan Allison August 31, 2014 at 12:16 PM Thanks so much Brenda I do love a twist in the end:-) hugs jan xx

Toquyen Harrell August 31, 2014 at 12:30 AM It's more like a hate relationship. Just kidding. The right one will come along haha Jan Allison August 31, 2014 at 4:43 AM LOL Hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich August 30, 2014 at 8:29 PM oh baby how you want me, yes you do./ /Some days I cannot wait to turn you on./ In nakedness, I jump on top of you/ No matter if it's night or early dawn. (ok those are your first four lines, now go for it!!!) Jan Allison August 30, 2014 at 9:07 PM I will work on it for fun lol Hugs Jan xxx

Andrea Dietrich August 30, 2014 at 8:25 PM hahahah, I was thinking to myself, gosh, this many years of marriage and it's still like THIS. And then.... hmmm, it's a lover? hahahaha (I was thinking it was for the confessions contest). the bathroom scale. you are a hoot. you can do this as a sonnet. I just know you can. Jan Allison August 30, 2014 at 9:06 PM LOL I do try and think out of the box - was walking up to my parents and this came into my head so had to get it written on a scrap of paper. Posted it then Tim did a sonnet - hes posted it now:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Sara Kendrick August 30, 2014 at 4:45 PM Ahh!! Great personification..Way to go..Rewrite it into a sonnet..Thanks for the visit..Sara Jan Allison August 30, 2014 at 4:49 PM Tim has re-written it and submitted it to the contest with my blessing Sara:-) hugs Jan xx

Richard Lamoureux August 30, 2014 at 3:32 PM Ha ha, this is cute. I don't even own a bathroom scale. I am probably about 10 pounds over weight but I don't worry about it. I have never been on a diet in my life. Jan Allison August 30, 2014 at 3:37 PM LOl Thanks Richard. i've never dieted either but have lost quite a lot of weight recently - probably stress but its getting checked out:-) hugs jan xx

Dr. Upma A. Sharma August 30, 2014 at 1:35 PM Never mind but it's so very lovely Jan! Impressive expression of sentiment , great great great ! Jan Allison August 30, 2014 at 1:39 PM Thanks Dr Sharma and Tim has done a great job making it into a sonnet:-) Hugs jan xxx

Maurice Yvonne August 30, 2014 at 12:43 PM By the way why don't you rewrite the same poem as a sonnet. I did that with the through the mist contest. also if this helps to encourage the re-write. You should know I lost that contest. Maurice Yvonne August 31, 2014 at 9:39 AM i know a good international lawyer. i like the way you spoke in code. but i hear plagerism in your words. we'll wait until he wins then we'll sue and add that trophy to your collection. wink wink say no more say no more. Jan Allison August 30, 2014 at 12:49 PM Tim has already re-written it and posted it on his page with my blessing I think he did a great job and if he wins the contest it would be excellent. Hugs Jan xx

Maurice Yvonne August 30, 2014 at 12:39 PM wow i love the imagery. it is so clear and so simple to understand. i really like relationship poetry. it's wonderful that the narrator is married to a scale. we've come a long way in our society. reminds me of cultures that live in the mountains where men are men and the sheep are nervous. Jan Allison August 30, 2014 at 12:47 PM Ha Ha Ha Maurice you do make me smile with your witty comments. How do you scare a welsh sheep... shout naked farmer - oh boy it makes them run so fast:-) hugs Jan xxx

Eileen Manassian August 30, 2014 at 9:31 AM :) I loved this Jan. I was wondering what was going on until that last line! ;) Jan Allison August 30, 2014 at 11:45 AM I decided to think out of the box for the contest and realised i couldn't submit it as i hadn't read the rules and it had to be a sonnet but Tim has done an amazing job and surprised me with a great sonnet so he hopefully will enter that:-) Hugs Jan xx

John Lawless August 30, 2014 at 8:57 AM The scales that break my heart are "fish scales"....they're either too light or too short to keep. Nice write, loved the humor, thanks for the chuckle. Jan Allison August 30, 2014 at 11:43 AM LOl John and the one that got away was a whopper I guess! thanks for the comment it made me smile too:-) hugs Jan xxx

Tim Smith August 30, 2014 at 8:08 AM Brilliant Jan....I don't even own a scale.....hugs Tim Jan Allison August 30, 2014 at 8:11 AM LOL I am sure most women do own them and have a lot hate relationship with them - mine shows me I need to put weight on! Hugs Jan xx