Notes About The Poem

 

Internal Bonfire Among Bitter Breaths

As a misty autumn succumbs to winters harsh chilling grasp.
The sky turns bleak and hues of shrouding grey.
The ominous days unfold shorter and colder.

The remnants of vegetation lie pitifully withered and sparse,
as nature rests dead and in the throws of decay.
Early morning frost like sprinkled powder
smothers a barren land
and shards of ice hang from naked trees as fingers of a hand.  

Dew drops appear like goose bumps,
along a parade of wrinkly naked trees.
Bare branches and rooftops seem lifeless,
as birds have no desire for frosty serenades.
Trampled iced leaves, decay in ashen damp air,
as snail-like sluggish humanity adorns its seasonal fleece.

Despite winter's scentless bitter breaths,
the soul ignites an internal bonfire -
radiating a vigilant glow to the surface.

Silent One collaboration with Peter Dome.
13 November 2020

Thank you Peter for this brilliant collaboration. 
Peter is a very talented poet, please check out his poetry.
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Baker Avatar
January 13, 2021 at 12:39 PM
The poem is perfect and surprising, worthy of study and even imitation. My one qualm is the use of the word wrinkle. It's not that I don't like the word with reference to time, as in "A Wrinkle in Time" but as it refers to the diminuitive in emotive capacity I ve never liked the word, itself
One Avatar
January 14, 2021 at 7:21 AM
Thank you for your feedback, wrinkle, in this instance, actually refers to the bark of trees...
Canerdy Avatar
November 16, 2020 at 6:24 AM
SO, you and Peter have provided your readers a magnificent blend of literal and figurative language, engendering winter shivers--but ending on a positive note! Janice
One Avatar
November 17, 2020 at 1:22 PM
Thank you..
Ashley Avatar
November 15, 2020 at 9:58 AM
Ah, Silent One and Peter, such a warm enlightening end to a poem lush with emotion, imagery and metaphoric beauty. I admire how your brilliant title interacts wonderfully with the body of your poem. Two talented pens combined for a great collaboration! Congratulations to you both for your worthy recognition with well-deserved POTD honors.. I enjoyed the musical accompaniment chosen for your poem as well. Warmest wishes my inspiring friend.. ~Susan
One Avatar
November 15, 2020 at 12:01 PM
Thank you..
Devarakonda Avatar
November 14, 2020 at 7:44 PM
Chilly ... ... ... ... ... ... ... ... ... ... ... WINTER
One Avatar
November 15, 2020 at 8:28 AM
Thank you..
Nicole Avatar
November 14, 2020 at 6:41 PM
"Early morning frost like sprinkled powder smothers a barren land" Such a chilling image indeed. Brrr, it does get very cold in Winter. You and Peter have created a masterpiece. I may need some hot chocolate after reading these words. :) Brandy
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November 15, 2020 at 8:28 AM
Thank you..
Sands Avatar
November 14, 2020 at 5:56 PM
Great collaboration! So much detail in this well written poem :)
One Avatar
November 15, 2020 at 8:28 AM
Thank you..
La France Avatar
November 14, 2020 at 1:01 PM
Silent, a beautiful collaboration with Peter, you both did so well, and the music you chose is divine, a FAV for me _Constance
One Avatar
November 15, 2020 at 8:28 AM
Thank you..
Rodrigues Avatar
November 14, 2020 at 12:41 PM
A wonderful collaboration with Winter haunting the landscape. Well done to you and Peter!
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November 15, 2020 at 8:28 AM
Thank you..
Anto Avatar
November 14, 2020 at 11:20 AM
You added an encouraging comment on one of my poems. Thank you. I read this one of yours, fantastic and very much the style I like to read and try to write.
One Avatar
November 15, 2020 at 8:28 AM
Thank you..
Dome Avatar
November 14, 2020 at 10:52 AM
Hi. Hope yer ok. I'm thrilled. Poem of the day hurrah!!!.Thank you.
One Avatar
November 15, 2020 at 8:29 AM
Really happy for you peter, you are a poet that deserves to have his poetry read.
Y. Avatar
November 14, 2020 at 7:05 AM
WoW!Silent, I just read this amazing write on Peter’s page. You two have penned a good collaboration. I love nature writes. The metaphors, content and imagery were top notch. Well done. Congratulations on another poem of the day collaboration! Have a wonderful day and weekend:-) Alexis
One Avatar
November 14, 2020 at 9:23 AM
Thank you..
Logan Avatar
November 14, 2020 at 5:09 AM
At the risk of typing it again, I'll say I'm being fair with my congratulations on another potd collaboration. sly smile here
Logan Avatar
November 14, 2020 at 6:03 AM
It's because of the comment I made on your last shared potd.
One Avatar
November 14, 2020 at 5:48 AM
Thank you..I'm so happy for Peter getting POTD... But why the sly smile?
Ligon Avatar
November 13, 2020 at 9:28 PM
Cool title and great word choices throughout the poem. I will check out Peter's poetry as well.
One Avatar
November 14, 2020 at 5:48 AM
Thank you
Dietrich Avatar
November 13, 2020 at 7:06 PM
Indeed, Peter is a talented poet and I so enjoyed seeing your collaboration with him.
One Avatar
November 14, 2020 at 5:48 AM
Thank you
Mcintosh Avatar
November 13, 2020 at 4:39 PM
This is a beautiful poem that inspires my heart and soul to read between the lines of "winter's gray" into the heartbeat of sparkling frosts that enchant and awaken the muse in my spirit! Love this! God bless you both for writing such a wonderful and enchanting poem
One Avatar
November 14, 2020 at 5:48 AM
Thank you
Crabtree Avatar
November 13, 2020 at 4:35 PM
Another excellent collaboration, Silent One. You present Winter in its true form, which I'm dreading :)
One Avatar
November 14, 2020 at 5:49 AM
A lot of people dread winter..Thank you
Murray Avatar
November 13, 2020 at 3:45 PM
Lovely
One Avatar
November 14, 2020 at 5:49 AM
Thanks
Gilmour Avatar
November 13, 2020 at 1:34 PM
Now I know why I struggle so much at this time of year , with all that decay and deadness, for it is so depressing, but so very well expressed within this fine collaboration SO. With kindest thoughts Ann xx
One Avatar
November 14, 2020 at 5:49 AM
Thank you..
Buhagiar Avatar
November 13, 2020 at 1:05 PM
A collaboration that needs great attention. Your doing a great job helping unknown poets. ~~
One Avatar
November 14, 2020 at 5:49 AM
Thank you
Buehler Avatar
November 13, 2020 at 10:19 AM
A wonderful collaboration! How nice it is to read these warm thoughts on the soul of life and beauty. :)
One Avatar
November 14, 2020 at 5:49 AM
Thank you
Downing  Avatar
November 13, 2020 at 8:53 AM
An outstanding collaboration! WOW!!
One Avatar
November 14, 2020 at 5:50 AM
Thank you
Sikorski Avatar
November 13, 2020 at 8:41 AM
The voice of the syllables in conjunction with the encompassing vivid imagery here, with every word, I’m drawn further into this portrait of the seasons ! Wonderful collaboration ! Cheers gentlemen ! Kim
One Avatar
November 14, 2020 at 5:50 AM
Thank you..
Callus Avatar
November 13, 2020 at 8:40 AM
An excellent descriptive collaboration, S-1 & Peter. Even amidst all this sense of autumnal helplessness, a flame still flickers ... hope for days to come. Regards // paul
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November 14, 2020 at 5:50 AM
Thank you..
Proxenos Avatar
November 13, 2020 at 8:10 AM
A wonderful collaboration Silent one with Peter, for all its bitter few months within us abides a soul which glows fiercely sending its warmth ot mother earth. Blessings and hugs, Jennifer.
One Avatar
November 13, 2020 at 8:19 AM
Thank you.. I guess winter is not as bad where you are ..
Lamoureux Avatar
November 13, 2020 at 6:51 AM
I enjoyed your collaboration and being introduced to a new poet. Thanks for your visit.
One Avatar
November 13, 2020 at 8:18 AM
Thank you..
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