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As a misty autumn succumbs to winters harsh chilling grasp. The sky turns bleak and hues of shrouding grey. The ominous days unfold shorter and colder. The remnants of vegetation lie pitifully withered and sparse, as nature rests dead and in the throws of decay. Early morning frost like sprinkled powder smothers a barren land and shards of ice hang from naked trees as fingers of a hand.   Dew drops appear like goose bumps, along a parade of wrinkly naked trees. Bare branches and rooftops seem lifeless, as birds have no desire for frosty serenades. Trampled iced leaves, decay in ashen damp air, as snail-like sluggish humanity adorns its seasonal fleece. Despite winter's scentless bitter breaths, the soul ignites an internal bonfire - radiating a vigilant glow to the surface. Silent One collaboration with Peter Dome. 13 November 2020 Thank you Peter for this brilliant collaboration. Peter is a very talented poet, please check out his poetry.

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Date: 1/13/2021 12:39:00 PM
The poem is perfect and surprising, worthy of study and even imitation. My one qualm is the use of the word wrinkle. It's not that I don't like the word with reference to time, as in "A Wrinkle in Time" but as it refers to the diminuitive in emotive capacity I ve never liked the word, itself
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Silent One
Date: 1/14/2021 7:21:00 AM
Thank you for your feedback, wrinkle, in this instance, actually refers to the bark of trees...
Date: 11/16/2020 6:24:00 AM
SO, you and Peter have provided your readers a magnificent blend of literal and figurative language, engendering winter shivers--but ending on a positive note! Janice
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Silent One
Date: 11/17/2020 1:22:00 PM
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Date: 11/15/2020 9:58:00 AM
Ah, Silent One and Peter, such a warm enlightening end to a poem lush with emotion, imagery and metaphoric beauty. I admire how your brilliant title interacts wonderfully with the body of your poem. Two talented pens combined for a great collaboration! Congratulations to you both for your worthy recognition with well-deserved POTD honors.. I enjoyed the musical accompaniment chosen for your poem as well. Warmest wishes my inspiring friend.. ~Susan
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Silent One
Date: 11/15/2020 12:01:00 PM
Thank you..
Date: 11/14/2020 7:44:00 PM
Chilly ... ... ... ... ... ... ... ... ... ... ... WINTER
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Silent One
Date: 11/15/2020 8:28:00 AM
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Date: 11/14/2020 6:41:00 PM
"Early morning frost like sprinkled powder smothers a barren land" Such a chilling image indeed. Brrr, it does get very cold in Winter. You and Peter have created a masterpiece. I may need some hot chocolate after reading these words. :) Brandy
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Silent One
Date: 11/15/2020 8:28:00 AM
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Date: 11/14/2020 5:56:00 PM
Great collaboration! So much detail in this well written poem :)
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Silent One
Date: 11/15/2020 8:28:00 AM
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Date: 11/14/2020 1:01:00 PM
Silent, a beautiful collaboration with Peter, you both did so well, and the music you chose is divine, a FAV for me _Constance
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Silent One
Date: 11/15/2020 8:28:00 AM
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Date: 11/14/2020 12:41:00 PM
A wonderful collaboration with Winter haunting the landscape. Well done to you and Peter!
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Silent One
Date: 11/15/2020 8:28:00 AM
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Date: 11/14/2020 11:20:00 AM
You added an encouraging comment on one of my poems. Thank you. I read this one of yours, fantastic and very much the style I like to read and try to write.
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Silent One
Date: 11/15/2020 8:28:00 AM
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Date: 11/14/2020 10:52:00 AM
Hi. Hope yer ok. I'm thrilled. Poem of the day hurrah!!!.Thank you.
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Silent One
Date: 11/15/2020 8:29:00 AM
Really happy for you peter, you are a poet that deserves to have his poetry read.
Date: 11/14/2020 7:05:00 AM
WoW!Silent, I just read this amazing write on Peter’s page. You two have penned a good collaboration. I love nature writes. The metaphors, content and imagery were top notch. Well done. Congratulations on another poem of the day collaboration! Have a wonderful day and weekend:-) Alexis
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Silent One
Date: 11/14/2020 9:23:00 AM
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Date: 11/14/2020 5:09:00 AM
At the risk of typing it again, I'll say I'm being fair with my congratulations on another potd collaboration. sly smile here
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Jenna Logan
Date: 11/14/2020 6:03:00 AM
It's because of the comment I made on your last shared potd.
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Silent One
Date: 11/14/2020 5:48:00 AM
Thank you..I'm so happy for Peter getting POTD... But why the sly smile?
Date: 11/13/2020 9:28:00 PM
Cool title and great word choices throughout the poem. I will check out Peter's poetry as well.
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Silent One
Date: 11/14/2020 5:48:00 AM
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Date: 11/13/2020 7:06:00 PM
Indeed, Peter is a talented poet and I so enjoyed seeing your collaboration with him.
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Silent One
Date: 11/14/2020 5:48:00 AM
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Date: 11/13/2020 4:39:00 PM
This is a beautiful poem that inspires my heart and soul to read between the lines of "winter's gray" into the heartbeat of sparkling frosts that enchant and awaken the muse in my spirit! Love this! God bless you both for writing such a wonderful and enchanting poem
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Silent One
Date: 11/14/2020 5:48:00 AM
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Date: 11/13/2020 4:35:00 PM
Another excellent collaboration, Silent One. You present Winter in its true form, which I'm dreading :)
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Silent One
Date: 11/14/2020 5:49:00 AM
A lot of people dread winter..Thank you
Date: 11/13/2020 3:45:00 PM
Lovely
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Silent One
Date: 11/14/2020 5:49:00 AM
Thanks
Date: 11/13/2020 1:34:00 PM
Now I know why I struggle so much at this time of year , with all that decay and deadness, for it is so depressing, but so very well expressed within this fine collaboration SO. With kindest thoughts Ann xx
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Silent One
Date: 11/14/2020 5:49:00 AM
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Date: 11/13/2020 1:05:00 PM
A collaboration that needs great attention. Your doing a great job helping unknown poets. ~~
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Silent One
Date: 11/14/2020 5:49:00 AM
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Date: 11/13/2020 10:19:00 AM
A wonderful collaboration! How nice it is to read these warm thoughts on the soul of life and beauty. :)
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Silent One
Date: 11/14/2020 5:49:00 AM
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Date: 11/13/2020 8:53:00 AM
An outstanding collaboration! WOW!!
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Silent One
Date: 11/14/2020 5:50:00 AM
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Date: 11/13/2020 8:41:00 AM
The voice of the syllables in conjunction with the encompassing vivid imagery here, with every word, I’m drawn further into this portrait of the seasons ! Wonderful collaboration ! Cheers gentlemen ! Kim
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Silent One
Date: 11/14/2020 5:50:00 AM
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Date: 11/13/2020 8:40:00 AM
An excellent descriptive collaboration, S-1 & Peter. Even amidst all this sense of autumnal helplessness, a flame still flickers ... hope for days to come. Regards // paul
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Silent One
Date: 11/14/2020 5:50:00 AM
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Date: 11/13/2020 8:10:00 AM
A wonderful collaboration Silent one with Peter, for all its bitter few months within us abides a soul which glows fiercely sending its warmth ot mother earth. Blessings and hugs, Jennifer.
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Silent One
Date: 11/13/2020 8:19:00 AM
Thank you.. I guess winter is not as bad where you are ..
Date: 11/13/2020 6:51:00 AM
I enjoyed your collaboration and being introduced to a new poet. Thanks for your visit.
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Silent One
Date: 11/13/2020 8:18:00 AM
Thank you..
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