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Inspired By Heartbreak

Waking unbridled offering, eyes open to nostalgic thoughts. Lady Day* sings "Some Other Spring" - by midday light, he's overwrought. Hands brush the dust from typewriter waking unbridled offering. No tryst of words or deeds slight her. He pecks the keys in smokey rings. Those days long gone, one gold earring reminds of when love did persist. Waking unbridled offering - a ticket taunts of red eye missed. Faded lipstick on cigarettes, a full ashtray still inspiring - He types again to not forget, waking unbridled offering. *Billie Holiday's nickname For Craig's Chopped III contest, 11/21/14

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Date: 12/29/2014 9:46:00 AM
So good to see this one on the winners list. Congratulations!
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Date: 12/26/2014 11:01:00 PM
RHONDA, congratulations in Craigs C., chopped contest.... LUV LINDA------ GOODNIGHT
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Date: 12/23/2014 10:11:00 AM
Congratulations on your well deserved win, Rhonda. I remember really liking this one first time I read it. Merry christmas
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Date: 12/23/2014 9:46:00 AM
Wonderful to see your name in the winners' list..Way to go..Congrats..Sara
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Date: 12/22/2014 9:04:00 PM
Congrats on ur winning awesome write Rhonda!
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Date: 12/22/2014 7:10:00 AM
'Perhaps still clinging to faded blossoms'...Great write Rhonda...Congrats on your win...beautiful song...
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Date: 12/22/2014 5:36:00 AM
Congratulations on your win Rhonda.
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Date: 12/21/2014 9:49:00 PM
Congratulations on your well deserved win, beautifully fulfilling all the demands of the contest while writing a great poem for good measure.
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Date: 12/21/2014 6:39:00 PM
Rhonda, you made this look so easy to do! Wonderful poem. Congratulations on your win! Sandra
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Date: 12/21/2014 4:58:00 PM
I love the mood you conjure here Rhonda...Billie Holiday was a great addition...big congrats to you
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Date: 12/21/2014 3:47:00 PM
felt like I was stepping back in time with this superb imagery - brilliantly penned Rhonda:-) congrats:-) hugs jan x
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Date: 12/21/2014 1:46:00 PM
congratulations Rhonda on your win, well done
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Date: 12/21/2014 12:03:00 PM
Merry Christmas and congrats on the win Rhonda...huggs
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Date: 11/22/2014 10:21:00 PM
Like walking back in time to romance, lovely!
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Date: 11/22/2014 7:18:00 PM
good writing, dear!! If I am correct, did he he say to put the poem in the last century becuase this one really made me think of the last century.It reminded me of those mystery movies in black and white. You set a really good tone with your poem here.
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Date: 11/22/2014 10:20:00 AM
I never would have thought of using Quatern for this contest, well done.And you mixed in all of the ingredients in such an easy way..good luck
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Date: 11/21/2014 10:08:00 AM
I love the mood you have created with this piece.
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Date: 11/21/2014 8:29:00 AM
Very nice heartbreak inspiration poem Rhonda! enjoyed it!:) Love and hugs! xxx D.
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